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Comment from heyjude
Judy, well-written with very interestimg.characters. they all seem to have their own issues and you pull us in to make us want to know more
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
Judy, well-written with very interestimg.characters. they all seem to have their own issues and you pull us in to make us want to know more
Comment Written 13-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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Thank you , These characters are beginning to really be real to me. I so enjoy your support.
Comment from jlsavell
jusylee72,altohugh I have not read other chapters prior to this, it is written very well and strikes my curiosity to read on. The dialogue and characters are well developed in this work..jlsavell
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
jusylee72,altohugh I have not read other chapters prior to this, it is written very well and strikes my curiosity to read on. The dialogue and characters are well developed in this work..jlsavell
Comment Written 13-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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thank you so much. I truly appreciate when people take the time to read my work. I truly want to keep writing.
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and keep writing you should.... jlsavell
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Great story about something that occurs far to often, especially in the Catholic church. That is not to say that other religions are not guilty too, but when ever the story of abused boys turns up the first thing that comes to mind is the catholic church.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
Great story about something that occurs far to often, especially in the Catholic church. That is not to say that other religions are not guilty too, but when ever the story of abused boys turns up the first thing that comes to mind is the catholic church.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much. Yes, this is a complicated story that I am loving exploring. Thank you for your encouragement. It truly motivates me.
Comment from royowen
Love the characters in this series, it seems they all have some issues, makes for lots of angst and acts of unpredictability, Joe has kissed Mary and she likes it. Before that we have a situation with Jeremy and Marguerite, holding her hand, yet she was a nun. Excellent story, lust, abuse, murder, and fragile people...perfect, well done. Most enjoyable, blessings, Roy
Typo : How can these sweet little boys (not) to have been protected? 2: her parents loved her, yet they were (contolling) controlling?
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
Love the characters in this series, it seems they all have some issues, makes for lots of angst and acts of unpredictability, Joe has kissed Mary and she likes it. Before that we have a situation with Jeremy and Marguerite, holding her hand, yet she was a nun. Excellent story, lust, abuse, murder, and fragile people...perfect, well done. Most enjoyable, blessings, Roy
Typo : How can these sweet little boys (not) to have been protected? 2: her parents loved her, yet they were (contolling) controlling?
Comment Written 12-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much for everything. The loving comments and I always need help with the spags. It helps so much. These characters are all changing and I am having a great time with it.
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Well done
Comment from winnona
Well I think you did a very good job on this chapter. It is very realistic and well written. the characters come to life for me and I get caught up in the story. I think That when you are done with the book it will be a good one.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
Well I think you did a very good job on this chapter. It is very realistic and well written. the characters come to life for me and I get caught up in the story. I think That when you are done with the book it will be a good one.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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thank you, i constantly am working on making the characters come to life and be real. You made my day happy. Thank you.
Comment from djsaxon
I have come late to this but it remains a good and disturbing read. I have recently completed a novella about child abuse in Australia (not posted because it is entered in a local literary comp). There is an ongoing Royal Commission into child abuse by members of the Catholic Church. My victim doesn't kill people. Cheers - DJ
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
I have come late to this but it remains a good and disturbing read. I have recently completed a novella about child abuse in Australia (not posted because it is entered in a local literary comp). There is an ongoing Royal Commission into child abuse by members of the Catholic Church. My victim doesn't kill people. Cheers - DJ
Comment Written 11-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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Hurray. I am so glad he doesn't kill people. That is why I gave a Joe an abusive Mother as well who shames him when he tells her the truth about the priest. I think that is the turning point in his personality when he truly begins to hate.
Comment from light
I haven't read previous chapters, But I found this one commanding. I had to read it all. I especially liked how you used proper and property. It was a good read.
Elaine
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2016
I haven't read previous chapters, But I found this one commanding. I had to read it all. I especially liked how you used proper and property. It was a good read.
Elaine
Comment Written 11-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much. I actually felt that way in my own.life. I got tired of people telling me to do things in the Proper way. So Proper is a cuss word in my family to this day.
Comment from Heather Knight
This had me glued to the page, I found it fascinating.
The topic is very sad, but so is life sometimes.
Well written, good dialogues. I have no criticisms.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2016
This had me glued to the page, I found it fascinating.
The topic is very sad, but so is life sometimes.
Well written, good dialogues. I have no criticisms.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2016
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Thank you , The story is really developing. I have so much fun learning about these complicated characters. You just made by day by telling me you wanted to keep reading. Thank you so much.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Even though you have redirected people to your portfolio, I would still put a basic summary on the top of the post with the salient points so far. Many people won't go back and check and then just not bother with this one either. the sad fact is that people want it easy.
The tears came out of no where - nowhere.
Margartie was embarrassed. - Margarite.
She began to cry, not gently, forcibly - need a full stop here at the end.
Be careful of overusing 'was' it is telling rather than showing. Her mind was racing (telling us). Her mind raced (showing - it's happening).
Good dynamics at play between Jeremy & Margarite.
'How in the world do I explain last night. should have a ? You also open up a though with 'How but you never close it off.
A good continuation and a good write.
GMG
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2016
Hi there,
Even though you have redirected people to your portfolio, I would still put a basic summary on the top of the post with the salient points so far. Many people won't go back and check and then just not bother with this one either. the sad fact is that people want it easy.
The tears came out of no where - nowhere.
Margartie was embarrassed. - Margarite.
She began to cry, not gently, forcibly - need a full stop here at the end.
Be careful of overusing 'was' it is telling rather than showing. Her mind was racing (telling us). Her mind raced (showing - it's happening).
Good dynamics at play between Jeremy & Margarite.
'How in the world do I explain last night. should have a ? You also open up a though with 'How but you never close it off.
A good continuation and a good write.
GMG
Comment Written 11-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2016
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I will definitely put a summary. You always help me so much. I will make the changes.