Comment from winnona

Excellent

I think you completed the challenge of the contest well. Your words are simple,direct and to the point. The photo and background color complete your poem well. good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2016

Thanks for the read and the comment.

Comment from Wabigoon

Excellent

Pretty...daring, maybe potentially scandalous poem. It is nicely done. The girl in the picture looks...very young, maybe too young for such knowledge, experience. That adds to the ambivalent power of the poem.

Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016

Thanks for the read and your review.

Comment from barkingdog

Excellent

It's a little bit yucky, but you did have a warning. haha
I like the idea of a young girl having innocent Bambi eyes and then her innocence is in a sense eroded as she say, 'We spilled our babies.'

:)e

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016

Thanks for the read and the comment.

Comment from Hayley Solomon

Excellent

Certainly a memory, I am sure!
Poetically...
like the had rhyme of eyes and cried,
the alliteration of the bs, ws and cs.
Good luck for contest.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016

Thank you for the read, Hayley.

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

The photo of this young girl is lovely, and complements your poem perfectly. You wrote in a non-fiction poem that she cried, saying: we spilled our babies: an abortion. I hope it was not about you when you were young. Best wishes for the prompt.

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2016

You may breathe easy it was not an abortion. Thanks for the read.