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Comment from rockinm76233
How sad. Your words tell your story quite well. But, you made it out. Your children were safe and are safe and you all survived. Bless you and yours and thank God he protected you until you could make your escape. But, that being said, I hope your heart has mended, for I know it was broken.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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How sad. Your words tell your story quite well. But, you made it out. Your children were safe and are safe and you all survived. Bless you and yours and thank God he protected you until you could make your escape. But, that being said, I hope your heart has mended, for I know it was broken.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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That was twenty three years ago. I had to grow up and learn to stand up for myself. All of my children are successful and I have a wonderful life. It was a day that I changed our lives.
Comment from the shining star
I decided to give this poem five star because it illustrates very well the need for the poet to stay but rather also the feeling to leave her home was more appealing and seemed as the best option and choice to make thus this poem evokes lots of memories to the poet of decisions made earlier in her life
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2016
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I decided to give this poem five star because it illustrates very well the need for the poet to stay but rather also the feeling to leave her home was more appealing and seemed as the best option and choice to make thus this poem evokes lots of memories to the poet of decisions made earlier in her life
Comment Written 14-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2016
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Yes and it was a great decision. 23 years later I have a wonderful life. I needed to grow up and make decisions for myself. I had so many lessons to learn.
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welcome
Comment from MelB
A well written poem about the devastating effects of abuse. They always keep apologizing, but the behavior doesn't change. This brought back memories for me. Thankfully, I wasn't married to him, so that made it easier to leave.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2016
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A well written poem about the devastating effects of abuse. They always keep apologizing, but the behavior doesn't change. This brought back memories for me. Thankfully, I wasn't married to him, so that made it easier to leave.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2016
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Yes, That was the day I took the first step to life. 23 years later life is wonderful. All the children not only survived but are amazingly successful. I needed to grow up and start making decisions for myself. Anytime there is abuse it is mostly the abusers fault but the victim needs to learn to change and not accept it. Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from winnona
well written. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well. Your choice of words flowed line to line creating their own rhythm then combining to send the message of the poem to the reader. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2016
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well written. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well. Your choice of words flowed line to line creating their own rhythm then combining to send the message of the poem to the reader. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 14-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much. That was 23 years ago and life is wonderful now. I had many lessons to learn.
Comment from janalma
I can feel the heartache in this poem. Tho you needed to leave, the doing is hard. Very effective words to show the stress and care such a thing would entail. Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2016
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I can feel the heartache in this poem. Tho you needed to leave, the doing is hard. Very effective words to show the stress and care such a thing would entail. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2016
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Yes, it was hard to leave. But it was the best decision I ever made. 23 years later my children are successful adults with loving families of their own. I had to grow up and start making decisions on my own.
Comment from Nika2016
OMG....we have been there....
The flowers and everything..I planted lilacs under a full moon...and left....They grew profusely but I was not there to see them. The last time..he went to jail...sad
that it happens..good poem,.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2016
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OMG....we have been there....
The flowers and everything..I planted lilacs under a full moon...and left....They grew profusely but I was not there to see them. The last time..he went to jail...sad
that it happens..good poem,.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2016
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Thank you , I am glad your lilacs lived. I remember how sad I was to leave those flowers. I planted them because I wanted the house and us to be happy. Instead we were in that awful cycle of abuse. I had to grow up and get my children out of there. 23 years later life is wonderful.
Comment from Cindy Warren
That's so sad, but you have to leave or you really could die. I don't know why, but these guys can't stop for long. The abuse always starts again. You were right to get your kids out of there. Best of luck to you.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2016
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That's so sad, but you have to leave or you really could die. I don't know why, but these guys can't stop for long. The abuse always starts again. You were right to get your kids out of there. Best of luck to you.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much. 23 years later my children are successful adults who love their own families and treat them with respect. I am so happy I left. I needed to grow up and make decisions on my own.
Comment from Janet Foor
Bravo! Good for you to have the courage to leave an abusive marriage. Your job is to protect the children and that is never a good life for children to witness or hear their mom being abused and sometimes they are abused too.
I hope life has been good to you since then. It takes courage to do what you did.
Good poem expressing that story.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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Bravo! Good for you to have the courage to leave an abusive marriage. Your job is to protect the children and that is never a good life for children to witness or hear their mom being abused and sometimes they are abused too.
I hope life has been good to you since then. It takes courage to do what you did.
Good poem expressing that story.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 13-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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That was the first step. I made myself grow up and accept life as it was. 23 years later it has more than a happy ending. The children are all successful. Life is wonderfu.
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I'm so happy for you and your family.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from jlsavell
author, if this is a true story, I applaud you, Absolutely and undeniably. Your free verse is intense and filled with victory over such power. You know many, whether it be men or women, stay in an abusive relationship because the outside world is most often scarier and more uncertain than the hell they live in. However, when the hell they live in becomes more frightening than the outside world, only then will they gather their courage and make the transition. The ending of this work ,, superb... jlsavell
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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author, if this is a true story, I applaud you, Absolutely and undeniably. Your free verse is intense and filled with victory over such power. You know many, whether it be men or women, stay in an abusive relationship because the outside world is most often scarier and more uncertain than the hell they live in. However, when the hell they live in becomes more frightening than the outside world, only then will they gather their courage and make the transition. The ending of this work ,, superb... jlsavell
Comment Written 13-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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this is a true story. I stayed six years. That day was the first step and every part of the poem is true. It was actually hard to leave those flowers, ( In real life they were those beautiful elephant ear plants) All of my children have grown up to be successful wonderful people. Life is wonderful.
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I applaud you. How many children? It's a difficult thing to do. You are an inspiration. Thank you for sharing.
Comment from writeapoem
This poem on memorable moments touched me deeply. I remember there was no joy for a little boy when momma took I and my siblings away. My father was abusive toward my mother. I know he loved her, and she him; No violence never toward I and my siblings. But their fighting like a strike of lightning burned our inner beings. Each time she left and each time Momma returned, smile awhile, reflected only a moment of time before he reacted with his raging mind. Finally after 27 years the fruit jar I had stored my tears was the final thing he had thrown. Thanks for sharing a moment that reminded me our God delivers.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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This poem on memorable moments touched me deeply. I remember there was no joy for a little boy when momma took I and my siblings away. My father was abusive toward my mother. I know he loved her, and she him; No violence never toward I and my siblings. But their fighting like a strike of lightning burned our inner beings. Each time she left and each time Momma returned, smile awhile, reflected only a moment of time before he reacted with his raging mind. Finally after 27 years the fruit jar I had stored my tears was the final thing he had thrown. Thanks for sharing a moment that reminded me our God delivers.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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Oh, your story is so real and touching. This story has a happy ending. That day was the first step toward independence. I had to grow up and quit letting people make decisions for me. All three of the children were scared by it , Yet they are now successful adults. Mandy - a lawyer, Matthew a Mechanic for BMW, Nik eighth ranked featherweight in the world who fights on tv in the UFC. And I am a successful teacher who found true love with a kind man. The part about the flowers is true. I hated leaving those plants. I wanted the marriage and the plants to grow. I am so glad I did. My children we also hurt and mad at me but eventually we got through it and are very close today. Thank you for touching my heart with your story.
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Your welcome, Four of the siblings had cancer and passed the last two years. All seven grew to be good fathers and mothers and successful. My mother next summer will be 90. Life is grand. God Bless
