You and Me
you are having a talk with me32 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. You are who you are meant to be and when you decide to accept who you are with all your flaws you can only be happy for who you are.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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A very well-written poem. You are who you are meant to be and when you decide to accept who you are with all your flaws you can only be happy for who you are.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments. Blessings........................
Comment from Bollie
This is an excellent poem with a wonderful message. This poem is very clever and creative with perfect rhyming and a nice flow due to consistent syllable count. Really good job, keep up the good work. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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This is an excellent poem with a wonderful message. This poem is very clever and creative with perfect rhyming and a nice flow due to consistent syllable count. Really good job, keep up the good work. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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Thanks so much for your very kind review and best wishes. Blessings.....................
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You're very welcome. Have a wonderful night.
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You're very welcome. Have a wonderful night.
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You're very welcome. Have a wonderful night.
Comment from dragonpoet
The repeating couplets act as a chorus to the aabb quatrains. It seems this person has let faith give strength to overcome bad treatment.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing
dragonpoet
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The repeating couplets act as a chorus to the aabb quatrains. It seems this person has let faith give strength to overcome bad treatment.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 05-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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Thanks so much for your review and best wishes. Blessings...................
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You are so kindly welcome. God bless you, too.
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Comment from Irish Rain
Interesting how life can turn on a dime...a manager I had at work made me miserable...I had 2 heart attacks, survived, God's grace, now I'm debt free, and retired. And he has years to go....I love who you turned out to be here....God always has the final word....blessings....
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Interesting how life can turn on a dime...a manager I had at work made me miserable...I had 2 heart attacks, survived, God's grace, now I'm debt free, and retired. And he has years to go....I love who you turned out to be here....God always has the final word....blessings....
Comment Written 05-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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Thanks so much for your very kind review and as you so graciously stated "God always has the final word." May God continue to keep you under His loving care. Blessings..........................
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Thank you! You too! God Bless....
Comment from Slythytove2
" All things happen as they should" Marcus Aerillius(sp). Looking back on them now I find I would't change too many thing, except maybe algebra. Good work- keep at it.
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" All things happen as they should" Marcus Aerillius(sp). Looking back on them now I find I would't change too many thing, except maybe algebra. Good work- keep at it.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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Thanks so much for your review and your are correct in saying "all things happen as they should." Algebra, was my best way back when! Blessings...........................Thanks
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so welcome.
Comment from humpwhistle
Humor is in the understanding of the audience.
I, myself, find no humor here.
I find a sad tale of an outcast. For right or wrong.
I find no humor in being ostracized.
I wonder why you chose a format based on humor.
And why you chose one that doesn't let you stand up and say, 'I'!
Your poem is moving. But I think you need the first person POV
to express your pain.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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Humor is in the understanding of the audience.
I, myself, find no humor here.
I find a sad tale of an outcast. For right or wrong.
I find no humor in being ostracized.
I wonder why you chose a format based on humor.
And why you chose one that doesn't let you stand up and say, 'I'!
Your poem is moving. But I think you need the first person POV
to express your pain.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 05-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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Thanks so much for your review and comments. I agree with you there is very little humor if any. I imagine I penned this poem for it was the perfect time for me to express myself to me. I just pen from the heart, the win doesn't matter, I may even be disqualified because it may not be a poem of humor. I highly respect your review, comments and best wishes. Thanks for taking the time to review. Blessings.........................
Comment from Marykelly
The message in this poem is the value of all people and being ridiculed and put down does not destine someone to stay that way forever. The turn around in assertiveness is evident and the strength came from two sources, your mother and your heavenly Father. The repetition touches on the past but moves the narrative forward.
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The message in this poem is the value of all people and being ridiculed and put down does not destine someone to stay that way forever. The turn around in assertiveness is evident and the strength came from two sources, your mother and your heavenly Father. The repetition touches on the past but moves the narrative forward.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments. Blessings.........................
Comment from Dean Kuch
You are the one who [? were ?] was set apart ... I feel that the word "was" would be more grammatically correct here, poet...
You are no longer passive and you stand on God's word
You stand for truth and allow your voice to be heard
No longer do you permit people to take advantage of you
You are a child of God, and bid the old you adieu
You are who you are for it was preordained
To be. ... This pretty much sums up the entirety of your poem quite nicely.
It is a very emotionally driven poem featuring excellent rhyming and a powerful message.
Should do well in the contest, but people have to show up to voting booths for that to happen.
Good luck with that...
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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You are the one who [? were ?] was set apart ... I feel that the word "was" would be more grammatically correct here, poet...
You are no longer passive and you stand on God's word
You stand for truth and allow your voice to be heard
No longer do you permit people to take advantage of you
You are a child of God, and bid the old you adieu
You are who you are for it was preordained
To be. ... This pretty much sums up the entirety of your poem quite nicely.
It is a very emotionally driven poem featuring excellent rhyming and a powerful message.
Should do well in the contest, but people have to show up to voting booths for that to happen.
Good luck with that...
Comment Written 05-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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Thanks so much for a thorough and kind review. I really appreciate you bringing the error to my attention. Blessings........
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No worries, you're very welcome.
~Dean :)
Comment from Janet Foor
Psychology tells us that children are molded into what they will be by the age of three. I don't believe in predestination as we have free will. I do think if parents realized how important those first few years were in the development of each individual, maybe things would be different.
Unfortunately, we learn the lessons a little late.
Good entry for the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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Psychology tells us that children are molded into what they will be by the age of three. I don't believe in predestination as we have free will. I do think if parents realized how important those first few years were in the development of each individual, maybe things would be different.
Unfortunately, we learn the lessons a little late.
Good entry for the contest.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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Thanks so much for your review, comments and best wishes. Blessings..................................
Comment from Bill O'Bier
This is a well done piece and I'm glad that you can now feel good about your self. It really funny how folks who once tuanted us come to be dependent on us. Thanks so much for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
Wishing you the best--
Bill~
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This is a well done piece and I'm glad that you can now feel good about your self. It really funny how folks who once tuanted us come to be dependent on us. Thanks so much for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
Wishing you the best--
Bill~
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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Thanks so much for your review, very kind comments and best wishes. Blessings............................
