Comment from RShipp

Excellent

oh.... and a little reminiscing of the grand story-teller, Poe, comes to the forefront. Nice!

My honor students in class would have loved this adventure so far.

We did a six-story/poem unit on Poe as well.

These would be great to do a 'where is the story going next' questioning!

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2020

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

I love your notes and this haiku is a perfect follow-up to the last. There is something eerie about the crow and this one meets that challenge perfectly. I am enjoying these haikus and look forward to reading more.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2016

Thank you for reading and continuing on with the story, Sasha.
It is appreciated.
Cheers,
~Dean

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi Dean,

Good sense of foreboding coming through in this one too with that satori line, as if we weren't aware of it before! LOL

This is really shaping up. Great atmosphere across the posts.

All the best
G

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2016

Thanks very much for following along, and for your positive feedback, Gareth.
It is appreciated, as always.
Take care...

Comment from DALLAS01

Excellent

I like the use of alliteration here. It actually hammers home the audio and the visual aspects. Good luck to you and Gypsy Blue Rose in this endeavor. Appreciate the author notes, never heard of the jisie, and I am a big fan of the Japanese forms.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2016

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and comment on this chapter, DALLAS. Neither Gypsy nor myself knows where the next chapter is going, so that makes it as much a surprise when reading it to us as it does to everyone else.
That makes it rather exciting, too.
Take care, and I hope you will be able to continue to follow along with the story.
Thanks again.

reply by DALLAS01 on 06-Aug-2016

Spontaneity is the essence of originality.

reply by the author on 06-Aug-2016

Yes, it certainly is, DALLAS...

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Thank you for continuing to share your project and selecting the perfect picture to embellish your haiku. Your use of alliteration makes the work even more dramatic. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016

Thanks very much for deciding to read and comment on this chapter in mine and Gypsy Blue Roses' co-authored book of Gothic horror haiku, Joan.
We hope you'll continue to follow along to the story's conclusion.
Have a wonderful weekend.

reply by Joan E. on 05-Aug-2016

No doubts--I'm hooked! Smiles- Joan

reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

Hmm. I'm sure that I already reviewed this poem with a different image. We even had some discourse about your Jisei. Or am I going mad?

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016

No sir, Tom, you're as sane as they come, sir.
I neglected to place this chapter in the book, and when I did, the site recognized it as a new release.
So sorry for any confusion this might have caused.
Thanks so much again,
~Dean

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

I thought I reviewed this already, but perhaps not. I smiled from the outset just by your title. I know I am going to have a thrilling and chilling time and I was not disappointed. I enjoyed your use of alliteration and consonance and your nod to Poe's raven. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2016

Thanks for reading the latest chapter in this ongoing terror tale written in haiku and co-authored by Gypsy Blue Rose and myself, Andre.
I sincerely appreciate your R&R and hope you'll be able to continue to follow along.
Much obliged.

Comment from johnwilson

Excellent

Mr. D, I'm loving this new endeavor. As always, the author notes set-up your pieces. I studied about the jisel in school; however, I haven't visited this type of poetry for many moons. I'm looking forward to reading this horror story as it unfolds. As usual, on your work alone, there's nothing for me to do but enjoy and fork over a six in I have one in stock. Thanks!

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2016

Thanks for reading the latest chapter in this ongoing terror tale written in haiku and co-authored by Gypsy Blue Rose and myself, JW.
I sincerely appreciate your R&R and hope you'll be able to continue to follow along.
Much obliged.

Comment from BOO ghost

Exceptional

the crow seems like a messenger from the Grim reaper. real creepy stuff here, without a doubt. Love your word choices. Very unique. Has the power to manifest light. A real delightful presentation. "Quote the raven nevermore."

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2016

Hahaha,
thanks for the Poe nod there, Boo. I appreciate that.
Yes, Gypsy and I are having a good time putting these haiku together. We're following a story line and each haiku tells of yet another misadventure. We hope you'll be able to continue to follow along.
Thank you for catching up with this one, Boo.
I appreciate your comments and the six, my fiend.

reply by BOO ghost on 04-Aug-2016

HUM... THE HAIKU thing looks like fun. So, who is doing the next one? I may want to add one. i will read the rules first and shoot you a preview of it via e mail before I release it, so, I do not boo goo! Let me know who is doing the next one. This looks like fun.

reply by the author on 04-Aug-2016

I will be doing the next one, Boo.
It's just Gypsy Blue Rose and I contributing however.
Gypsy does have a book of Renku that needs contributions. It also follows along a story line.
Make sure you ask her how to go about contributing to her book.
Thanks again, Boo buddy.
Hasta la vista...

reply by BOO ghost on 04-Aug-2016

Yep, I read later was two of you. Just pondering... NOT SURE what I want to do as a weekend bandit. Just kicking the can down the road. See how far it goes. May do a review or two. Was your last haiku a traditional Japanese. You pronounce sounds instead of syllables. http://www.nahaiwrimo.com/home/why-no-5-7-5
This was educational. BOO!

Comment from LovnPeace

Exceptional

All this fits together like a good puzzle. Very well done with shades of Edger Allen Poe. Thank you for sharing. It should make a interesting book. Thank you for the history also. Blessings, Barbara

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

Thank you very much for reading, Barbara. You're very kind.
I hope you will continue to follow along with this story written completely in haiku.
My co-author and I, Gypsy Blue Rose, have no idea where this story will lead us. We are writing this "on-the-fly", so to speak. I write a chapter, then she follows along while continuing the story line.
Thanks again for the six stars a great feedback.
I deeply appreciate it.
~Dean :}