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Guilty until proven innocent.47 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Good gravy that was awful. Thank you so much. You are truly depraved. I can't write like that, I wish I could. You are magnificent at this creepy stuff. I loved it. Got more to read. Karen :-)
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Good gravy that was awful. Thank you so much. You are truly depraved. I can't write like that, I wish I could. You are magnificent at this creepy stuff. I loved it. Got more to read. Karen :-)
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thanks for the generous review and kind words, I think. Dean who used to be on this site is the person who kept pushing me to write this kind of stuff. He is probably the most talented writer I've ever met on this site. I'm not sure if any of this stuff is still up, but if it is, I think you'd really enjoy reading his work. And if you find it, let me know. I'd like to read this posts again myself. I don't want to keep repeating myself, but I can't thank you enough for spending your time reading my long lost foolishness. You're a sweetheart, and I appreciate you tons!
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I could not find in in members with dean, or a D. so I looked in your old writing and viewed some reviews hoping to get his name there. I had to stop. People were editing you to death instead of reading and reviewing the story. Not the framework. It mad me mad. I want to beat them all up. One of my canes is heavy..........
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I think Dean still has his stuff up, or at least someone said it is. Yes, way back when they picked at everything I wrote. Sometimes there were more pages of suggested corrections than of the story. LOL. But I didn't know a noun from a verb and needed lots of help. But as you know, there are always those types who want to show what they think they know rather offer helpful advice.
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If you find dean let me know. Douglas Goff is another good one. He wrote my favorite story "Pop the Cherry".
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I like Douglas Goff?s writing, but after adding him and reading everything he posted for weeks, he didn?t bother to read two straight of my posts. So, I haven?t read him since.
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He reads my stuff, so I read his stuff. I am sorry he doesn't read your stuff. I like your stuff. In fact I will be reading
more of your stuff today. I am years behind reading your stuff. :-)
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I don't have that much stuff. At least that's what you said. I hope you're talking about my stories. :-)
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I have heard about reading tea leaves, but..........Karen:-)
Comment from lyenochka
So who is Dr. Terry Fying? Did Dean come up with this contest? Darn - should have seen the Horror/Thriller category. Oh boy. What a thing. But it's also a psychological thriller because we wonder why Tom didn't report his prank caller to the police?
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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So who is Dr. Terry Fying? Did Dean come up with this contest? Darn - should have seen the Horror/Thriller category. Oh boy. What a thing. But it's also a psychological thriller because we wonder why Tom didn't report his prank caller to the police?
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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Yes, this was one of those horror contests that Dean came up with. I can't remember now, but there used to be a television program that showed scary movies (Dr. Terry Fying) and the host talked about them. Thinking at first the calls were pranks, Tom didn't call the police. Then, once there had been two murder sprees, he was ashamed and embarrassed he hadn't. So, he loaded up his family left the beach and headed home. As it turned out, the killer had stolen all the articles named, tooth brush, flip flops, pistol, and other than that were left at the murder scenes, leaving evidence that Tome was a murderer. Yes, this is even way outside my comfort zone, but Dean had a way of talking me into about whatever he wanted me to try. LOL. Thanks for your always appreciated reviews of my old stuff, and especially this one that I'm sure was a chore for you to read. I appreciate YOU more than words will allow!!!
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I figured it was Dean who put you up to it! It would have done well in the horror contest. While I don't like the story, I did appreciate your building up of suspense and psychological drama.
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Don't worry, I don't like the story either. Dean just had a way of getting me to play along. :-)
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Ah, we miss that rascal. Wonder what stories he's writing in heaven...
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I don't know what Dean could be up to in Heaven, but I'd bet he's still pushing the limits of what's allowed. LOL.
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Lol. He'd have found a way to be ranked #1 in some category. 😊💖
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Paragraph One is a good hook that includes "soon dying and dead." Makes one wonder what scenario did they wander into?
Doesn't more always hang out of those "skimpy bikinis"?
That would be a unique call to get from a crank caller. But, the question is should Tom have given the foreshadowing more attention?
Seemed Tom did not learn his lesson the first go around to notify the police about the calls he received.
Henson's should be Hensons.
Tom is guilty of every murder. BBQ him!
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Paragraph One is a good hook that includes "soon dying and dead." Makes one wonder what scenario did they wander into?
Doesn't more always hang out of those "skimpy bikinis"?
That would be a unique call to get from a crank caller. But, the question is should Tom have given the foreshadowing more attention?
Seemed Tom did not learn his lesson the first go around to notify the police about the calls he received.
Henson's should be Hensons.
Tom is guilty of every murder. BBQ him!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much, Brett, for your extra special six-star review, kind words, and suggestions. I tried to sort of leave the murders open, thinking that most people would figure Tom was framed. But that has yet to ever happen. LOL. So, I just added this line after your review: "Tom, a loving family man and faithful friend, innocent of all charges, but it's unlikely he will ever be able to prove it." I appreciate YOU, my friend, and all the encouragement you give! Ric
Comment from XGoneX
Hi Ric,
I remember to watch these kind of horror tales in a TV series. Loved them. The creepier, the better. This was very creepy and had a fantastic end. The description of the dead people was very graphic and great, too.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2016
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Hi Ric,
I remember to watch these kind of horror tales in a TV series. Loved them. The creepier, the better. This was very creepy and had a fantastic end. The description of the dead people was very graphic and great, too.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2016
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Oh, thank you so much for taking time to read my story. I started writing this piece after the contest's creator asked me to submit a story. The story was up to 1,887 words and I was less than halfway through when I found out the word limit was 700 words, not including the introduction. Of course, after cutting the whole story to 700 words I found out the real limit was 1,000. The extra three hundred words would have made the piece much better; but unfortunately, with less than two hours before the deadline of the contest, there just wasn't enough time to cut and patch anymore. So, I just went with it. I liked the finished project, but never in my wildest dreams would I have expected such a great response from its reviewers. Your kind words and extra special six-star review are greatly appreciated. I'm so glad you liked it. Thanks, again, for his wonderful review!
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It's very good, Ric. Maybe yes, more words could have enriched it. However, I liked the language. And sometimes less is more. When I finished the my book (last time) it was 135k. So I cut it a lot, and so much, the final thing was 70k. Now the agent asked me to increase the word count.
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Yes, there has to be a happy medium. Concise, but not short and blunt. :-)
Comment from lancellot
Good story. I like that idea of what would yo do. I think most people would just leave and say nothing. The framing of poor Tom was poetic. He did have some responsibility. Good entry.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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Good story. I like that idea of what would yo do. I think most people would just leave and say nothing. The framing of poor Tom was poetic. He did have some responsibility. Good entry.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much, Lancellot, for taking time to read my story. I had this story to 1,887 words and wasn't even halfway through. Then, I learned of the 700 word limit, so I chopped it to the bare bones. By the time I found out the actually words limit was 1,000, there just wasn't enough time to make anymore changes. LOL! Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from light
If we were looking for scary, we got it. So much going on kept the interest high. I can say it was blood -curdling. You did a good job with this entry.
Elaine
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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If we were looking for scary, we got it. So much going on kept the interest high. I can say it was blood -curdling. You did a good job with this entry.
Elaine
Comment Written 03-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much for taking time to read my story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. I'm so glad you liked it. :-)
Comment from F. Wehr3
Good stuff here, Ric. I thoroughly enjoyed the piece. This one was a page turner without having pages, lol. I didn't notice any errors. Best of luck in the contest.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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Good stuff here, Ric. I thoroughly enjoyed the piece. This one was a page turner without having pages, lol. I didn't notice any errors. Best of luck in the contest.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 03-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much, Russel, my friend, for taking time to read my story. This story had grown to over 1,887 words and I wasn't even halfway through with it. Dean had asked that I submit something to his contest, but when I looked up and realized I only had a couple hours before the deadline, and his contest had a 700 word limit, I started chopping. And then, as it turned out, the limit was, or was changed to 1,000. I thought this could have been much better with another 300 words, but who cares. I'm just glad to be included in the contest with all the outstanding talents I'm just thankful to be rubbing elbows with. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from William Ross
ah yeah very good, nice write a good way to really set someone up, wouldn't try it though something always seems not to go as planned. lol. good luck on this, great job, have a wonderful day
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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ah yeah very good, nice write a good way to really set someone up, wouldn't try it though something always seems not to go as planned. lol. good luck on this, great job, have a wonderful day
Comment Written 03-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much, William Ross, for taking time to read my story. I always enjoy your comments, kind words, and generous reviews. :-)
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Too much action. Everything happened too fast to follow or give the reader time to absorb it. I think it would have been better to have one crime scene and less hectic activity.
Good start though. the concept was excellent.
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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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Too much action. Everything happened too fast to follow or give the reader time to absorb it. I think it would have been better to have one crime scene and less hectic activity.
Good start though. the concept was excellent.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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This story started out being 1,887 words and I wasn't even halfway through it, but in case you didn't notice, this is flash fiction. The word limit when I wrote it was 700 words, excluding the intro. Maybe we shouldn't be so quick to throw stones if we have no idea of what we are talking about. Maybe you should read some Jack Ketchum, the man Stephen King considers the scariest writer in the world.
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The 700 word limit was all the more reason to cut down on the number of crimes committed. One would have worked.
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No, no, you're missing the whole thing. Those four headlines were the whole story. Not the content, which was only filler to lull the reader under the power of the real story. Do you even understand what happened in that story? Was Tom framed? Does he have multiple personalities? What's it about? We mustn't just jump to conclusions. Your job as a reviewer isn't to give a person a grade on whether you like what they do, or even understand or not. If my story isn't covered in mistakes of bad grammar or something of that nature, then it's a good story. Our tastes are all different, we aren't here to judge other people's work by our own preferences of what we like. I was just contacted by a well known agent because of this very story. I promise he wouldn't have contacted me if it was anything but top of the line. Go buy you a Jack Ketchum book. Of course, if you didn't like this piece, you probably won't like his, but remember, Stephen King says he's the scariest writer in the world. Sometimes stories are hectic for a reason, to create a mood, it isn't always about the words, without the pace. Hang tight, you'll start understanding what I'm saying. It's taken me a long time. Later! :-)
Comment from Mastery
Excellent writing, Don. . Your second part has a good "hook" to start the piece. I used to read those comics when I was a kid...loved them. I realize the contest calls for some sort of intro by the storyteller but perhaps, be a bit more specific as to what is coming...I don't know...It's a tough one alright.
I like your images, like these : "The females' vaginas, breasts, and eye sockets hollowed-out. Procedures executed by a talented professional or team.
The body parts removed with sizzling-hot scalpels, cauterizing the wounds as they cut.
A caustic substance presumed to have melted and sealed-over the blackened cavities of burnt scar tissue, leaving a forever stench of burnt flesh in the rooms.
Tom and his family spent the night huddled and afraid to sleep."
Good luck in the contest, Don. I hope you win. Bob
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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Excellent writing, Don. . Your second part has a good "hook" to start the piece. I used to read those comics when I was a kid...loved them. I realize the contest calls for some sort of intro by the storyteller but perhaps, be a bit more specific as to what is coming...I don't know...It's a tough one alright.
I like your images, like these : "The females' vaginas, breasts, and eye sockets hollowed-out. Procedures executed by a talented professional or team.
The body parts removed with sizzling-hot scalpels, cauterizing the wounds as they cut.
A caustic substance presumed to have melted and sealed-over the blackened cavities of burnt scar tissue, leaving a forever stench of burnt flesh in the rooms.
Tom and his family spent the night huddled and afraid to sleep."
Good luck in the contest, Don. I hope you win. Bob
Comment Written 03-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much, Bob, my friend, for taking time to read my story. I'm sure my chances are slim to none with that extraordinary group, but either way, I'm just honored to even be playing in the same sandbox with the likes of them. You can give yourself a huge pat on the back for the descriptions as you've been such a help in making see the little things. Your kind words, continuing support and encouragement, and the extra special six-star review are greatly appreciated. I appreciate you! :-)
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:) Bob
