No, You Can't Return
Nonet-Potlatch Challenge41 total reviews
Comment from Scarbrems
Oi, i can return if I wanna! I enjoyed this little piece. I think most will identify with the sentiments expressed. The form's spot on. I always think when the final word is a single one, it's key to find one which draws the whole thing together and sums it all up. Hard to do, but you've got it here.
'we ran with the sun all day
and the night smiled, "Go home"'
So true for many of us, I'll bet. I love 'the night smiled'.
Great job
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Oi, i can return if I wanna! I enjoyed this little piece. I think most will identify with the sentiments expressed. The form's spot on. I always think when the final word is a single one, it's key to find one which draws the whole thing together and sums it all up. Hard to do, but you've got it here.
'we ran with the sun all day
and the night smiled, "Go home"'
So true for many of us, I'll bet. I love 'the night smiled'.
Great job
Comment Written 05-Aug-2016
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
It's so sad how children never go out and play anymore. I spend much more time outside than most children do. I don't think most of them know how to play like children, these days. Good nonet, mikey~Debbie
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It's so sad how children never go out and play anymore. I spend much more time outside than most children do. I don't think most of them know how to play like children, these days. Good nonet, mikey~Debbie
Comment Written 04-Aug-2016
Comment from strandregs
Very nice very nice very nice
we must have been neighbours
cause I remember the same things.
just discovered I missed the home thing.
next time.
you did a fab fab job better than
Glorias but don't tell her I said. :-)) Z.
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Very nice very nice very nice
we must have been neighbours
cause I remember the same things.
just discovered I missed the home thing.
next time.
you did a fab fab job better than
Glorias but don't tell her I said. :-)) Z.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2016
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This brings back childhood memories that unfortunately today's children will never have. Love the retro picture you've used mikey, and a good answer to this nonet subject. Hopefully I'll be back for this week's challenge,
cheers,
valda.
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This brings back childhood memories that unfortunately today's children will never have. Love the retro picture you've used mikey, and a good answer to this nonet subject. Hopefully I'll be back for this week's challenge,
cheers,
valda.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2016
Comment from Allison78
I'm old enough to remember days like this, your poem did a wonderful job of reminding me of those fun summer evenings! Your syllable count is correct also. I really enjoyed reading this!
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I'm old enough to remember days like this, your poem did a wonderful job of reminding me of those fun summer evenings! Your syllable count is correct also. I really enjoyed reading this!
Comment Written 02-Aug-2016
Comment from l.raven
HI Michael, LOL...when we were kids we ran out the door in the morning...about dinner time...you would hear all over the neighborhood....mom yelling...Linda, Karen, Diane, Jimmy, John, and Mike....dinner...and you came running...you were hungry...last time you saw mom is when you flew in for lunch....and after dinner you stayed in...baths and school work...and getting ready for the next day...those were the days...love your poem you...brought back some good memories...and I love the picture...luff Linda xxoo
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HI Michael, LOL...when we were kids we ran out the door in the morning...about dinner time...you would hear all over the neighborhood....mom yelling...Linda, Karen, Diane, Jimmy, John, and Mike....dinner...and you came running...you were hungry...last time you saw mom is when you flew in for lunch....and after dinner you stayed in...baths and school work...and getting ready for the next day...those were the days...love your poem you...brought back some good memories...and I love the picture...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
Comment from JennaG
This is such a great nonet! I especially like the line "worry never paid a visit". I sure miss those carefree days. Your poem is skillfully written and the picture goes along perfectly. I really enjoyed reading this one. :)
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This is such a great nonet! I especially like the line "worry never paid a visit". I sure miss those carefree days. Your poem is skillfully written and the picture goes along perfectly. I really enjoyed reading this one. :)
Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Mikey; no keys, fun in the sun, food and friends. Yes, good o days of playing, "spy" and crack the whip on ice. Oh, lots of ball games made you stronger. Everyone knew you be name! Fun nonet! (I've been at the fair and funeral. Yes, got lots of first place ribbons in flowers and photos!). flylikeaneagle
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Mikey; no keys, fun in the sun, food and friends. Yes, good o days of playing, "spy" and crack the whip on ice. Oh, lots of ball games made you stronger. Everyone knew you be name! Fun nonet! (I've been at the fair and funeral. Yes, got lots of first place ribbons in flowers and photos!). flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 31-Jul-2016
Comment from Leineco
s i g h. . .
how fondly I remember those days;
fly out the door and play all day.
Momma rang cowbell to call
us for dinner - all six
of us were scattered
(woods, creek and fields)
but each of
us dashed
home.
Sadly, it's rarer and rarer that I see a world where doors
aren't locked and children explore with abandon. But I
assure you - in rural pockets - it still exists :-)
Thanks for the memories :-)
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s i g h. . .
how fondly I remember those days;
fly out the door and play all day.
Momma rang cowbell to call
us for dinner - all six
of us were scattered
(woods, creek and fields)
but each of
us dashed
home.
Sadly, it's rarer and rarer that I see a world where doors
aren't locked and children explore with abandon. But I
assure you - in rural pockets - it still exists :-)
Thanks for the memories :-)
Comment Written 31-Jul-2016
Comment from seaglass
This is a reminder of less complicated times. I remember where my parents didn't lock the house door when we left. It was a safer world in some places, at least and for some regions.
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This is a reminder of less complicated times. I remember where my parents didn't lock the house door when we left. It was a safer world in some places, at least and for some regions.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2016
