Once I walked...
Overcoming90 total reviews
Comment from His Grayness
OH SIX STARS>>Where art thou?? What a magnificent work from this always-uplifting and inspirational poet! Not a single error, not a single thought, not a single stroke of the pen or keys could be more perfect in this gift of work! I did indeed enjoy this immensely with stimulating reflections on my own past life, so it is not only a gift of wisdom, but as intended (I'm sure) a gift of LOVE! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016
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OH SIX STARS>>Where art thou?? What a magnificent work from this always-uplifting and inspirational poet! Not a single error, not a single thought, not a single stroke of the pen or keys could be more perfect in this gift of work! I did indeed enjoy this immensely with stimulating reflections on my own past life, so it is not only a gift of wisdom, but as intended (I'm sure) a gift of LOVE! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment Written 03-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016
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Thanks Vance, , for your very gracious words and supportive review, I appreciate you so much, blessings. Roy
Comment from reconciled
once a man asked me...why do you believe you're going to heaven...? I'm saved said I...saved from what Michael...?
"writ on my mind" I suppose "ourselves" our greatest obstacle. Superb write Sir. love Michael
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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once a man asked me...why do you believe you're going to heaven...? I'm saved said I...saved from what Michael...?
"writ on my mind" I suppose "ourselves" our greatest obstacle. Superb write Sir. love Michael
Comment Written 02-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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That's not a bad conclusion Michael, "saved from myself" and the continuation of being saved from oneself, thanks for the wonderful review, and marvellous stars, dear friend, blessings, Roy
Comment from closetpoetjester
With Christ as your rock Roy, it seems you can't go wrong. Well done with this inspiring and uplifting piece.
Thoroughly enjoyable and totally palpable that from the depths of anxt and despair, you can rise with Him as your guide. I'm REALLY glad you stopped running from yourself and instead ran towards God AND Fanstory LOL
Wonderful writing.
Cheers P
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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With Christ as your rock Roy, it seems you can't go wrong. Well done with this inspiring and uplifting piece.
Thoroughly enjoyable and totally palpable that from the depths of anxt and despair, you can rise with Him as your guide. I'm REALLY glad you stopped running from yourself and instead ran towards God AND Fanstory LOL
Wonderful writing.
Cheers P
Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Thanks so much for these lovely words and the empathetic review P, blessings, Roy
Comment from cterp
Very strong and clear. Good movement and vision. Never any doubt as to where this was headed (and in this case, that is good). That was given away by the first word, I think intentionally.
I admire the phrase "blame's cold flame" and that it fit into your poem so perfectly. Very nice. Also "so deep, so dim." That just seems to echo and echo.
chris
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Very strong and clear. Good movement and vision. Never any doubt as to where this was headed (and in this case, that is good). That was given away by the first word, I think intentionally.
I admire the phrase "blame's cold flame" and that it fit into your poem so perfectly. Very nice. Also "so deep, so dim." That just seems to echo and echo.
chris
Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Thanks so much Chris, for these lovely words and the empathetic review blessings, Roy
Comment from LanceHill
Such a powerful message you have delivered. It is great to know we are safe because of the blood of Jesus. Very nice flow throughout. Keep witnessing Roy. God bless my friend.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Such a powerful message you have delivered. It is great to know we are safe because of the blood of Jesus. Very nice flow throughout. Keep witnessing Roy. God bless my friend.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Thanks so much Lance, for these lencouraging and the empathetic review, and the very generous stars, blessings, Roy
Comment from bob cullen
Firstly, congratulations on winning the contest.
It is another great Roy Owens creation that delivers a powerful message.
I sense many of your poems are biographically based. If this is indeed the case, I salute your refocusing your life. And as such you are an inspiration, Roy
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Firstly, congratulations on winning the contest.
It is another great Roy Owens creation that delivers a powerful message.
I sense many of your poems are biographically based. If this is indeed the case, I salute your refocusing your life. And as such you are an inspiration, Roy
Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Thanks so much Bob, for these lovely words and the empathetic review blessings, Roy
Comment from scongrove
BRAVO Roy! :) This is very uplifting. I'm so proud of you for overcoming such large hurdles in your life. I do know what that feels like. It's like someone has lifted a blindfold from your eyes, and for the first time you truly can see.
Thank you so much for sharing this. I'm always humbled by your inspiring words.
Always your fan,
Shana :)
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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BRAVO Roy! :) This is very uplifting. I'm so proud of you for overcoming such large hurdles in your life. I do know what that feels like. It's like someone has lifted a blindfold from your eyes, and for the first time you truly can see.
Thank you so much for sharing this. I'm always humbled by your inspiring words.
Always your fan,
Shana :)
Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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And I am so glad to share, and it's marvellous Shana, that we share both a common testimony and destiny, your empathy and association are a great source of comfort, confidence and inspiration, thank you dear friend, blessings, Roy
Comment from elainec4
ROYOWEN,
Yes, I can agree that this is a winning work!! I enjoyed reading and re-reading it. My favorite lines:
"all judgment doused in mists of rum"
"I glimpse, a flash on hope's bright rim"
You use such beautiful language to convey your message. elaine
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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ROYOWEN,
Yes, I can agree that this is a winning work!! I enjoyed reading and re-reading it. My favorite lines:
"all judgment doused in mists of rum"
"I glimpse, a flash on hope's bright rim"
You use such beautiful language to convey your message. elaine
Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Thanks so much Elaine, for these encouringinf words and the empathetic review, it must be good, my dear wife is also Elaine, snap. blessings, Roy
Comment from Father Flaps
Wonderful poem, Roy! Isn't it something, this Christian walk? We want to get closer to God. We want to see God. But we'll never get as close to Him as He desires to be close to us.
Congratulations on winning this contest!
I have just a couple of suggestions for you.
"I warmed myself in blame's cold flame." ... (I'm wondering why you decided blame's flame should be cold. How can you warm yourself in a cold flame? We wallow in our guilt, in our inadequacies, in our shame. Some are content to stay there, to never rise up clinging to the cross and claiming the blood of Jesus for protection. As you say, "I warmed myself in blame's..."
I suggest,
I warmed myself in blame's hot flame.)
"Yet I, in condemnation cloaked
in tears of dismal darkness soaked." ... (this sentence is incomplete. I suggest,
Yet I, in condemnation cloaked,
the tears of dismal darkness soaked.) "There is no condemnation when the Son has set you free." That's a song by Don Francisco. Here's a link:
https://youtu.be/12gAu3Erqck
"When morning came my guilt returned-
my heavy heart within me burned." ...(too many times, you use "my". It isn't needed in the last line, I suggest
When morning came my guilt returned-
a heavy heart within me burned.)
"I glimpse, a flash on hope's bright rim," ...(I suggest
I glimpsed a flash on hope's bright rim,)
"lit up my soul, redeemed my sight." ... (the way I have always heard it, Christ redeemed us from the penalty for sin. He delivered us from death to abundant life. But a price had to be paid for that. And the price was the blood of Jesus. I would agree that Jesus turned the light on inside. He "lit up my soul", yes! But I would suggest that He returned my sight)
"then, unannounced, a dazzling light,
lit up my soul, redeemed my sight." ... (I'd lose the comma after "light"
then, unannounced, a dazzling light
lit up my soul, redeemed my sight.)
"I now know God my ransom paid-
on Christ my rock, my sin was laid." ... (I know this is a personal poem, but perhaps in the last verse you could include the world. I suggest,
I now know God our ransom paid-
on Christ the rock, all sin was laid.)
Nice poem, Roy!
I like the alliteration in
"shadow's shame"
"condemnation cloaked"
"dismal darkness"
I like this line,
"all judgement doused in mists of rum"
Blessings,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Wonderful poem, Roy! Isn't it something, this Christian walk? We want to get closer to God. We want to see God. But we'll never get as close to Him as He desires to be close to us.
Congratulations on winning this contest!
I have just a couple of suggestions for you.
"I warmed myself in blame's cold flame." ... (I'm wondering why you decided blame's flame should be cold. How can you warm yourself in a cold flame? We wallow in our guilt, in our inadequacies, in our shame. Some are content to stay there, to never rise up clinging to the cross and claiming the blood of Jesus for protection. As you say, "I warmed myself in blame's..."
I suggest,
I warmed myself in blame's hot flame.)
"Yet I, in condemnation cloaked
in tears of dismal darkness soaked." ... (this sentence is incomplete. I suggest,
Yet I, in condemnation cloaked,
the tears of dismal darkness soaked.) "There is no condemnation when the Son has set you free." That's a song by Don Francisco. Here's a link:
https://youtu.be/12gAu3Erqck
"When morning came my guilt returned-
my heavy heart within me burned." ...(too many times, you use "my". It isn't needed in the last line, I suggest
When morning came my guilt returned-
a heavy heart within me burned.)
"I glimpse, a flash on hope's bright rim," ...(I suggest
I glimpsed a flash on hope's bright rim,)
"lit up my soul, redeemed my sight." ... (the way I have always heard it, Christ redeemed us from the penalty for sin. He delivered us from death to abundant life. But a price had to be paid for that. And the price was the blood of Jesus. I would agree that Jesus turned the light on inside. He "lit up my soul", yes! But I would suggest that He returned my sight)
"then, unannounced, a dazzling light,
lit up my soul, redeemed my sight." ... (I'd lose the comma after "light"
then, unannounced, a dazzling light
lit up my soul, redeemed my sight.)
"I now know God my ransom paid-
on Christ my rock, my sin was laid." ... (I know this is a personal poem, but perhaps in the last verse you could include the world. I suggest,
I now know God our ransom paid-
on Christ the rock, all sin was laid.)
Nice poem, Roy!
I like the alliteration in
"shadow's shame"
"condemnation cloaked"
"dismal darkness"
I like this line,
"all judgement doused in mists of rum"
Blessings,
Kimbob
Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Thanks so much for this close analysis,, beautifully done, I agree with some, but also, if I was the only one who sinned, Christ would have died for me, I guess it's subjective any way, but it's a fantastic and constructive review, and I really appreciate it, blessings, Roy
Comment from MissMerri
Congratulations Roy! I'm so pleased to see this won a blue ribbon, because I agree... it is first rate! How beautifully you express the humble estate of a forgiven and redeemed sinner, grateful to his Savior. I loved every line and think you did a masterful job of explaining how one does overcome sin and find a new life of joy and peace. Rhymes, meter, language... all excellent. This is just wonderful in every way. MM
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Congratulations Roy! I'm so pleased to see this won a blue ribbon, because I agree... it is first rate! How beautifully you express the humble estate of a forgiven and redeemed sinner, grateful to his Savior. I loved every line and think you did a masterful job of explaining how one does overcome sin and find a new life of joy and peace. Rhymes, meter, language... all excellent. This is just wonderful in every way. MM
Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Thanks, Adonna, so much for these most encouraging words and the empathetic review blessings, Roy
