Even the Weather Weeps
Weather can enhance our mood whether sunny or sad.23 total reviews
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Mary
= This is an excellent entry in the contest.
= Wonderful comparison between rain and tears--nature and a person.
= Best of luck in the contest. Great job.
(*>*) A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
Cheers & Blessings ~ Jacqueline ~ Jackie ~ Jax
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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Hi, Mary
= This is an excellent entry in the contest.
= Wonderful comparison between rain and tears--nature and a person.
= Best of luck in the contest. Great job.
(*>*) A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
Cheers & Blessings ~ Jacqueline ~ Jackie ~ Jax
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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Thank you for your encouraging words.
Comment from RodG
Although the parallels drawn between rain and tears is not novel, I like how you personify the weather as your sister, weeping with you. The parallel enhanced by your use of synonymous verbs--"slips" and "slides."
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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Although the parallels drawn between rain and tears is not novel, I like how you personify the weather as your sister, weeping with you. The parallel enhanced by your use of synonymous verbs--"slips" and "slides."
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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Thank you for such an observant review.
Comment from Irish Rain
I absolutely love this. I love anything rainy. Must be the Irish in me, ha ha. Raining here right now, my perfect weather! Good luck here...blessings....
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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I absolutely love this. I love anything rainy. Must be the Irish in me, ha ha. Raining here right now, my perfect weather! Good luck here...blessings....
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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Thank you it must be the Irish in me too.
Comment from Cynthia1
Beautiful entry for Crying Out Loud! You have captured the mood that is so often felt on a rainy day. The alliteration of "weather weeps" is especially beautiful. Good luck to you in this contest!
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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Beautiful entry for Crying Out Loud! You have captured the mood that is so often felt on a rainy day. The alliteration of "weather weeps" is especially beautiful. Good luck to you in this contest!
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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Thank you for your encouragement.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. When we cry we release stress, I like to cry freely when cutting onions, no one will ever guess why my eyes are all teary. Accompanied by the rain is even a better idea.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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A very well-written poem. When we cry we release stress, I like to cry freely when cutting onions, no one will ever guess why my eyes are all teary. Accompanied by the rain is even a better idea.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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Thank you for your positive comments.
Comment from Pantygynt
Pathetic fallacy was often used by writer to make the weather appear sympathetic to the feelings of the protagonist or to the emotions expressed in the script. So you are in good company here with this 5-7-5. You make no claim for it being other than a 5-7-5 such as a senryu for example, please. I think you are right in this. There is not enough of a shock in the last line to elevate it to the higher levels of Japanese art. As a 5-7-5 however it is excellent.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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Pathetic fallacy was often used by writer to make the weather appear sympathetic to the feelings of the protagonist or to the emotions expressed in the script. So you are in good company here with this 5-7-5. You make no claim for it being other than a 5-7-5 such as a senryu for example, please. I think you are right in this. There is not enough of a shock in the last line to elevate it to the higher levels of Japanese art. As a 5-7-5 however it is excellent.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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Thank you for your detailed analysis.
Comment from tfawcus
Nice connection here between a natural event and a human emotion. Wet weather can sometimes accentuate our feelings of sadness. Raindrops trickling down glass do tend to have a depressing effect.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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Nice connection here between a natural event and a human emotion. Wet weather can sometimes accentuate our feelings of sadness. Raindrops trickling down glass do tend to have a depressing effect.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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Thank you for your encouraging remarks.
Comment from LIJ Red
A prompt about weeping, and a five-seven-five poem about weeping on a rainy day. This seems quite appropriate and is easy to review indeed.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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A prompt about weeping, and a five-seven-five poem about weeping on a rainy day. This seems quite appropriate and is easy to review indeed.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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Thank you for your positive comments.
Comment from janalma
Pretty effective and visual wording here. I can see in my mind the person sitting by the window watching the rain as tears roll down her cheeks. A message of sadness and loneliness.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016
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Pretty effective and visual wording here. I can see in my mind the person sitting by the window watching the rain as tears roll down her cheeks. A message of sadness and loneliness.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016
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Thank you for your understanding.
Comment from barkingdog
I like the parallel you have here. Both are very visual--tears slipping down your cheeks and rain sliding down the window pane.
Nice 'w' alliteration: 'weather weeps with me'
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016
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I like the parallel you have here. Both are very visual--tears slipping down your cheeks and rain sliding down the window pane.
Nice 'w' alliteration: 'weather weeps with me'
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016
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Thank you for such an observant review.
