Rain
Rain equals mud27 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image.
-Syllable count is good, as well as imagery.
-You create the irony of rain well;
on one hand it creates mud; on the other, it cleanses life.
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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-Good image.
-Syllable count is good, as well as imagery.
-You create the irony of rain well;
on one hand it creates mud; on the other, it cleanses life.
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review. Your kind comments are really appreciated; as are the stars.
Comment from mvbrooks
I appreciated the contrast between rain's ability to "cleanse" versus it's ability to create mud and cause dirt to cling. The poem makes it easy to visually and hear the pelting rain hitting the tree, the dirt, and the puddles.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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I appreciated the contrast between rain's ability to "cleanse" versus it's ability to create mud and cause dirt to cling. The poem makes it easy to visually and hear the pelting rain hitting the tree, the dirt, and the puddles.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review. Your kind comments are really appreciated; as are the stars.
Comment from seaglass
This haiku does as it is intended, paint a nature picture. Here on the coast, we have sandy soil and there is seldom mud, but in Wyoming we had mud that could bury your car. How clean the air feels though .
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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This haiku does as it is intended, paint a nature picture. Here on the coast, we have sandy soil and there is seldom mud, but in Wyoming we had mud that could bury your car. How clean the air feels though .
Comment Written 29-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review. Your kind comments are really appreciated; as are the stars.
Comment from VictoriaJoyce
When I first read the title, I didn't think I was going to enjoy reading this and almost skipped over it. I was pleasantly surprised and glad I read it. I thoroughly enjoyed the message in this.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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When I first read the title, I didn't think I was going to enjoy reading this and almost skipped over it. I was pleasantly surprised and glad I read it. I thoroughly enjoyed the message in this.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review. Your kind comments are really appreciated; as are the stars.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well...your 7/4/4 is well within the limits imposed by westernized haiku poetry.
Lines one and two show a distinct grammatical connection and steady stream, or flow, of thoughts and words.
You seem to have adhered to the rules of the contest, and your composition should pose no risk of being disqualified for having violated the short/long/short format of more traditional haiku poetry. I've read the rules, and they don't state that as a requirement.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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Well...your 7/4/4 is well within the limits imposed by westernized haiku poetry.
Lines one and two show a distinct grammatical connection and steady stream, or flow, of thoughts and words.
You seem to have adhered to the rules of the contest, and your composition should pose no risk of being disqualified for having violated the short/long/short format of more traditional haiku poetry. I've read the rules, and they don't state that as a requirement.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review. Your kind comments and wishes are really appreciated; as are the stars.
Comment from liz burgoyne
Your work has met the requirements of the prompt.
It is interesting on the surface but also has a deeper meaning. Sometimes in life things get messy before they get good.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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Your work has met the requirements of the prompt.
It is interesting on the surface but also has a deeper meaning. Sometimes in life things get messy before they get good.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review. Your kind comments are really appreciated; as are the stars.
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The author's words are strong, creative and thought provoking.
The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is perfect and compliments
the theme of this poem.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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Excellent Poem! The author's words are strong, creative and thought provoking.
The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is perfect and compliments
the theme of this poem.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review. Your kind comments are really appreciated; as are the stars.
Comment from create4christ
You have chosen a really nice picture as your illustration. You've followed the description you've provided perfectly. You have fully described this picture in a few well-chosen words / syllables.
Thank you for sharing. ..Penny
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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You have chosen a really nice picture as your illustration. You've followed the description you've provided perfectly. You have fully described this picture in a few well-chosen words / syllables.
Thank you for sharing. ..Penny
Comment Written 29-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review. Your kind comments are really appreciated; as are the stars.
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Wonderful lines and metaphors. Your thoughts are expressed well. Thanks for sharing this piece and good luck in the contest.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill~
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Wonderful lines and metaphors. Your thoughts are expressed well. Thanks for sharing this piece and good luck in the contest.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill~
Comment Written 29-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review. Your kind comments and wishes are really appreciated; as are the stars.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written nature haiku. When it rains well it cleans everything around and forming muddy puddles where it accumulates.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016
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A very well-written nature haiku. When it rains well it cleans everything around and forming muddy puddles where it accumulates.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review. Your kind comments are really appreciated; as are the stars.
