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Pride won't hold you up...106 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a good lesson learned. We often seem to forget what history teaches us. No one should want to become the ruler of the world because all others band together to bring them down. Both Earthly and Heavenly beings
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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This is a good lesson learned. We often seem to forget what history teaches us. No one should want to become the ruler of the world because all others band together to bring them down. Both Earthly and Heavenly beings
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Thanks Joan, for these insightful words and great review I appreciate it, blessings, Roy
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No prob, Roy. Bless you too.
Joan
Comment from Chrissy710
Oooo Roy What a message in this poem yes Pride goeth before a fall ( I think ) and your certainly tell us to be humble and not too cocky. Only one spag I think the word there ( line 4 1st Stanza) should be 'their' as it refers to the person other than that a great thought provoking piece Cheers Christine
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Oooo Roy What a message in this poem yes Pride goeth before a fall ( I think ) and your certainly tell us to be humble and not too cocky. Only one spag I think the word there ( line 4 1st Stanza) should be 'their' as it refers to the person other than that a great thought provoking piece Cheers Christine
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Thanks Chridtine, for these insightful words and great review I appreciate it, and the grammar nit, blessings, Roy
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my pleasure Roy I love the fact we can help each other I have learnt so much from this site and it is nice to have reviewers who care Cheers again
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Thanks again Christine, your a gem
Comment from William Ross
very good, and so true many a great nation has fallen, the U.S. is reaching that point, faithful to original creed NO, I don't know what we are or where we are going anymore. good write, have a great day
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very good, and so true many a great nation has fallen, the U.S. is reaching that point, faithful to original creed NO, I don't know what we are or where we are going anymore. good write, have a great day
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Thanks William, for these insightful words and great review I appreciate it, blessings, Roy
Comment from TPAC
Profound conveyances detailing nation pride and those who rise and have fallen throughout time. Writer informative shout is compelling and captures events perfect. Good shout.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Profound conveyances detailing nation pride and those who rise and have fallen throughout time. Writer informative shout is compelling and captures events perfect. Good shout.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Thanks for these insightful words and great review I appreciate it, blessings, Roy
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"there pride" should be "their pride".
Well written poem depicting who really is in power.
Not mankind as he has so foolishly prided himself on being since the dawn of time.
You may be on top for a while, but the good Lord does have a way of knocking you down some times when it becomes necessary.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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"there pride" should be "their pride".
Well written poem depicting who really is in power.
Not mankind as he has so foolishly prided himself on being since the dawn of time.
You may be on top for a while, but the good Lord does have a way of knocking you down some times when it becomes necessary.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Thanks for these insightful words and great review I appreciate it, blessings, Roy
Comment from mfowler
Your poem focuses very much upon the pride of empire, of historical ego displaced by excess and laziness. Comparing these history defining eras to the humility of Jesus' example and God's teaching, is both apt and sobering. It also is apt to see this on a personal level as all trouble, conflict and separation in relationship can be traced to ego, and in turn pride or sin, or both. Fine versifying, but more importantly, the message is something we should all embrace.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Your poem focuses very much upon the pride of empire, of historical ego displaced by excess and laziness. Comparing these history defining eras to the humility of Jesus' example and God's teaching, is both apt and sobering. It also is apt to see this on a personal level as all trouble, conflict and separation in relationship can be traced to ego, and in turn pride or sin, or both. Fine versifying, but more importantly, the message is something we should all embrace.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Thanks Mark, for these insightful words and great review I appreciate it, blessings, Roy
Comment from Dawn Munro
first, one tiny nit - waste(')s
Ah, such sage advice, Roy - we know 'pride goeth before a fall', but I wonder if we don't misinterpret that sometimes? Walking the path of righteousness is not easy though - too humble and people tend to take advantage of you, or think you are foolish - lack respect. Too proud (as we should be about some things because every attribute is a God-given gift) and we are arrogant, conceited.
Great poem!
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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first, one tiny nit - waste(')s
Ah, such sage advice, Roy - we know 'pride goeth before a fall', but I wonder if we don't misinterpret that sometimes? Walking the path of righteousness is not easy though - too humble and people tend to take advantage of you, or think you are foolish - lack respect. Too proud (as we should be about some things because every attribute is a God-given gift) and we are arrogant, conceited.
Great poem!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Thanks Dawn, for these insightful words and great review, and the nit, you're right, I appreciate it, blessings, Roy
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Domino 2
Hi, Roy.
Is 'wastes', in last line possessive, as if so, there should be an apostrophe, as (waste's).
Of course, your theme is correct, though in the past, many Empires have fallen because of the inability of their leaders who held full power. I think nowadays, where everyone has a vote in democratic societies, the situation is different, but the result is the same if these individuals are selfish or easily led by propaganda.
Excellent flow and rhymes, plus a top message of being tolerant and open-minded.
Cheers, Ray.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Hi, Roy.
Is 'wastes', in last line possessive, as if so, there should be an apostrophe, as (waste's).
Of course, your theme is correct, though in the past, many Empires have fallen because of the inability of their leaders who held full power. I think nowadays, where everyone has a vote in democratic societies, the situation is different, but the result is the same if these individuals are selfish or easily led by propaganda.
Excellent flow and rhymes, plus a top message of being tolerant and open-minded.
Cheers, Ray.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Thanks Ray, for these insightful words and great review I appreciate it, and the nit find, blessings, Roy
Comment from bob cullen
Such an accurate take on history over many centuries. I like this Roy.
It's nicely written, the rhyme is good and it tells it as it was.
Thank you for your kind message. It is much appreciated.
Out of hospital after around three weeks. Still a little tender but am improving each day. Thank you again.
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Such an accurate take on history over many centuries. I like this Roy.
It's nicely written, the rhyme is good and it tells it as it was.
Thank you for your kind message. It is much appreciated.
Out of hospital after around three weeks. Still a little tender but am improving each day. Thank you again.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Good to see you back Bob, and I believe the operation can be very beneficial, so get well, recover quickly. Thanks for the great review, blessings, Roy
Comment from sage17611
Your poem is so very true, there are many in the bible that became proud and gave praise to themselves instead of God. Your poem is very well written with a nice flow and smooth rhyming. The theme is thought provoking providing historical facts. Good job with this write.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016
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Your poem is so very true, there are many in the bible that became proud and gave praise to themselves instead of God. Your poem is very well written with a nice flow and smooth rhyming. The theme is thought provoking providing historical facts. Good job with this write.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016
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Thanks for these insightful words and great review I appreciate it! blessings, Roy
