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Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Ricky. Powerful stuff, mate.
"Do you need(knead) it?"
"Nah, too simple and too descreate!(discreet)"
"FUCKING,(space needed)SCHOOL DESK AND TAKE A TEST OF IT?'
"Do,(space)what they all do and because you are now so..."
"Just do what I did and take a bottle (of) pills!"
"GO, FOR THE FUCKING JUGGLER(jugular)..."
"AFTER ALL YOU,(space)COMMITTED A SON AND CAN'T GET"
"FUCKING,(space)FUN?"
"Because, (we) are now here in this downward direction!"
Practice makes perfect, as they say. When you write a number, it's best to write it in words.
Keep at it, my friend.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
G'day Ricky. Powerful stuff, mate.
"Do you need(knead) it?"
"Nah, too simple and too descreate!(discreet)"
"FUCKING,(space needed)SCHOOL DESK AND TAKE A TEST OF IT?'
"Do,(space)what they all do and because you are now so..."
"Just do what I did and take a bottle (of) pills!"
"GO, FOR THE FUCKING JUGGLER(jugular)..."
"AFTER ALL YOU,(space)COMMITTED A SON AND CAN'T GET"
"FUCKING,(space)FUN?"
"Because, (we) are now here in this downward direction!"
Practice makes perfect, as they say. When you write a number, it's best to write it in words.
Keep at it, my friend.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Grammar style varies from,school taught, college, taught, to,street smart perfection.
Thats what punlishers editors are for!
Thanks anywho mate!
Ricky1024.
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I agree, but punctuation and word spacing doesn't. Just trying to be helpful ids all. It's up to you, mate.
Comment from TPAC
Not funny, but had to laugh at these presented thoughts. First the language and repeat of a cursing: often drinking does to me having just one strong curse word which I repeat often. Second the knife to the chess, which I had the same stand off. See you survived your as well.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
Not funny, but had to laugh at these presented thoughts. First the language and repeat of a cursing: often drinking does to me having just one strong curse word which I repeat often. Second the knife to the chess, which I had the same stand off. See you survived your as well.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Part Number Two Later and thanks for sharing...
Sometimes it is a FUCKED UP WORLD...
RICKY1024
Comment from Shelli 1
This poem is obviously very intense and full of anger, I'm new at reviewing so I find myself at loss for words on this serious subject of suicide I can't imagine that much pain that would actually drive you down that road, I've known people that lost. children and spouses and I would imagine gave it a thought, but there faith and prayer sustain them
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
This poem is obviously very intense and full of anger, I'm new at reviewing so I find myself at loss for words on this serious subject of suicide I can't imagine that much pain that would actually drive you down that road, I've known people that lost. children and spouses and I would imagine gave it a thought, but there faith and prayer sustain them
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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A doctor, a shrink,, family, not medications, institutions, money, sex, nothing but...
Time my friend Wil l heal the 'CRIPPLED MIND OF THE LOST SOUL."
RICKY1024
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I hope the very best for you
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I am on...
"THE ROAD TO WELLNESS."
"MY SON...
"JASON RICHARD SMRKOVSKYAVE HIS ORGANS AND SAVED FOUR LIVES...
TODAY?"
THREE ARE STILL ALIVE OVER THIRTEEN, YEARS , LATER...
THE NAME OF HIS BAND?
"THREE WAYS TO SAVE."
"TO LEARN MORE ABOUT...
"Organ- Tissue Donations' simply call...
"The Gift of Life, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania.
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I am on...
"THE ROAD TO WELLNESS."
"MY SON...
"JASON RICHARD SMRKOVSKYAVE HIS ORGANS AND SAVED FOUR LIVES...
TODAY?"
THREE ARE STILL ALIVE OVER THIRTEEN, YEARS , LATER...
THE NAME OF HIS BAND?
"THREE WAYS TO SAVE."
"TO LEARN MORE ABOUT...
"Organ- Tissue Donations' simply call...
"The Gift of Life, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania.
Lara S. MORETTI THE LSW.
AT 1- 800- DONORS- 1.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. great job, Ricky. This is much shorter than your usual writings. It is still dynamic even though it is short. I didn't see any errors.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
Excellent. great job, Ricky. This is much shorter than your usual writings. It is still dynamic even though it is short. I didn't see any errors.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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It's coming baby and HARD!!
RICKY1024
Comment from humpwhistle
I guess I have to read the 60-some-odd chapters
to learn how to make a suide (sic) cake.
I suggest you make the spelling correction.
Are you sure three lines comprise the entire chapter?
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
I guess I have to read the 60-some-odd chapters
to learn how to make a suide (sic) cake.
I suggest you make the spelling correction.
Are you sure three lines comprise the entire chapter?
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 27-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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It's coming Hump AND HARD!!!
RICKY1024