It Does Rain On Parades
A rather scary day this turned out to be43 total reviews
Comment from Heather Knight
Nothing much happens here and I say this as a good thing. When a text is well written, it keeps our attention even if there isn't a lot going on.
BTW, I loved the description of the pink attires.
Well done !
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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Nothing much happens here and I say this as a good thing. When a text is well written, it keeps our attention even if there isn't a lot going on.
BTW, I loved the description of the pink attires.
Well done !
Comment Written 27-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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Thank you. Sorry, it's so short. Every once in a while I wait too long to enter these contests and find myself with not enough time to do a good job. A habit I need to correct.
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, Well, structurally this is well written piece. As for content, I think you need more of a plot or conflict. I suppose this could be considered woman against nature but there doesn't appear to be a conflict to resolve. It rained , you got wet and then went home. Most of the story is describing the scene.
Good luck in the contest.
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coming down in windblown sheets and, to make matter{s} worse,
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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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Hmm, Well, structurally this is well written piece. As for content, I think you need more of a plot or conflict. I suppose this could be considered woman against nature but there doesn't appear to be a conflict to resolve. It rained , you got wet and then went home. Most of the story is describing the scene.
Good luck in the contest.
note:
coming down in windblown sheets and, to make matter{s} worse,
-add an: s
Comment Written 27-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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Thank you. Yep, I didn't give myself enough time to do a really good job of writing this. I have a bad habit of procrastinating. I need to correct that habit.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Love the last sentence. Well, there's always next year, as they say. That's the problem with outdoor activities. You can't know what the weather will be like on the day, weeks or months earlier, when you plan the event. It boggles my mind how girls can have outdoor weddings! :)
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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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Love the last sentence. Well, there's always next year, as they say. That's the problem with outdoor activities. You can't know what the weather will be like on the day, weeks or months earlier, when you plan the event. It boggles my mind how girls can have outdoor weddings! :)
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Comment Written 27-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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Thank you. We had a great time anyway. I don't think the hoses felt the same way. LOL
