Messy Eating
Eating can be great fun.49 total reviews
Comment from RYME4U
This is well written and the point you are making is so true. I like the way you've presented this although it is hard to read against that background color.This contest was fun and you did well.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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This is well written and the point you are making is so true. I like the way you've presented this although it is hard to read against that background color.This contest was fun and you did well.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review. Your kind comments and wishes are really appreciated; as are the stars. Okay I will find another background color -I was trying to get in the colors of the peas and squash.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Good way to make a real mess, especially when it gets smeared over clothing. I am eager to have my first grandchild, but won't babysit till the tyke is three! :)
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Good way to make a real mess, especially when it gets smeared over clothing. I am eager to have my first grandchild, but won't babysit till the tyke is three! :)
Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review. Your kind comments and wishes are really appreciated; as are the stars. A very smart grandmother to be.
Comment from Bollie
This is a very creative and clever poem for the "What a mess" contest. It's well written with some really nice rhyming. I do think that the varying syllables count is a little to extreme which doesn't allow the poem to flow effortlessly. However, I think that this is a really good poem for the contest and overall a really nice job. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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This is a very creative and clever poem for the "What a mess" contest. It's well written with some really nice rhyming. I do think that the varying syllables count is a little to extreme which doesn't allow the poem to flow effortlessly. However, I think that this is a really good poem for the contest and overall a really nice job. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review. Your kind comments and wishes are really appreciated; as are the stars. I am new enough to poetry that I am still figuring it all out.
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You're very welcome.
Have a wonderful night.
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You're very welcome.
Have a wonderful night.
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You're very welcome.
Have a wonderful night.
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Good entry into the What a Mess contest. I like the comparison between the infants and the elderly. Yes, it is true. The aging process does it to all of us. Nice job. Good luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Good entry into the What a Mess contest. I like the comparison between the infants and the elderly. Yes, it is true. The aging process does it to all of us. Nice job. Good luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review. Your kind comments and wishes are really appreciated; as are the stars.
Comment from Alan K Pease
My experience with the artful eating or painting by my two young sons was the same. They loved to make a mess and taunted us with their antics. As for me at 77, I haven't reached that low point as yet and hope to pass on before I reach that state of feebleness. Enjoyed your rhyme, rhythm, and message.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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My experience with the artful eating or painting by my two young sons was the same. They loved to make a mess and taunted us with their antics. As for me at 77, I haven't reached that low point as yet and hope to pass on before I reach that state of feebleness. Enjoyed your rhyme, rhythm, and message.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review. Your kind comments are really appreciated; as are the stars. I wish for you to continue doing as well as you have been doing.
Comment from HarryT
This challenge is tough. I think you have made a valiant effort. Following are my suggestions, however, you are the author and you make the final decision.
Stanza 1: delete last line it seems trite and forced.
Stanza 2: change seventy-two to ninety-two. Most of my friends are in their seventies and I don't know one who eats pureed food. Delete last line again seems forced.
Stanza 3: delete first line.
Might consider dropping the rhyme, many occasions seem forced.
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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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This challenge is tough. I think you have made a valiant effort. Following are my suggestions, however, you are the author and you make the final decision.
Stanza 1: delete last line it seems trite and forced.
Stanza 2: change seventy-two to ninety-two. Most of my friends are in their seventies and I don't know one who eats pureed food. Delete last line again seems forced.
Stanza 3: delete first line.
Might consider dropping the rhyme, many occasions seem forced.
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Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review. Your comments are really appreciated; as are the stars.
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You are welcome
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. The full cycle of life starting with pureed food to make us strong to live our busy lives and at the end we lost our teeth and have to go back to pureed food to stay alive for a little longer.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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A very well-written poem. The full cycle of life starting with pureed food to make us strong to live our busy lives and at the end we lost our teeth and have to go back to pureed food to stay alive for a little longer.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review. Your kind comments are really appreciated; as are the stars.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Yeah, well...I would think it's much better to make a mess while creating something artistic than it is to barf up all of that disgusting pureed food being shoveled down one's gullet.
I say give babies and elderly folks a big slab of tender baby back ribs and let 'em chomp, and gum, and slobber all over 'em while having some fun with their food.
Good luck in this "messy" contest.
~Dean ;}
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Yeah, well...I would think it's much better to make a mess while creating something artistic than it is to barf up all of that disgusting pureed food being shoveled down one's gullet.
I say give babies and elderly folks a big slab of tender baby back ribs and let 'em chomp, and gum, and slobber all over 'em while having some fun with their food.
Good luck in this "messy" contest.
~Dean ;}
Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review. Your kind comments and wishes are really appreciated; as are the stars. I do agree about the idea of the baby back ribs if they are equally messy.
Comment from Marykelly
I had forgotten what messy eaters little ones can be until my grandson who is one year old visited recently and I tried to feed him from some of those jars of food that identify themselves as peas, or peaches, or green beans, but look nothing like the food they claim to be. Smooshing, smearing, and spitting are the eating techniques of Lincoln and he painted the tray, me, and him. Your poem could be describing me and Lincoln at lunchtime. This was fun to read.
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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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I had forgotten what messy eaters little ones can be until my grandson who is one year old visited recently and I tried to feed him from some of those jars of food that identify themselves as peas, or peaches, or green beans, but look nothing like the food they claim to be. Smooshing, smearing, and spitting are the eating techniques of Lincoln and he painted the tray, me, and him. Your poem could be describing me and Lincoln at lunchtime. This was fun to read.
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Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review. Your kind comments are really appreciated; as are the stars.
