The Man in the Moon
He's not the same.14 total reviews
Comment from joeruptak
Great imagination the flow is great making for a enjoyable read the rhyme and rhythm are superb
this is the type of poetry I really enjoy plainspoken and put simply.
Thank you for an enjoyable read
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Great imagination the flow is great making for a enjoyable read the rhyme and rhythm are superb
this is the type of poetry I really enjoy plainspoken and put simply.
Thank you for an enjoyable read
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Thank you for a nice review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. 8-)
Comment from Kate Tompkins
You're right, the moon landing did take some of the romance out of it. Though perhaps if people didn't walk around with their eyes on their phone, and their ears full of tunes...
A delightful poem, that flows nicely. My only quibble is that I feel you need a bit of a bridge between the first and second verses. The first verse strikes me as talking about how people today see (or don't see) the moon, but the next two verses suggest that the narrator still sees it in the old way. I wouldn't recommend actually starting the second verse with "but," but I feel something like that would make the change a bit less abrupt. Though perhaps you meant it to be that way?
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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You're right, the moon landing did take some of the romance out of it. Though perhaps if people didn't walk around with their eyes on their phone, and their ears full of tunes...
A delightful poem, that flows nicely. My only quibble is that I feel you need a bit of a bridge between the first and second verses. The first verse strikes me as talking about how people today see (or don't see) the moon, but the next two verses suggest that the narrator still sees it in the old way. I wouldn't recommend actually starting the second verse with "but," but I feel something like that would make the change a bit less abrupt. Though perhaps you meant it to be that way?
Comment Written 27-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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Hmmmm. I'll have to look at it again. Thank you for the input.
I appreciate your comments and the time you took to review this poem. I really appreciate it. 8-)
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, I see my own version of a face or a man in the moon, if you prefer, Poet.
Mine could hardly be said to evoke feelings of peacefulness or serenity, however.
Good work in this moon musing contest.
Good luck.
~Dean
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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Well, I see my own version of a face or a man in the moon, if you prefer, Poet.
Mine could hardly be said to evoke feelings of peacefulness or serenity, however.
Good work in this moon musing contest.
Good luck.
~Dean
Comment Written 24-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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They say it's all in the eye of the beholder. Thanks for reading and reviewing. 8-)
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You're more 'n' welcome, Yvonne.
~Dean :)
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Very lovely entry into the Moon Musings contest. It's sweet and charming in its wording. Nice rhythm and rhyme throughout with very good flow to the piece. Enjoyed, beginning to end. Good luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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Very lovely entry into the Moon Musings contest. It's sweet and charming in its wording. Nice rhythm and rhyme throughout with very good flow to the piece. Enjoyed, beginning to end. Good luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 24-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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Thank you for your lovely review. 8-)
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You are so welcomed!
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You are so welcomed!
Comment from dragonpoet
How can anyoone be the same after seeing and hearing all he sees and hears. Though he always does seems to listen.
Hope you did well in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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How can anyoone be the same after seeing and hearing all he sees and hears. Though he always does seems to listen.
Hope you did well in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 24-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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You are so right. Never thought of that.
Thank you for your very nice review. 8-)
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No problem.
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Comment from William Ross
very good on the moon musing prompt with this wonderful piece on the man in the moon. nice rhyming and rhythm, good luck on this and have a good day
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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very good on the moon musing prompt with this wonderful piece on the man in the moon. nice rhyming and rhythm, good luck on this and have a good day
Comment Written 24-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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Thank you. I appreciate your review. 8-)
Comment from AnnaLinda
Poet,
This is a sweet, cute, creative and melodic entry for this contest.
Nice question in the beginning, great free flowing rhymed lines
and I especially like the following lines:
" love to see your handsome face
So round and smiling up in space
Each night I share things I hold dear
And there you are, so far, yet near"
Best wishes in the contest,
Linda
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2016
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Poet,
This is a sweet, cute, creative and melodic entry for this contest.
Nice question in the beginning, great free flowing rhymed lines
and I especially like the following lines:
" love to see your handsome face
So round and smiling up in space
Each night I share things I hold dear
And there you are, so far, yet near"
Best wishes in the contest,
Linda
Comment Written 23-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2016
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Thank you for this exceptionally lovely review. I truly appreciate it.
I'm happy you enjoyed reading it. 8-)
Comment from RoostyNester
I like your moon musing poem! It is really cute. Everyone knows something about the moon...it's in all our lives. So many have admired it, and enjoyed the company of it! Your poem says it all! Very well done and cute pictures!
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2016
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I like your moon musing poem! It is really cute. Everyone knows something about the moon...it's in all our lives. So many have admired it, and enjoyed the company of it! Your poem says it all! Very well done and cute pictures!
Comment Written 23-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2016
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Thank you. What a uplifting review you've given me. I appreciate it. 8-)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. The moon always has a magical attraction. When I go outside at night I always look at the moon when visible and are in awe each time.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2016
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A very well-written poem. The moon always has a magical attraction. When I go outside at night I always look at the moon when visible and are in awe each time.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2016
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I'm glad to see someone else feels that way. It is magical, isn't it? Looking at the moon makes anything seem possible.
Thank you for reviewing. I always appreciate your comments. 8-)
Comment from rodea
It is a very sweet poem. Vivid imaging and beauty. It is fun to read and a fun thought about the moon. Thank you for writing I liked the rhythm of the poem as well.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2016
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It is a very sweet poem. Vivid imaging and beauty. It is fun to read and a fun thought about the moon. Thank you for writing I liked the rhythm of the poem as well.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2016
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Thank you for this lovely review. 8-)
