Comment from Day Z Chayn

Excellent

As an umbrella shelters love from life's storm,
so have you kept memory true to form.
Reminiscent of such simpler time,
When a man's love for a woman
Ought be greeted with sublime intent.

Ever grateful,
Shane

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2016

Hey, thanks Day Z Chayn. Love your comment.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

There's one thing about special events, weather and those lovely days, or even stormy times can bring back great relational times. Nicely written free verse, in this case there is a connection, a lovely relationship. Beautifully written in great decriptive language and this is a great entry in this contest, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2016

Thanks for taking the time to read my work. Comments well appreciated.

reply by royowen on 20-Jul-2016

Most welcome

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem. A thunderstorm leads to an unusual meeting between a boy and girl in the stormy weather. Enjoying the rest of the evening in front of the chimney fire.

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2016

Hey Sandra,
Thanks for the read and the comment. A little warm hear for a fire, better an open refrigerator door.

Comment from Hayley Solomon

Excellent

What an amazing, vivid memory. So well written, etched with the purple ink of passion, I think. Bet you were glad it rained!
Why was she barefoot? Did you ever find out?

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2016

Thanks Hayley for the read and comment. She was barefoot because it was a warm summer afternoon.

Comment from evesayshi

Excellent

In my opinion, a well constructed, dynamic response to the prompt - rendered artfully. I have only a couple of suggestions - grammatical ones - may I?
1. 2nd stanza, line 2 - word "splashed" to "splash,"
2. 3rd stanza, line 8 - word "over" to "above,"
3. 4th stanza, line 5 - word "venture" to "ventures."
This is a remarkable read...

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016

Thanks for the read and suggestions.

reply by evesayshi on 19-Jul-2016

You are very welcome...

Comment from rockinm76233

Excellent

Great picture words. The blossom of red above her head, the hurried steps. I can feel the rain pelting down. Enjoyed the poem very much. I love it when words paint pictures and I would recommend the reading to others. Keep writing.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016

Hey, thanks again for reading my poems. Appreciate your comments.