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Lost At Sea and Found

Novel or Story Beginning

24 total reviews 
Comment from l.raven
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HI Sweeter Than Sweet, so glad I read backwards...so I caught your story in order...LOL...ok!! give me a hint...who killed her???...Well!!! I'll run ahead and see...you guys are wonderful...you make FanStory fun Angel...ok...I loved this part...see you soon...so Love ya you...xxoo Linda

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2016

reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
    Thanks for the kind words. Sorry to be sooooo late. :)) mikey
Comment from BOO ghost
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Awesome! Love the beautiful scenery. Wish I was on that boat catching rays with a hot chick like that! hey, read spectacular! Like the whole kitten & caboodle mate. Boo has been a lethargic ghost lately, sorry Lion King. This is a dandy Mikey! Chasing hoodlum children takes my time these days... but I am always game for a quickie review. Novel? Short story? Novel beginnings, BOO is good at that but bad finishing them, right, Cahill? 'Never finished that novel with Mikey in it?" pLEASE LOOK UP THE WORD PROCRASTINATOR and you will see BOO's transparent face next to it... oh, yeap, you need some stars or nugget? Wow! Look what Boo discovered Mikey.

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2016

reply by the author on 17-Jul-2016
    Yeah, your transparent face with mine right behind it. LOL
    Wondered where you where Mr. Ghost. I see your in Dean's contest. I don't see Dean so maybe we'll battle it out. HA!
    Great review. Thanks a million. Post something. mikey
reply by BOO ghost on 17-Jul-2016
    Yep, Lion King. Dean is sitting this one out! cONTEST LOOKS LIKE FUN! With spooky gone we got a China man chance at winning. It is an open contest, so, you probably will get first place. I don't have many fans, and you now that it is about how many fans you got. Fans vote for their fans. I am in it for the thrill of writing it. I am b
    bored, so, don't matter what place I finish. Did you post something new?
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2016
    Just Potlatch stuff. :)) Drop by and give it a go. Novel of story beginnings. 200-400 words, topic "First Love". LOL
reply by BOO ghost on 17-Jul-2016
    oh, yeah. But I don't get on this site much. i am rusty and if i got a time limit I will suck. I wil glance and see what you got cooking. Anything in particular you need a review for while I got nuggets?
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2016
    Oh, today's posting if you like the beginnings of stories. LOL
    Renewed Acquaintances
reply by BOO ghost on 17-Jul-2016
    OK, yep, so, only you and me are in Spooky's contest so far? yep, I am busy working on that. I don't write much so that is a challenge. Rusty, rusty, I do not write ever day, YOU NEED TO WRITE EVERYDAY TO BE IN THAT GROUP OF YOURS... later Lion king, looking forward to see what you post in Spooky's contest.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I am enjoying reading these beginnings of stories. I really liked this one and would love to read what happens next. Is that possible?

Mark didn't look back as he answered candidly. "It's my wife. It's my wife, Sunny." (comma after candidly.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2016

reply by the author on 16-Jul-2016
    Oh, good tip. Thanks. Glad you liked this. I do think I'm going to have to think about this one and follow up. Kind of intriguing. We have a little get together on Sundays if you happen to be around. This is the format this week, novel or story beginnings. Giraffmang will announce a topic 3PM Eastern Standard Time and we'll all start writing and then posting our little offerings. Then we all review and see how we did. Check out the new Challenges Forum, Prose Potlatch. There's one later today for poetry too. We'd love to have you. It's really fun and we're all sworn to niceness. :)) mikey
Comment from MTF1955
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Got me interested. Reminds me of my favorite wife. I am looking forward to her explanation and where and the heck has she been for four years. In the twilght zone? Great job. Mary

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2016

reply by the author on 16-Jul-2016
    Hi, Mary
    Glad you liked this. I've got to come up with something, yes? I have some ideas. There's a few ways to go. Thanks, mikey
Comment from barkingdog
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For some reason my head is playing the theme from 'Gilligan's Island'. haha

Sunny acts like she's reentering from a time-warp and hasn't missed a day, let alone four years.
He wonders how her return can be explained.
Sunny's going to wonder what IS there TO explain.

Good beginning. I'd read more.

:) e

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2016

reply by the author on 17-Jul-2016
    You see it exactly the same way I do. She's going to get off the boat and wonder what the hell is wrong with everybody. She left in the morning and she's getting back in the afternoon. I think I might pursue this. I'm wondering what happened myself. mikey
reply by barkingdog on 17-Jul-2016
    Do it. Continue.
Comment from Ric Myworld
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This is the last bullet that I have for the remainder of the week, and although I seldom give my last six for poetry or such short prose, I couldn't help myself with this outstanding beginning of what I can hardly wait to read. Great job. :-)

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2016

reply by the author on 17-Jul-2016
    Hey. That's awesome, Ric. I really appreciate it. I think I will follow up on this. It's kind of eating away at me. LOL mikey
Comment from seaglass
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I like this. It has possibility. What could be more awful than to grief a death, find love again and then face this. There must be an interesting explanation as to where she has been.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2016

reply by the author on 17-Jul-2016
    This does have some potential. Maybe I'll do something with it. I have some ideas, but I've got to pick the right one or go right off the deep end. LOL mikey
Comment from Bananafish308
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Great opening paragraph, Mikey. Downright chilling. So many directions you can go in with this. I can't help wondering if you even know at this point where this is heading. You certainly have me dying to know what happens next. Very well done.
Bill

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2016

reply by the author on 17-Jul-2016
    No, I don't know where it's going. Some ideas though. It is kind of interesting. I may pursue this one. Glad you liked it. mikey
Comment from nordicgirl
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You aern`t even going to finish this are you. Lol! Well, I hope you do. A great beginning and yes I`m hooked. Damn guy. NG

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2016

reply by the author on 17-Jul-2016
    No. It's more than likely I won't look at it again. HAHAHA! How did you know? Yeah, on my way to hell for sure. michael :))
Comment from nancyjam
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I really am intrigued by this opening. It gives back
story and sets the scene. The reader is aware of the problem right
away and is eager to find out what happens next.
All the elements of a great beginning. Nicely done.
nancy

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2016

reply by the author on 17-Jul-2016
    Glad you liked this. Maybe I'll follow up. It is kind of interesting. :)) mikey