Lucky Penny
Potlatch flash fiction25 total reviews
Comment from royowen
My persistent thought at the end of the story, was...good luck, to her, she deserves it. It would have been so nice for her to give something to begging man, that would have been an excellent touch, but none the less a great response to the potlatch, well done Debbie, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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My persistent thought at the end of the story, was...good luck, to her, she deserves it. It would have been so nice for her to give something to begging man, that would have been an excellent touch, but none the less a great response to the potlatch, well done Debbie, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Maybe she did after the story ended. I think she would have. Thank you, my friend~Debbie
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Well done again
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very good story. Luck can change in a moment when it is meant to be. That magic penny will be welcome here as well. I will only borrow it and send it back when I am done. Lol.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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A very good story. Luck can change in a moment when it is meant to be. That magic penny will be welcome here as well. I will only borrow it and send it back when I am done. Lol.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Wow what a different chain of events.
Nicely told. It was a little difficult to read the red print due to cataract surgery, but thanks to a magnifying glass, I made it. No problems noted
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Wow what a different chain of events.
Nicely told. It was a little difficult to read the red print due to cataract surgery, but thanks to a magnifying glass, I made it. No problems noted
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from I am Cat
I've never actually seen a thousand dollar bill and had to look it up to see if they even print those. lol
they do, of course. I didn't even know it for sure. ;) wow... I'd like to have some of those. lol
But then, I suppose there is more fear of losing one of those, wouldn't there be?
Nicely written, I enjoyed this... I have no idea why it would turn into 10 one thousand dollar bills, but hey... it's your story. lol
It's well written, and I was interested... ;)
nicely done,
Cat
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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I've never actually seen a thousand dollar bill and had to look it up to see if they even print those. lol
they do, of course. I didn't even know it for sure. ;) wow... I'd like to have some of those. lol
But then, I suppose there is more fear of losing one of those, wouldn't there be?
Nicely written, I enjoyed this... I have no idea why it would turn into 10 one thousand dollar bills, but hey... it's your story. lol
It's well written, and I was interested... ;)
nicely done,
Cat
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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It's my dream. I'm off to the library to find that book. Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Clever ending... nicely done. Sure wish I could find some money. LOL! I hope she will share it with the homelesss man. It would have been nice to put that in to show she's unselfish. :)
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Clever ending... nicely done. Sure wish I could find some money. LOL! I hope she will share it with the homelesss man. It would have been nice to put that in to show she's unselfish. :)
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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It's my dream. I'm off to the library to find that book. Thank you, my friend~Debbie
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LOL! Good luck. :)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Debbie,
I enjoyed your flash fiction story You gave readers a lot of info in a short amount of words. Your story seems believable with enough info to me. Because of the limitations of the prompt, you really had to focus on so any things--the elements of the story. I would say that you did a great job.
Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Debbie,
I enjoyed your flash fiction story You gave readers a lot of info in a short amount of words. Your story seems believable with enough info to me. Because of the limitations of the prompt, you really had to focus on so any things--the elements of the story. I would say that you did a great job.
Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Thank you. I'm glad you liked it, my friend~Debbie
Comment from JW
Nice story. It would not surprise me if this story was true that the person finding the money would keep it.
I'm not even sure what I would do should something like that ever occur.
Thanks for sharing this, Debbie, JW
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Nice story. It would not surprise me if this story was true that the person finding the money would keep it.
I'm not even sure what I would do should something like that ever occur.
Thanks for sharing this, Debbie, JW
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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It's my dream. I'm off to the library to find that book. Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Spitfire
Well, I hope she gives some of it to the homeless man! Our stories had something in common. Both libraries had hidden "treasures" depending on the finder. LOL
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Well, I hope she gives some of it to the homeless man! Our stories had something in common. Both libraries had hidden "treasures" depending on the finder. LOL
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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You're right. Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from barkingdog
That was definitely the most unlikely of places to find so much money.
You took me into Jill's world. I even saw the homeless man and then when she opened the book ... money. (I only pictured hundred dollar bills because I don't have any idea what a thousand looks like. I'll Google it now. haha)
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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That was definitely the most unlikely of places to find so much money.
You took me into Jill's world. I even saw the homeless man and then when she opened the book ... money. (I only pictured hundred dollar bills because I don't have any idea what a thousand looks like. I'll Google it now. haha)
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Thank you, my friend. I've never seen one either, but I might check out a few books, lol~Debbie
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Don't forget to take your lucky penny.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Debbie
= This is a really cool story.
= I wish I had her lucky penny. (*<*)
= Love the ending, 'Not on your life ...'
= Excellent work, my friend.
<> ADD: Comma
= She lived on disability(,) which was barely enough to cover her rent.
= She hurried past him(,) trying to avoid eye contact.
<> EDIT: Do away with UNNEEDED = she thought.
--- By tweaking the sentence, as if she were speaking, all you have to so is put it in ITALICS, which tells the reader she's thinking it. NO need to tell them. (*<*)
=YOURS=
Maybe it would give her luck, she thought.
=SUGGEST=
(Italics) = Maybe it will bring me luck.
****** HAPPY & SAFE 4TH of JULY--2016 ******
(*>*) A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
Cheers & Blessings ~ Jacqueline ~ Jackie ~ Jax
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Hi, Debbie
= This is a really cool story.
= I wish I had her lucky penny. (*<*)
= Love the ending, 'Not on your life ...'
= Excellent work, my friend.
<> ADD: Comma
= She lived on disability(,) which was barely enough to cover her rent.
= She hurried past him(,) trying to avoid eye contact.
<> EDIT: Do away with UNNEEDED = she thought.
--- By tweaking the sentence, as if she were speaking, all you have to so is put it in ITALICS, which tells the reader she's thinking it. NO need to tell them. (*<*)
=YOURS=
Maybe it would give her luck, she thought.
=SUGGEST=
(Italics) = Maybe it will bring me luck.
****** HAPPY & SAFE 4TH of JULY--2016 ******
(*>*) A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
Cheers & Blessings ~ Jacqueline ~ Jackie ~ Jax
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much, my friend. Glad you de-spagged this for me~Debbie
