Unlikely Occurrence
Potlatch Prose Challenge47 total reviews
Comment from abbasjoy
Talk about shocked! I would have fainted right then and there, but hopefully drop in Michael's lap.
These days, that is such a plausible situation, and happens more frequently than we would like to think.
Love that twist end.
Well done!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
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Talk about shocked! I would have fainted right then and there, but hopefully drop in Michael's lap.
These days, that is such a plausible situation, and happens more frequently than we would like to think.
Love that twist end.
Well done!
Comment Written 10-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
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Hi there, so glad you liked the story and the twist. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from Margaret Ford
Ulla, you've spun a good yarn, here. It's an excellent story for the potlatch challenge -- it certainly meets the 'twist' requirement. I don't know if there were rules about the number of total words, but I thought this story was just the right length. Margaret
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2016
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Ulla, you've spun a good yarn, here. It's an excellent story for the potlatch challenge -- it certainly meets the 'twist' requirement. I don't know if there were rules about the number of total words, but I thought this story was just the right length. Margaret
Comment Written 07-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2016
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Hi Margaret, Thanks very much. I'm glad you liked my wee story. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment from Walu Feral
Hahahaha! Bugger! G'day Ulla. Lovely written story and a fab entry into the challenge.
There is one thing that I have learned over the years...when you least expect it, expect it lol. How sad for her lol.
Very well done and entertaining piece.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2016
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Hahahaha! Bugger! G'day Ulla. Lovely written story and a fab entry into the challenge.
There is one thing that I have learned over the years...when you least expect it, expect it lol. How sad for her lol.
Very well done and entertaining piece.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 07-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2016
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Hi Fez, yeah, tough luck I would say. I'm so glad you liked it. Thanks a lot for the review. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment from Ginger Banks
A very interesting and though-provoking post. I like the characters and the fact that they seem to love one another, then the bombshell hits, a nice twist. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2016
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A very interesting and though-provoking post. I like the characters and the fact that they seem to love one another, then the bombshell hits, a nice twist. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2016
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it. All the best. Ulla:)))
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You're welcome.
Comment from Bryana
I was also very surprised when I read
the handsome guy had his hand on
a guys thigh. I've had gay friends and
this doesn't bother me anymore.
Un abrazo.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016
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I was also very surprised when I read
the handsome guy had his hand on
a guys thigh. I've had gay friends and
this doesn't bother me anymore.
Un abrazo.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016
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Thank so very much Bryana. I'm very glad you liked it. Un abrazo, Ulla:)))
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hola, guapa, :)
Flash fiction is hard to do. I have a couple of times and I think you did an awesome job. I can imagine the surprise, the horror, the heartache, the betrayal and then .... the anger the fury... I wonder what she did to him and him. LoL
Awesome!
Tu amiga la gitana
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016
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Hola, guapa, :)
Flash fiction is hard to do. I have a couple of times and I think you did an awesome job. I can imagine the surprise, the horror, the heartache, the betrayal and then .... the anger the fury... I wonder what she did to him and him. LoL
Awesome!
Tu amiga la gitana
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016
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Hola Gitana. Muchisimas gracias. An awesome review. I'm so pleased that you liked it. I wouldn't like to be in his shoes once she's finished with him.LOL. Un abrazo de tu amiga, Ulla:)))
Comment from Mabaker
Oh what a beauty! That was so well done I never saw it coming six stars for clever writing, but then you usually do please with your stories and I always read you. Anyway that was great. Sincerely Anne.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Oh what a beauty! That was so well done I never saw it coming six stars for clever writing, but then you usually do please with your stories and I always read you. Anyway that was great. Sincerely Anne.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Awww, thank you so much, Anne, for your great review and stars. Yes, you do always read me and I'm so very thankful for that. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Uh oh! Yes, I figured there was a lover, but not a gay lover. Nice twist!
Unlikely occurrence - typo in the title. :)
and almost fainted() when she looked at the handsome face staring back at her. - delete comma.
"Airline, if you must know, but right now I'm more interested in getting my drinks.(") - insert closing quotes.
Well done! A neat little story and a good response to the challenge.
Av
xx
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Uh oh! Yes, I figured there was a lover, but not a gay lover. Nice twist!
Unlikely occurrence - typo in the title. :)
and almost fainted() when she looked at the handsome face staring back at her. - delete comma.
"Airline, if you must know, but right now I'm more interested in getting my drinks.(") - insert closing quotes.
Well done! A neat little story and a good response to the challenge.
Av
xx
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Hi Av, thank you so much for the great review. I'm glad you liked it. How embarrasing about the error in the title. How did I not see it? and nobody told me. Thanks so much for bringing it to my attention. I have made all correction. I edit and edit and yet I don't see it. All the best. Ulla:)xx
Comment from strandregs
Nicely written story.
I must say a little predictable.
except for the man friend.
Not sure the right syntax is ' the thigh' as that implies which thigh is reffered to.
that said I ain't no expert.
I just say what I think.
and I think you write a good story.:-)) Z.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Nicely written story.
I must say a little predictable.
except for the man friend.
Not sure the right syntax is ' the thigh' as that implies which thigh is reffered to.
that said I ain't no expert.
I just say what I think.
and I think you write a good story.:-)) Z.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Thanks very much. I'm sorry you found it predictable. All the best. Ulla:)
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No need to be sorry
its all in the spirit of true feedback and helping each other improve.
Comment from Wabigoon
Hi Ulla--
You are very good at these short pieces -- have a real talent for them. This one is very near perfect. Could...possibly be something they get through? Not an easy one though. Sounds maybe like something that happened to someone you know?
Best
Jeff
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Hi Ulla--
You are very good at these short pieces -- have a real talent for them. This one is very near perfect. Could...possibly be something they get through? Not an easy one though. Sounds maybe like something that happened to someone you know?
Best
Jeff
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Hi Jeff, thanks a lot for this fantastic review. I'm so glad you liked it. I had good fun writing it. No I've never known this happening to anybody. I think it's a difficult one to recuperate from. In this case I think the marriage is doomed. The airline setting came easily to me as I flew for more than twenty years. Thanks so much for the great rating. I'm so pleased. All the best. Ulla:))
