Unwavering Spirit...
Prose potlatch12 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, That must be very hard. But the day ended in a blessing. I am so sorry for you. Very emotional, It brought tears to my eyes. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Hi there, That must be very hard. But the day ended in a blessing. I am so sorry for you. Very emotional, It brought tears to my eyes. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Thank you for your kind words..much appreciated!!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Will today be the day God wants my baby back? - can't get much more emotional than that. Even more so knowing this is non-fiction. Well written Susan, I too can associate with the - looking around the room at all the monitors situation - well done and thanks for sharing.
cheers
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Will today be the day God wants my baby back? - can't get much more emotional than that. Even more so knowing this is non-fiction. Well written Susan, I too can associate with the - looking around the room at all the monitors situation - well done and thanks for sharing.
cheers
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Pearl why can you relate? do you have a sick child too??
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No not a child my husband has had a Rhuematic heart since he was young and has had many heart ops and spent most of 2010 in hospital hence the relating to the monitors. So hard not to watch them isn't it.
cheers.
Comment from patcelaw
Susan, my heart aches for the struggles you face with your Lilly enduring health problems. May this birthday for her be blessed and blessed for you as well. So often we take things for granted. Blessings, Patricia
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Susan, my heart aches for the struggles you face with your Lilly enduring health problems. May this birthday for her be blessed and blessed for you as well. So often we take things for granted. Blessings, Patricia
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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:-) thanks for the kind words....much appreciated!!
Comment from michaelcahill
Damn, you got me to cry. LOL This was a real tense and taught thriller really. Wow. I can't imagine going through this. You have a helluva an upbeat smile inducing spirit for having endured this. And I know, she endures it and you just hold on.
Beautifully written and just having a story doesn't insure that you can tell it effectively. You still need the skills and you display them here with a perfectly written and engaging piece. Lovely, mikey
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Damn, you got me to cry. LOL This was a real tense and taught thriller really. Wow. I can't imagine going through this. You have a helluva an upbeat smile inducing spirit for having endured this. And I know, she endures it and you just hold on.
Beautifully written and just having a story doesn't insure that you can tell it effectively. You still need the skills and you display them here with a perfectly written and engaging piece. Lovely, mikey
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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No crying Mikey. Doctors cannot predict Lilly's future...which I CHOOSE to believe will be long, happy and bright. We have our challenges. Life goes on...Thanks for reading and the review.. ..You know...I just started writing like 6 weeks ago...too afraid to put thoughts to paper..( dyslexic ugh..)...so thanks for the encouraging words!
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is a very well written and emotive piece of writing. No one would have known it wasn't fiction unless you pointed it out! Of course, you can write it and just label it as fiction - who's to know! LOL
Very nice piece.
GMG
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Hi there,
This is a very well written and emotive piece of writing. No one would have known it wasn't fiction unless you pointed it out! Of course, you can write it and just label it as fiction - who's to know! LOL
Very nice piece.
GMG
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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And lie!! no never!!.....This was a emotional piece for me.. lol Next time I'll pay better attention to the prompt (maybe)..heheh
Comment from jpduck
I was moved by this brave memoir. I wouldn't worry a bit a about it not being fiction. It was written like fiction -- and very fine flash fiction, at that, with its powerful, clipped sentences.
How long ago was this? And how is your remarkable daughter now?
One SPAG. (* * indicates suggested insertions):
'my daughter*'*s unwavering spirit'
Adrian
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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I was moved by this brave memoir. I wouldn't worry a bit a about it not being fiction. It was written like fiction -- and very fine flash fiction, at that, with its powerful, clipped sentences.
How long ago was this? And how is your remarkable daughter now?
One SPAG. (* * indicates suggested insertions):
'my daughter*'*s unwavering spirit'
Adrian
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Non fiction...I didn't read the prompt correctly. This happened on May 30th...my daughter suffers from 2 genetic connective tissue disorders..loeys Dietz syndrome and Ehlers Danlos syndrome. her future is uncertain as she falls into an extremely rare category... I choose to believe she will have a bright future....thanks for reading and the correction!!!! much appreciated!!
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
This was a very good story. No, if you say so, it is not fiction, but it sounds so real. Enjoyed the read very much. Next time, read the prompt....lol...God bless and hugs, Susanne
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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This was a very good story. No, if you say so, it is not fiction, but it sounds so real. Enjoyed the read very much. Next time, read the prompt....lol...God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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This is all true....I didn't read the prompt completely...( focusing issues my entire life!)...you sound like every one of my teachers!!!
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So, is it non-fiction or fiction?
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lol the nuns smacked me so many times on the side of the head...I still have a dent!
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Non fiction...Lilly is my daughter
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I see. Thank you for explaining it. God bless and hugs, Susanne
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So, is it non-fiction or fiction?
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I see. Thank you for explaining it. God bless and hugs, Susanne
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I see. Thank you for explaining it. God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment from Lisa Deverick
If only it were fiction, right? Sounds like a tough situation. Your words make me count my blessings...the way you do yours. Your girl sounds like an inspiration!
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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If only it were fiction, right? Sounds like a tough situation. Your words make me count my blessings...the way you do yours. Your girl sounds like an inspiration!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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All true lisa...she's a great kid. Thanks for reading
Comment from Ann Dudley Duncan
Susan you may have goofed but you did an awesome job of writing. I entered a competition for a poem of over 700 words. Mine was almost
800 but they had made a mistake and the winners were all small poems. Who's going to read 700 plus words? I could have written something a lot easier and even won if I'd known. So, don't give up hope, in these competitions, you never know what's going to happen!
Good luck!
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Susan you may have goofed but you did an awesome job of writing. I entered a competition for a poem of over 700 words. Mine was almost
800 but they had made a mistake and the winners were all small poems. Who's going to read 700 plus words? I could have written something a lot easier and even won if I'd known. So, don't give up hope, in these competitions, you never know what's going to happen!
Good luck!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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lol Ann! thanks for the encouraging words!!!
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Susan, I cannot imagine living each day with this underlying fear. I have been very lucky with my children. Very real terror you have told us about. I feel your fear and can understand from an accident with my son Jimmy and my daughter Stacy.
Keep up the good writing,,,,,, Jimmy
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Susan, I cannot imagine living each day with this underlying fear. I have been very lucky with my children. Very real terror you have told us about. I feel your fear and can understand from an accident with my son Jimmy and my daughter Stacy.
Keep up the good writing,,,,,, Jimmy
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Thanks Jimmy. :-)
