Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

Wow, Red, this is amazing. I really love your Georgia characters, they feel very authentic and the reader can relate to them well. You build the story line expertly, and by the end, we know he's in love with Katie...and then, there she is. Pretty, even though bearing down on forty... :)

I'm having a lot of fun reading these. I even wrote one, if you're inclined to read another. 'least they're short, right?

Carol

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016

Thanks very much for reading and reviewing. I hope to review everyone who reads my entry.

Comment from Ima L. Ami

Excellent

Lol, yes, an empty grave at the crack of dawn is a most unlikely place! Great story and very well told. I'm not sure if you meant this or just changed thoughts mid sentence (like I sometimes do, lol): "In the big middle of the Old Sideroad Baptist Cemetery."

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016

That's a colloquialism, "rat in da big middle uv da thang" from my region. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.

reply by Ima L. Ami on 03-Jul-2016

Ah hah! Totally out the box :) now I see!

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

I don't know what other reviewers' opinions are of this, Red, but to me it's a bit too intuitive. I always liked your style of forcing the reader to think and keep up with you, but I went past figuring things out. The confusion started with the line below. Which Katie did you end up making love with in a grave plot? This was a confusing read. But evocative of the mood.

I felt tired all at once. Katie's beloved grandfather. My Katie. [Don't you want a question mark after "My Katie."?

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016

I was afraid it might not make much sense after I cut out a hundred words and more to keep it at 500.
Only one Katie, who lost her hubby and grampa and ended up with a wino in an open grave...thanks for reading and reviewing. I kept the original on a USB drive, in case I ever let it our again...

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written romantic story. The graveyard is the most unlikely place to get romantic and the cherry on the cake is in the open grave. Lol.

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 Comment Written 03-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016

I think Katie needed a hug after losing her hubby and grandpa, and her first boyfriend was in the right place at the right time. This suited me better before I chopped it down to 500 words. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Gosh this is such great story telling, Ellijay. Indeed that is the most unlikely place and situation for love to be resurrected.

I always enjoy your settings and characters that you bring out to liven up the place.

Super job with this, I look forward to reading more.

Gloria

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 Comment Written 03-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016

I thought it was better before I chopped and hacked it to 500 words, but then I am besotted with my
own voice....thanks for reading and reviewing.