[thunder claps and claps]
Lightning puts on a show in the sky.20 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Congratulations on winning the contest, Mary. This is a wonderful poem that brings a smile. Unique and charming wording. First line especially is a gem. Marilyn
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Congratulations on winning the contest, Mary. This is a wonderful poem that brings a smile. Unique and charming wording. First line especially is a gem. Marilyn
Comment Written 02-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
This is a terrific entry for the Skies Eye Haiku Too contest! I love how you have tied "thunder claps" with "showstopper" together ... brilliant!
Well done! This one's a winner!
Connie
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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This is a terrific entry for the Skies Eye Haiku Too contest! I love how you have tied "thunder claps" with "showstopper" together ... brilliant!
Well done! This one's a winner!
Connie
Comment Written 30-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Thank you for your very positive review.
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Great entry into the "Skies Eye Haiku Too" contest. Very visual! Your well-penned words made this a lovely read. Good luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Great entry into the "Skies Eye Haiku Too" contest. Very visual! Your well-penned words made this a lovely read. Good luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 30-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Thank you for your warm words.
Comment from foxangie123
A most great Haiku you have written here with profound imagery as it should be. Thank you for entering this most valuable work to my contest. Top of the line.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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A most great Haiku you have written here with profound imagery as it should be. Thank you for entering this most valuable work to my contest. Top of the line.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Thank you for your complimentary review and for creating the contest.
Comment from Beara Bella
I like this. I do think the second claps should taps instead and show stopper I've heard before so that's cliche for me. Other than that I love this little poem.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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I like this. I do think the second claps should taps instead and show stopper I've heard before so that's cliche for me. Other than that I love this little poem.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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thank you
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
You can get lost in listening to it thunder and lightning. I could probably watch and listen all day but I also like a good storm (we never get good storms where I live) so I'm okay with watching and listening on the inside as well. Great job
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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You can get lost in listening to it thunder and lightning. I could probably watch and listen all day but I also like a good storm (we never get good storms where I live) so I'm okay with watching and listening on the inside as well. Great job
Comment Written 29-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Thank you for your positive comments.
Comment from Pantygynt
This fills the contest requirements as to subject mater and construction. It also follows the nature and seasonal features common to haiku that are not mentioned in this contest's requirements. I do feel though that the last line, the satori is a little weak, following on logically the two previous lines. The satori should make me think aha! That is an original idea. The repetition of claps in the first line I feel also tends to weeken the overall effect.
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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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This fills the contest requirements as to subject mater and construction. It also follows the nature and seasonal features common to haiku that are not mentioned in this contest's requirements. I do feel though that the last line, the satori is a little weak, following on logically the two previous lines. The satori should make me think aha! That is an original idea. The repetition of claps in the first line I feel also tends to weeken the overall effect.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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thank you
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello :)
Good syllable count and season kigo. Your lines are not grammatically connected but it was not specified in the contest rules so I guess that is alright for this contest.
Good job!
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Hello :)
Good syllable count and season kigo. Your lines are not grammatically connected but it was not specified in the contest rules so I guess that is alright for this contest.
Good job!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from William Ross
Very good on the skies eye haiku thunder claps and lighting in a storm/ Good thought and job on this good luck and have a good day
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Very good on the skies eye haiku thunder claps and lighting in a storm/ Good thought and job on this good luck and have a good day
Comment Written 29-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Thank you for your positive comments.
Comment from Marie Henry
A beautiful haiku - very evocative and descriptive. In a few short words you have managed to portray the beauty and majesty of a thunder storm. Beautiful.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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A beautiful haiku - very evocative and descriptive. In a few short words you have managed to portray the beauty and majesty of a thunder storm. Beautiful.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Thank you for your positive words.
