To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Adulterated "Poems by Michael
7 total reviews
Comment from Manic Mike
Wow, this is awesome...I really like the way you right...I get bored to death with a lot of the other stuff on here....typically I don't point out mistakes, 'cos I'm afraid they're not really mistake haha, but I try to be helpful when I can:
I think you meant cope, not cop. Right?
I think you missed an apostrophe in God's
And maybe a comma here would be nice: yea, lie like you do breathe....which is an awesome line like most of the lines here.....excellent....
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2016
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Wow, this is awesome...I really like the way you right...I get bored to death with a lot of the other stuff on here....typically I don't point out mistakes, 'cos I'm afraid they're not really mistake haha, but I try to be helpful when I can:
I think you meant cope, not cop. Right?
I think you missed an apostrophe in God's
And maybe a comma here would be nice: yea, lie like you do breathe....which is an awesome line like most of the lines here.....excellent....
Comment Written 16-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2016
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Hey Mike...-smile-
well thanks man...glad you enjoy it. ah no...I meant cop...Sherlock investigates right...ah I saw it...but what I meant was He aint no good without Watson. yea...I dont like commas...in poetry...I like the break natural...like real life. haha...anyway...thank you man. love to you michael
Comment from amada
The music is very nice and soothing. Like saying "i don't care what people will say" I stood up and took a couple of steps, great deliberation! Maybe you are trying to express some of your deliberation in his iconic poem as well.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016
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The music is very nice and soothing. Like saying "i don't care what people will say" I stood up and took a couple of steps, great deliberation! Maybe you are trying to express some of your deliberation in his iconic poem as well.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016
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ah just found the song...and went there.
I know he sings of his disloyalty...but things aint always what they seem....-smile-...Hi Happy. you've made me...always in love when you stop by....back at you....Michael
Comment from robina1978
Beautiful photo that complements your poem perfectly. It is yet another free verse. I enjoyed it. Lie by me, over Agatha Christie and all. Keep them coming, and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016
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Beautiful photo that complements your poem perfectly. It is yet another free verse. I enjoyed it. Lie by me, over Agatha Christie and all. Keep them coming, and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016
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Hey Sis...-smile-
ah I dont try to lie...guess I have but I never enjoyed it. there is a difference....love to you. Michael
Comment from Ricky1024
Thanks so much for your review and kind thoughts on the subject Of Adictions.
Is it getting worse or better?
Just ask your local, corner, drug dealer!
I hope all is well as it is here in New Jersey.
Ricky
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Thanks so much for your review and kind thoughts on the subject Of Adictions.
Is it getting worse or better?
Just ask your local, corner, drug dealer!
I hope all is well as it is here in New Jersey.
Ricky
Comment Written 28-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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Hey man...-smile-
what you up to...? my addiction...? ha.....I've cold turkey-d the best of em'...this one has but one cure I'm afraid. love to you. Michael
Comment from Nika2016
The poem is appealing in presentation and photo as well as having an appropriate song to match the mood of the lines. The reader finds the enjambment a fascinating series of riddles which each reader may interpret as he/she desires. This graciousness has been provided by the poet.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2016
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The poem is appealing in presentation and photo as well as having an appropriate song to match the mood of the lines. The reader finds the enjambment a fascinating series of riddles which each reader may interpret as he/she desires. This graciousness has been provided by the poet.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2016
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wow...you do catch on quick.
"sugar Mamma"....is that what you are...? explain that to me would you...? what exactly is that...?
if you come around me with this "crap" again...I'm going mute you permanent...clear...? heres something else to have and hold....I dont write for your or any body else's why for....please do try to grasp that. I find you most irritating and arrogant....without an ounce to fill your imagined class....-smile- bye-
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Not discussing me...discussing interpretations of your poetry...in which I find your riddles interesting,...but non-informative to the reader. What is the purpose of the poem if the reader cannot interpret or understand the logic behind the writing? I have never acknowledged the word, class , as it simply means an unfair distribution of wealth. I apologize for offending you on your own page with these interpretations. ..but when you put it out there...expect responses. I will go back to my story now, Mr. Pleasant...You have been muted...Problem solved?
Writing from phone...mistakes.
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Also...read the caveat from the site...Never attack a reviewer...Do not defend your work. Memo missed? Bye....
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why did "Hozier" write..."take me to church"...? because he wanted company...?
-headshake-....nope....I do know that it wasn't an indictment against "Christianity" as established institution...more convicting "membership" who "claim" part of His Church. who undermine "humanness" and judge un-righteously while filthy dirty.
why did Van Morrison write "into the mystic"...? do you know...for sure...? or just what "you" think...?
please stay away from me....I dont like you- Michael
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WTF....church? Filth? Are you addressing someone else? I do not attend...do to this duality..everything black and white...As for Morrison ..have to review...I have lost interest ...
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WTF....church? Filth? Are you addressing someone else? I do not attend...do to this duality..everything black and white...As for Morrison ..have to review...I have lost interest ...
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LOL...........................ah if only I were blessed....LOL
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Be blessed...bless yourself. I don't even know who you are.
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As for Morrison..says he does not know why he wrote it, but he wants to rock her gypsy soul....not the meaning you were looking for? Sorry. Muted now.
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ah haha....ah no no not so fast "Miss all that" reviewer....ahahaha...now if you dont mind, please tell us all what "rocking her gypsy soul" entailed...in detail of course...define this "meaning"...as "perfectly" as he did while doing it...ahahaha...or remembering in words. ah man you people kill me....you think you know better than the next "gypsy soul" you read. I never liked you guys...cant you tell by now...?...ah haha....ah my God.....people are strange indeed...lol
Comment from djsaxon
Nasty LOL. Few typos in there, little bro. "Christie", "can't" and "cope". Isaak was and remains something of a hero. Gorgeous voice. Chris was on the roster when I worked for Warner Music back in the day.
DJ xxx
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2016
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Nasty LOL. Few typos in there, little bro. "Christie", "can't" and "cope". Isaak was and remains something of a hero. Gorgeous voice. Chris was on the roster when I worked for Warner Music back in the day.
DJ xxx
Comment Written 28-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2016
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"Christie"..oh...i've never read her actually. I'll and e in case she reads...Hey DJ...-smile-...yea, he's got his own. Wow...that had to be the gig....-smile-...I wish I was a rock star.....hah...love to you. michael
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I haven't really read Christie either - maybe when I was very little and didn't know any better. Formulaic whodunnit crap that made her a fortune. Thankfully my English Lit teacher pushed me in another direction. Grateful for that, but he touching my 17yo bum LOL
DJ xx
Comment from Joan E.
I was glad to see your name pop up on my screen again--it means you are not overworking! I especially admired your wordplay with the two meanings of "lie" in the effective repeats, plus the vivid imagery in "holy saliva" and "reptilian heartbeats". Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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I was glad to see your name pop up on my screen again--it means you are not overworking! I especially admired your wordplay with the two meanings of "lie" in the effective repeats, plus the vivid imagery in "holy saliva" and "reptilian heartbeats". Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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ahh no still turning the wheel....just heard the song this evening and slipped into a reoccurring memory......just what I do to relax J...you know....-smile-...love to you always....Michael
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I am glad you have a good way to relax, especially with such recurring memories! Sweet dreams, my friend- Joan
