The Curse of 'Gator Bayou
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Leaving the Bayou"A young Cajun girl struggles to survive.
8 total reviews
Comment from aryr
A very good chapter. So many emotions were included- family love (between the siblings), anger (Mr Terreboone's sister), frustration- the family struggles, determination- Marie was going to help the family, she was going to find a way, pride-a way for the bayou people. Good writing, good reading, good job, thank you.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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A very good chapter. So many emotions were included- family love (between the siblings), anger (Mr Terreboone's sister), frustration- the family struggles, determination- Marie was going to help the family, she was going to find a way, pride-a way for the bayou people. Good writing, good reading, good job, thank you.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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I am so glad you liked my chapter. Thank you for reviewing.
Jo
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you are very welcome
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Jo. I remember the name of that show at 2am lol. "Swamp people' it was a great series and made me want to visit.
"the yellow trumpet Jessamine's which the old people still used to treat measles, tonsillitis, and headaches." ( I love that. That's how it was in the tribe and that's how it is here in the Philippines to this day. I swear by it.)
"Sally and her old yellow dog, Yeller, " (Hahaha! What else?)
I get the feeling i have read this before. Did you post this last year? Doesn't matter it just sounds familiar.
"She was excited about leaving and scared." ( I bet. Brave girl.)
This is riveting story telling mate. I love the accents, that's hard work.
Another very well written chapter. Congrats.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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G'day Jo. I remember the name of that show at 2am lol. "Swamp people' it was a great series and made me want to visit.
"the yellow trumpet Jessamine's which the old people still used to treat measles, tonsillitis, and headaches." ( I love that. That's how it was in the tribe and that's how it is here in the Philippines to this day. I swear by it.)
"Sally and her old yellow dog, Yeller, " (Hahaha! What else?)
I get the feeling i have read this before. Did you post this last year? Doesn't matter it just sounds familiar.
"She was excited about leaving and scared." ( I bet. Brave girl.)
This is riveting story telling mate. I love the accents, that's hard work.
Another very well written chapter. Congrats.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 28-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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I did post some of the book I think back about 4 years ago. I have almost totally re-written it and now have finished it.
I am glad you are enjoying it.
Jo
Comment from royowen
Nicely written story Jo, very touching sadness within this story, this dear selfless girl, decides to send money home to her mamma by obtaining work in New Orleans, to make life easier for her mamma and offspring. I seem to remember reading something similar in a similar setting sometime ago. Well done, excellent, quirky characters and great story structure, the ongoing story would be a great read, well done, my friend, blessings, Roy
Typo :: "and send som(e) money home to keep you." 2: "I hav(e) you something to eat fer later."
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Nicely written story Jo, very touching sadness within this story, this dear selfless girl, decides to send money home to her mamma by obtaining work in New Orleans, to make life easier for her mamma and offspring. I seem to remember reading something similar in a similar setting sometime ago. Well done, excellent, quirky characters and great story structure, the ongoing story would be a great read, well done, my friend, blessings, Roy
Typo :: "and send som(e) money home to keep you." 2: "I hav(e) you something to eat fer later."
Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Thanks, Roy, for the review. Yes, I posted part of the story about 4 years ago. I have almost rewritten the entire thing
and thought I'd post again. Still working on it...will I ever get it finished?? LOL
Jo
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Well done, keep going Jo
Comment from Mae 222
A great story chapter of how living life off nature to survive. That's working
for food the God given way. It would make a wonderful movie to watch.
I felt like I was part of it, as I read on. Thank you so much for the chance to
read part of your lovely book. You are very talented. God Bless you dear.
Hugs, Mae 222
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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A great story chapter of how living life off nature to survive. That's working
for food the God given way. It would make a wonderful movie to watch.
I felt like I was part of it, as I read on. Thank you so much for the chance to
read part of your lovely book. You are very talented. God Bless you dear.
Hugs, Mae 222
Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much, Mae, for the six stars and the encouragement. I am glad you liked my story. I have been
working on the book about 5 years now. I hope to get it completely edited and someday published.
Jo
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. This is very well-written. The southern dialect is portrayed in a nice manner. This should turn into a great novel. I wish you the best of luck.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Excellent. This is very well-written. The southern dialect is portrayed in a nice manner. This should turn into a great novel. I wish you the best of luck.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much for reviewing my chapter. I have finished the novel and now I'm going back and polishing it up some. I'm
glad you liked it.
Jo
Comment from LisaD123
This is an entertaining chapter which draws the reader into the characters' world. The setting is thoughtfully created and the dialogue is authentic. The reader can empathise with the characters' situation and the plot unravels in a way that feels logical and natural. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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This is an entertaining chapter which draws the reader into the characters' world. The setting is thoughtfully created and the dialogue is authentic. The reader can empathise with the characters' situation and the plot unravels in a way that feels logical and natural. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Thank you, Lisa, for reading my story chapter. I'm glad you are enjoying it.
Jo
Comment from foxangie123
Is that true that there are places one can't be buried even if part of that faith? I so much enjoy how you write with the southern lingo as written. Great chaptering Hun.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Is that true that there are places one can't be buried even if part of that faith? I so much enjoy how you write with the southern lingo as written. Great chaptering Hun.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Yes. it is true. A person can be deemed unfit to be buried in a sacred cemetery. At least that is what my research
turned up. I'm not Catholic myself. I'm glad you are enjoying my story.
Jo
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Oh My Goodness. That child thinks she can take care of herself but she has no idea how wicked the world can be. No idea. This
story has my full attention Jo. I can hardly wait to see how she manages life in the big city. xx Nancy
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Oh My Goodness. That child thinks she can take care of herself but she has no idea how wicked the world can be. No idea. This
story has my full attention Jo. I can hardly wait to see how she manages life in the big city. xx Nancy
Comment Written 25-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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(Smiling) Nancy, I'm so glad I have got your attention and that you are enjoying my story. The plot will thicken. Marie will
go through a lot before the story ends.
Jo
