Battered Wife's Probabilities
wife's laments......a free verse53 total reviews
Comment from sharpencil
Well, that was depressing! But then again, that is what the topic entails. I'm new to FanStory, and I understand there are different types of writing, but it seems to me there are "run-on sentences" within the dialect here. Are there supposed to be? I'm not sure. My English teacher was a stickler for comma splices and run-on sentences. Such errors were automatic "Fs" in school. The content, however, is wonderful!
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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
Well, that was depressing! But then again, that is what the topic entails. I'm new to FanStory, and I understand there are different types of writing, but it seems to me there are "run-on sentences" within the dialect here. Are there supposed to be? I'm not sure. My English teacher was a stickler for comma splices and run-on sentences. Such errors were automatic "Fs" in school. The content, however, is wonderful!
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Comment Written 25-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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My dear friend, I do understand , the new members of FanStory.com are just not familiar yet with the details of the review. This is a free verse my friend and not a prose. The rules for run-on sentences and comma splices are usually more applicable in Prose category than in poetry. The poetic lines are actually disjointed phrases, typical of poetical lines. there are no rhyming schemes since free verses don't require the use of rhymes.Thanks for stopping by. God bless.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Susan
= Such an all too familiar happening theses days.
= The cycle women go through for the idea of love, for themselves, their children, family, just to keep them from harm by the abusers threats to hurt them is so strong.
= Sadly, with the abuse of drugs/alcohol, I see no end in sight.
= Excellent write of compassion.
(*<*) A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-Down (*>*)
Cheers & Blessings ... Jacqueline ~ Jackie ~ Jax
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
Hi, Susan
= Such an all too familiar happening theses days.
= The cycle women go through for the idea of love, for themselves, their children, family, just to keep them from harm by the abusers threats to hurt them is so strong.
= Sadly, with the abuse of drugs/alcohol, I see no end in sight.
= Excellent write of compassion.
(*<*) A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-Down (*>*)
Cheers & Blessings ... Jacqueline ~ Jackie ~ Jax
Comment Written 25-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Hi Jackie,
Thanks a lot for the very encouraging review. Thanks a bunch from the bottom of my heart. God bless. Susan
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You're very welcome.
Take care, my friend. (*<*)
Comment from misscookie
You captured my attention from the photo.
My heart went out for her to think many women are in the same state.
I was mental a bruise yet felt the same pain I carried invisible scares and cuts.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
You captured my attention from the photo.
My heart went out for her to think many women are in the same state.
I was mental a bruise yet felt the same pain I carried invisible scares and cuts.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 25-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Thanks a lot for stopping by and thanks again for the excellent stars.
Comment from sage17611
It is such a shame the women must endure abuse at the hands of their controlling husbands. In some cultures, it's normal for the women to be subjected to all form of abuse which is accepted. Your poem is well written with a message on the reality of abuse. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
It is such a shame the women must endure abuse at the hands of their controlling husbands. In some cultures, it's normal for the women to be subjected to all form of abuse which is accepted. Your poem is well written with a message on the reality of abuse. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Thanks for stopping by and thanks too, for the excellent stars.
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
This is such a very thought provoking and at times quite poignant. I get so angry at the thought of women being battered and sexually abused. These men are gutless cowards that do these things. They certainly do not pick on other men. I am embarrassed because i was an abused husband for eight years. I finally had enough and told her to get out for good. I thought that I could change, but I couldn't. We divorced in '05 and I have not seen or heard from her since.
This excellent piece of poetry really brings forth the travesty of this despicable crap!
I enjoyed this very well written free verse on a tough subject,,,,Jim
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
This is such a very thought provoking and at times quite poignant. I get so angry at the thought of women being battered and sexually abused. These men are gutless cowards that do these things. They certainly do not pick on other men. I am embarrassed because i was an abused husband for eight years. I finally had enough and told her to get out for good. I thought that I could change, but I couldn't. We divorced in '05 and I have not seen or heard from her since.
This excellent piece of poetry really brings forth the travesty of this despicable crap!
I enjoyed this very well written free verse on a tough subject,,,,Jim
Comment Written 25-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Thanks a lot for considering this a very well written free verse. Thanks again for the excellent stars.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse poem. Battered wives, sometimes don't know better because their mothers and grand mothers also were abused and it seems to be the way it should be for them.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
A very well-written free verse poem. Battered wives, sometimes don't know better because their mothers and grand mothers also were abused and it seems to be the way it should be for them.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Thanks for considering this a very well written free verse. Thanks a bunch form the excellent stars.
Comment from Dawn Munro
As always, dear friend, your free verse is exceptionally strong, allowing the reader to empathize with this protagonist rather than merely sympathizing - a deft handling of an extremely difficult topic. Well done! Six stars, if I had them!
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
As always, dear friend, your free verse is exceptionally strong, allowing the reader to empathize with this protagonist rather than merely sympathizing - a deft handling of an extremely difficult topic. Well done! Six stars, if I had them!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Thanks a lot my friend for the virtual six stars. I am deeply humbled. God bless. Susan
Comment from l.raven
HI Susan, this just broke my heart...no one should live anywhere in the world like this...but some places protect the ones doing this...so poem is so very well written sweet girl...and the picture says it all...God Bless...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
HI Susan, this just broke my heart...no one should live anywhere in the world like this...but some places protect the ones doing this...so poem is so very well written sweet girl...and the picture says it all...God Bless...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 25-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Thanks a bunch for considering this very well written. God bless. Susan
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yes I did Susan...you are so very welcome...xxoo Linda love
Comment from bubblejellybean
Wow so deep! I think it could of used an "a" between such and preposterous prayer. But other than that great job! It flowed very nicely!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2016
Wow so deep! I think it could of used an "a" between such and preposterous prayer. But other than that great job! It flowed very nicely!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2016
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Oh thanks a lot for identifying the slip, the missing "a" was inserted just now.. Thanks for the generous stars too.
Comment from Pantygynt
A poerful piece on the subject of battered wives. This one like so many seems to blamr herself because she has no memories of
"...gentle affection
it was not part of the
vocabulary and language
of her wedded journey".
That puts the whole experience in a nutshell.
Very well expressed throughout.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
A poerful piece on the subject of battered wives. This one like so many seems to blamr herself because she has no memories of
"...gentle affection
it was not part of the
vocabulary and language
of her wedded journey".
That puts the whole experience in a nutshell.
Very well expressed throughout.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Thanks for considering this very well expressed and thanks again for the excellent stars.