Wally Weasel's Stories
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Comment from RiseRutland
I absolutely love this! It has a very nice rhythm, and I can feel the excitement and delight of the child. It sends the message that one can overcome their fears. Well done my friend! What a lovely story. One thing I would mention is that the "a" and the "nd" got separated in the second to the last stanza. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2016
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I absolutely love this! It has a very nice rhythm, and I can feel the excitement and delight of the child. It sends the message that one can overcome their fears. Well done my friend! What a lovely story. One thing I would mention is that the "a" and the "nd" got separated in the second to the last stanza. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 23-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2016
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I didn't catch it in time. Sorry. Corrected now. Thank you.
I'm so happy you like the Wally story. There are a couple more to come . . . I think.
Thank you for a lovely review. 8-)
Comment from AnnaLinda
Yvonne,
Oh dear...how absolutely endearing this story is. Wow, Wally and me
have a lot in common. He won't smell like his weasel self...so funny.
Teeth like alligators...
I loved these lines:
"Pushed from behind, he's on the thing and holding on so hard.
He thinks his little weasel nails have left the railing scarred."
Wow, I like how you have introduced his childhood friend Willie Wolff.
Bahaha.
So fun to read...You are so talented!
Linda
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2016
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Yvonne,
Oh dear...how absolutely endearing this story is. Wow, Wally and me
have a lot in common. He won't smell like his weasel self...so funny.
Teeth like alligators...
I loved these lines:
"Pushed from behind, he's on the thing and holding on so hard.
He thinks his little weasel nails have left the railing scarred."
Wow, I like how you have introduced his childhood friend Willie Wolff.
Bahaha.
So fun to read...You are so talented!
Linda
Comment Written 23-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2016
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Thank you, Linda, for a wonderful review. I'm glad you like Wally so much. 8-)
Comment from foxangie123
Love this and I love Wally. What a great bad to give the character. You did an excellent job like always constructing and making another poetic masterpiece.
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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2016
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Love this and I love Wally. What a great bad to give the character. You did an excellent job like always constructing and making another poetic masterpiece.
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Comment Written 23-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2016
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Thank you. I appreciate your comments. 8-)
Comment from heyjude
Damon my, a cute story about Wallis trip.to the mall. I agree with him... no escalator ride for me. Friends do love catching up on what the other has done. Good job
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Damon my, a cute story about Wallis trip.to the mall. I agree with him... no escalator ride for me. Friends do love catching up on what the other has done. Good job
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Comment Written 23-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2016
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Thank you for your kind words. I appreciate them so much. I expect they'll be up all night. LOL. 8-)
