Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

This is a very touching poem and entry for the prompt at hand. It is so sweet and the weaving of lives is so beautifully clever. Great stuff.

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2016

Thanks for the review, cheers, j

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This sedoka poem, honeymoon, has the correct configuration and presents a picture of respite, after a wedding and night of consummation, when a future can be laid out in its best light and hopeful design.

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2016

Thanks for the insightful review. After all the fanfare of the wedding, the real life plan begins, leisurely and lovingly. Cheers, j

Comment from sage17611

Excellent

You have written a nice Sedoka poem with heartfelt words, and declaration of love. The syllable count is met for this writing prompt, the poem has a nice flow and theme. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2016

Thanks for the review sage. I imagine the first day of the honeymoon, with their lives stretching out ahead, cheers j

Comment from P1

Excellent

this could have easily been entered in
the love poem contest. your words filled
my mind with pictures of you laying on your
elbow watching her sleep thinking about
how your lives are going to go. excellent
imagery and a pleasure to read

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2016

Thanks for the insightful review, cheers, j