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Comment from Gert sherwood
Smiles to you Bill Scott,
I can see why you got All Time Best
Your fun poem a from a chapter in your book People, about
Franco Flippin Funnelatch
Gert
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Smiles to you Bill Scott,
I can see why you got All Time Best
Your fun poem a from a chapter in your book People, about
Franco Flippin Funnelatch
Gert
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Thanks, Gert
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You are most welcome Bill
Comment from Jeff Watkins
Writing rhyme is difficult, and I would never attempt it. You leave a great deal to the reader's imagination partly, I believe, because of the restrictions of the form. However, I was able to leap the gap and imagine the life of a man forever embittered and set on embittering his offspring of uncertain paternity.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Writing rhyme is difficult, and I would never attempt it. You leave a great deal to the reader's imagination partly, I believe, because of the restrictions of the form. However, I was able to leap the gap and imagine the life of a man forever embittered and set on embittering his offspring of uncertain paternity.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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...Uncertain paternity... is a great phrase. Write that down.
Comment from Cindy Decker
Bill,
This poem is awesome!
The end rhymes are perfect. I looked forward to each one. I studied "Id" in school and I think these kids are going to grow up on the wrong side of reality if that's all they have in their brains--I think that's what you meant.
An exceptional, sarcastic poem with a lot of twisted humor.
Good luck in the contest, Bill.
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Bill,
This poem is awesome!
The end rhymes are perfect. I looked forward to each one. I studied "Id" in school and I think these kids are going to grow up on the wrong side of reality if that's all they have in their brains--I think that's what you meant.
An exceptional, sarcastic poem with a lot of twisted humor.
Good luck in the contest, Bill.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you, Cindy, for the terrific review. Bill
Comment from Earl Corp
This was funny, I think I had this guy in my squad in the Army. Why'd you revive this one? Trying to move it up in the rankings? Stay safe and stay healthy in the new year.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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This was funny, I think I had this guy in my squad in the Army. Why'd you revive this one? Trying to move it up in the rankings? Stay safe and stay healthy in the new year.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Jay Squires asked me to revive some older poems.
Comment from lyenochka
That's quite the story! Sounds like they had a happier ending than Frankenstein. They even started a family. I'm hoping they aren't all that sinister.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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That's quite the story! Sounds like they had a happier ending than Frankenstein. They even started a family. I'm hoping they aren't all that sinister.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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They have the nuts and bolts for a happy relationship.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Sounds like a match out of Hell. Now, I am not sure but I do believe
Franco made the wrong choice and together they are not good. Did I get it right or am I all wet?
Ralf
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Sounds like a match out of Hell. Now, I am not sure but I do believe
Franco made the wrong choice and together they are not good. Did I get it right or am I all wet?
Ralf
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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He married a big doll.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Bill, I am not surprised that you could invent people out of that fertile mind of yours. This whole family is quite unique, but what I want to know is why did you have
The Funnelatches pay so little for their kids?
Sounds like some people I know.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Dear Bill, I am not surprised that you could invent people out of that fertile mind of yours. This whole family is quite unique, but what I want to know is why did you have
The Funnelatches pay so little for their kids?
Sounds like some people I know.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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You have to know where to shop, Suzanna.
Comment from Mistydawn
What a poem. I laughed all the way through it. Your play on words, rhymes are great. I can see why it earned such high marks. I'm so glad you revived this. Thanks for the chuckle
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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What a poem. I laughed all the way through it. Your play on words, rhymes are great. I can see why it earned such high marks. I'm so glad you revived this. Thanks for the chuckle
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you, MD
Comment from mmayen
Franco is a flipping psycho! There's a lot you are trying to convey in a very humorous poem. Humor is the best way to convey hard messages. It was good to read out loud and easy to read. I found it hard to comprehend at first until I read it again and had to believe that buddy's sibling is an actual doll.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Franco is a flipping psycho! There's a lot you are trying to convey in a very humorous poem. Humor is the best way to convey hard messages. It was good to read out loud and easy to read. I found it hard to comprehend at first until I read it again and had to believe that buddy's sibling is an actual doll.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thanks for giving this a look, mm.
Comment from robyn corum
Bill,
Yep. That's what you get for making up your mind before you've had time to check things through. You can jump into your own disaster.
Thanks! Fun!
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Bill,
Yep. That's what you get for making up your mind before you've had time to check things through. You can jump into your own disaster.
Thanks! Fun!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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I did a bunch of these three years ago.
