The Bus
How a bus ride changed a life.30 total reviews
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is a very moving story, and I usually don't like fictional stories, but I learned and was fully engaged, the whole time I read this. My eyesight is poor, so I mainly stick to poetry to read and write. I am so glad I had the inkling to read your story anyway. It read so true, that I felt like I was reading what really happened to you. Though some of it was sad, I enjoyed it immensely. Thank you for sharing your talent with me.
Peace, Jesse
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016
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This is a very moving story, and I usually don't like fictional stories, but I learned and was fully engaged, the whole time I read this. My eyesight is poor, so I mainly stick to poetry to read and write. I am so glad I had the inkling to read your story anyway. It read so true, that I felt like I was reading what really happened to you. Though some of it was sad, I enjoyed it immensely. Thank you for sharing your talent with me.
Peace, Jesse
Comment Written 07-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016
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thank you for reading this. I started with the premise of understanding what we have, we are so blessed. Then the rest just happened . thank you for believing in me.
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You have a creative imagination...and, yes, I believe in you. You have a gift, and you are using it to teach us that we are blessed to have what we have. Very commendable.
Jesse
Comment from Muffins
Tender and inspiring tale of fate and how one's life can be changed by the most ordinary events involving extra- ordinary people.
The character development of the main character happens gracefully and slowly like the opening of a flower. And like an opening of the flower this character allows herself to open up and become a better person.
Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016
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Tender and inspiring tale of fate and how one's life can be changed by the most ordinary events involving extra- ordinary people.
The character development of the main character happens gracefully and slowly like the opening of a flower. And like an opening of the flower this character allows herself to open up and become a better person.
Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016
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thank you so much. I like the way she develops too. It was fun to watch in my mind. Thank you for making my day special.
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Your welcome.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Well written story that depicts one never knows where inspiration will come from, or what minor event may be life changing for them.
Sure it was quite a journey as this well written story depicts.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
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Well written story that depicts one never knows where inspiration will come from, or what minor event may be life changing for them.
Sure it was quite a journey as this well written story depicts.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much. I so appreciate your words. I learned so much writing this.
Comment from Rubylou
Hello Judy,
Your story is impactful in so many ways.
If I had to summarize, I would use the line, "The next day we had to decide how to make life right, not wait for life to right itself."
How fortunate the old woman was there to just tell her story without an agenda. How wonderful the young woman's heart was touched and changed.
Rubylou
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
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Hello Judy,
Your story is impactful in so many ways.
If I had to summarize, I would use the line, "The next day we had to decide how to make life right, not wait for life to right itself."
How fortunate the old woman was there to just tell her story without an agenda. How wonderful the young woman's heart was touched and changed.
Rubylou
Comment Written 05-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
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I love your summary. That is so true. When she was giving the advice to our main character she was giving advice that she has lived. You just gave me insight into my own story. I remember writing that and liking the message but you made me realize that it is advice for everyone in that story. Thank you so much.
Comment from Ulla
Jusylee, this is a great story, that shows we can be so absorbed in ourselves that we don't really realise the effect we have on others. Good job she did some self analysing triggered by the old lady on the bus. I liked it very much
I not only would like to see you as an employee(,) but
Well done and good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Jusylee, this is a great story, that shows we can be so absorbed in ourselves that we don't really realise the effect we have on others. Good job she did some self analysing triggered by the old lady on the bus. I liked it very much
I not only would like to see you as an employee(,) but
Well done and good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much for a wonderful review. This story really took me on a journey
Comment from Mabaker
That is a beautifully written story. No one really sees themselves unless they are shown and then the transformation is their choice to take forward or to stay behind. She must have been a nasty old thing for a start, but I'm glad she changed. We all can if we see the signposts in time and 'catch the right bus' Regards Mabaker
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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That is a beautifully written story. No one really sees themselves unless they are shown and then the transformation is their choice to take forward or to stay behind. She must have been a nasty old thing for a start, but I'm glad she changed. We all can if we see the signposts in time and 'catch the right bus' Regards Mabaker
Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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I wanted to explore self awareness in the business world. She had a lot to learn.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hi Jusylee,
What a beautiful story. I love how you went back and forth between the office situation and the bus ride.
I'm sorry I'm all out of sixes tonight. This story is definitely a six.
xxxxxx (6)
Have a great weekend. Nice to meet you. Until next time,
Sonali xx
I walked the four blocks to the nearest stop(,) complaining the whole way;
I half(-)heartedly apologized
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Hi Jusylee,
What a beautiful story. I love how you went back and forth between the office situation and the bus ride.
I'm sorry I'm all out of sixes tonight. This story is definitely a six.
xxxxxx (6)
Have a great weekend. Nice to meet you. Until next time,
Sonali xx
I walked the four blocks to the nearest stop(,) complaining the whole way;
I half(-)heartedly apologized
Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much for your review.
Comment from MTF1955
That was inspiring. Beautifully done. I loved the way she changed and became human and part of society. Loved the old lady. That alone reminds us what is important. Mary
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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That was inspiring. Beautifully done. I loved the way she changed and became human and part of society. Loved the old lady. That alone reminds us what is important. Mary
Comment Written 03-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much. I so appreciate your words
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Oh, this is good my friend. A very interesting story.
It was a journey of self evaluation for the Heroin
and a tear jerk-er as well. Proves that everything happens for a reason as we make our way through life. Well done Judy. xx Nancy
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Oh, this is good my friend. A very interesting story.
It was a journey of self evaluation for the Heroin
and a tear jerk-er as well. Proves that everything happens for a reason as we make our way through life. Well done Judy. xx Nancy
Comment Written 03-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Thank you Nancy. I enjoyed writing it. You made my day a happy one.
Comment from Aussie
Good luck with your contest entry; excellent lesson in humility. Even though it is fiction, you have presented a good lesson to those who expect everything to work in their favour. I liked your story and in closing. There is a saying, I'm sure you'll know, "walk a mile in my moccasins." Thanks for sharing, Judy.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Good luck with your contest entry; excellent lesson in humility. Even though it is fiction, you have presented a good lesson to those who expect everything to work in their favour. I liked your story and in closing. There is a saying, I'm sure you'll know, "walk a mile in my moccasins." Thanks for sharing, Judy.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Thank you Aussie, There was a lot to tell in this one. That is why I like prompts. They take me places I never knew I thought about.
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I have finished my autobiography (you asked me to write) so long ago now I have to get some site money to promote it! Now, I can get on with my 16th chapter of my book on Australian Dreamtime stories for young folks. Hugs, Kay.
