Comment from Leineco

Excellent

I really liked this one a lot! It flows smoothly
and drew me in from the start :-)

I cannot help but feel connected to its message!

Great use of the octogram form :-)

 Comment Written 28-May-2016

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reply by the author on 28-May-2016

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I am still working on the potlatch challenge, and having less than wonderful success...

Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

The last post that you disabled grabbed my interest when I saw the title. I was disappointed that you removed it. Please, please, bring it back? Although, maybe you're not talking about that.

let sleep the dead and buried strife...just let it go...is for the best. If you can!

Great octogram, by the way,
Carol

 Comment Written 28-May-2016

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reply by the author on 28-May-2016

I hope to edit, edit, edit and bring back the disabled prose piece in time. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing my practice octogram!

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

You write wonderful poetry Red. Don't let those thoughts just go - don't let them be unborn - keep writing them into poetry and stories:)

teresa

 Comment Written 28-May-2016

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reply by the author on 28-May-2016

Thanks very much for reading and reviewing. I am still very much in the learning process.

Comment from Galactia

Excellent

Hi

Yep, i so agree, somethings in life are jyst better to let go then streesing over it abd if the thought of what ever concerns you, disgard then. Leaeb from your life lessons and move foward.

Great job

Regards
Tia

 Comment Written 28-May-2016

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reply by the author on 28-May-2016

Editing is so much of good writing. I have miles to go. Oh, well, one step at a time...thank you very much for reading and reviewing.

Comment from Walu Feral

Excellent

G'day Red. Hope you've been well in my absences mate.

Now as far as not writing anything that has really pleased you goes, you have written many things that have pleased me Sir, and I applaud you for it. This is another very well done piece and I detect a note of sadness in it. Keep writing my friend and we'll keep reading as you pen quality stuff.

Well done.

Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 28-May-2016

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reply by the author on 28-May-2016

Glad you are able to join us once more. Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing. Cheers.

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

I like this.

I can see your point of view about books unborn being better off burned, although we seldom do take that advice, or we wouldn't be here on FanStory, peddling our wares.

Actually, until I got to the second stanza, I was interpreting this differently. I assumed the message was to let go of unimportant stressors in your life - there are some battles just not worth fighting.

Steve

 Comment Written 28-May-2016

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reply by the author on 28-May-2016

The more points a poem makes, the better, I've heard. And editing is a big part of writing. I think I have a long way to go to be where I want. Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

Well, that was a bit depressing. Going around burning the unborn children of your creative imagination. Tomorrow you wake up with the words, "I think I can, I think I can!"

 Comment Written 28-May-2016

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reply by the author on 28-May-2016

Something evil just happened and my replies vanished. If this is a repeat, ignore it. I was not happy with my last try and hid it, and wrote this to scrub it from "My Latest Post." Thanks for reading and reviewing, Jay. Just finished the Trining chapter. Excellent.

Comment from Gabriela D. Martin

Excellent

This work of yours might not have pleased you, but it pleased me ;D
Those "dragons living in your head are old and slow..." And very persnickety. Don't listen to them. This is really a beautiful poem, I assure you.
I like the "just let it go" repetition.
I like your rhyming (life-strife-knife, red-head-unsaid).
Smooth flow.
It was a pleasure reading your work.
Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 28-May-2016

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reply by the author on 28-May-2016

Proper editing is so important. I just edited one of my posts right out of existence. Then, I thought of this, which is also practice for the octogram challenge. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Well Ellijay I think you've found your form. I don't see a single thing wrong about this Octogram either in meter or rhyme and I gotta say you've hit on a universal truth with some wit and a great deal of intelligence.

Some things are just better left unsaid.

Looking forward to the Potlatch.

Great job!

 Comment Written 28-May-2016

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reply by the author on 28-May-2016

my attempt at a modern fairy tale got cold and I buried it! Then, as I muttered to myself, this octogram came creeping...thanks very much, Gloria, for reading and reviewing.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

It may feel like we waste our time writing our thoughts down in poem form or little stories. Maybe there is nobody now that appreciate our wisdom, it might have value in future. Never give up.

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 Comment Written 28-May-2016

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reply by the author on 28-May-2016

I won't give up on writing, but on certain of my attempts, I'll bury 'em deep. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.