Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hola amiga mia,

This is a beautiful haiku. Haiku is my favorite kind of poem. It's such a beautiful and elegant poem I like the brivety and simplicity. A lot of people don't appreciate how difficult it is to do it right.

Muy bien hecho guapa. Besitos y abrazos, niña.

La gitana

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016

Hola Gitana, muchisimas gracias. Como me alegro que te ha gustado. Wow, this is really high praise from an expert on Haiku. I love the form as well as you do, as you know, and I'm working on it in order to learn and improve. Besitos y un abrazo a ti de tu amiga Ulla.

Comment from kriver

Excellent

Hi Ulla,
This Haiku is interesting.
You paint a vivid picture with your words
It is easily pictured in the mind.
The visual art work adds to the effect.
Over all it is a good write.
Best regards,
K River

 Comment Written 29-May-2016

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reply by the author on 29-May-2016

Thanks so very much. I'm glad you liked it. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from elainec4

Excellent

Ulla,
Enjoyed your excellent haiku. It is the form of poetry that I enjoy most. Your use of alliteration and assonance add to the flow of your words, and makes reading so easy. Good luck to you in the contest. elaine

 Comment Written 29-May-2016

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reply by the author on 29-May-2016

Thank you so very much, Elaine. Glad you liked it. All the best. Ulla:)))

Comment from Lisa Deverick

Excellent

Your words and that picture....eeek...I can hear the roar of the flames now as they close in on that little house for dinner! After reading your words- I will lift up a prayer today for rain in your area. Good luck on the contest!

 Comment Written 29-May-2016

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reply by the author on 29-May-2016

Thank you so much. Glad you liked it. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Those flames may be the warming sun, a raging forest fire, or the many bright colors of new crops in the field.

Well written poem that depicts Summer nicely.

 Comment Written 29-May-2016

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reply by the author on 29-May-2016

Hi Brett, much appreciated. I'm glad you liked it. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from infinityyingyang

Excellent

This haiku was well written. It had a good natural flow to it and a great satori. I also really enjoy the picture you selected. It makes the impact of the poem more powerful.

 Comment Written 29-May-2016

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reply by the author on 29-May-2016

Hello there, I'm glad you liked it. The continuation to Three Old Friends will be posted next week. Meanwhile, I have a short story posted. Thanks a lot for this. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

Hi, Ulla.

'flames soar spreading fast
devour all within their path
summer has arrived'

Most experts agree haiku must have TWO lines of inter-connected and grammatically correct imagery (read as one continuing sentence), plus a separate 'a-ha' satori.

With respect, your lines read to me like THREE separate statements.

I also think it's best to avoid gerunds ('ing'-ending words) that can often appear as 'passive' rather than 'active' imagery.

Both minor nit-picks can easily be remedied, if you're interested, for example in:

flames soar and spread
to swiftly devour all in their path
summer arrives

Your 575 syllable count is changed to, 494, but that's acceptable, as 'up to 17 syllables' is fine, and mine is only a quick respectful suggestion.

Excellent dramatic theme with an ironic twist in your 3rd line satori.

Cheers, Ray xx

 Comment Written 29-May-2016

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reply by the author on 29-May-2016

Hi Ray, thanks so much for the great review and your suggestions. I did make some adjustments on the the strenght of your suggestions. I hope it reads better now. I'm so new to poetry so all help is appreciated. Thanks a lot for that. All the best Ulla xx

Comment from RosieCus

Excellent

An excellent haiku poem, great descriptive imagery in a few words. It must be an anxious time living with the threat of wild fires.

 Comment Written 29-May-2016

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reply by the author on 29-May-2016

Thank you so much. It is always a worry. All the best. Ulla:))

reply by RosieCus on 29-May-2016

You're welcome

Comment from VaV-VOOM

Excellent

Great haiku Ulla, I love haiku's and also like to read them. This haiku to me flows smoothly and the picture goes with it very well. Just a beautiful read, and thank you for sharing with us. Write On! VaV-VOOM!

 Comment Written 29-May-2016

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reply by the author on 29-May-2016

Thanks ever so much for this great review. So pleased that you enjoyed. All the best. Ulla:))

reply by VaV-VOOM on 29-May-2016

Your so welcome. VaV-VOOM!

Comment from C.J. 16

Excellent

Very good work on this Haiku. Your well chosen words describe the topic well. Hopefully it will rain soon!

Nicely done. Best of luck to you in the contest.

 Comment Written 29-May-2016

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reply by the author on 29-May-2016

Thank you so much on this. Yeah, the lack of rain is a worry. Very much appreciated. All the best. Ulla:))

reply by C.J. 16 on 29-May-2016

You're very welcome.

reply by Anonymous Member on 31-May-2016

You're very welcome.