Comment from Selina Stambi

Exceptional

Roy, this is beautiful. I love how the lines flow. The metre and rhyme are excellent.

When hope meets light, love's purpose dreams,
from words God speaks creation streams; ... beautiful truths.

God bless you, friend. Keep your light shining bright.

Sonali

p.s. Been away for ages. Glad to be back.

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016

Thanks Sonali for the marvellous review and super comments, and the exceptional rating, blessings, Roy

Comment from Henry Carlyle

Excellent

I loved your message, and how you conveyed it; your cadence was delightful, and everything flowed together very nicely. I think a few of the dashes could be replaced with commas or semicolons, so that the ones you keep have a greater emphasis: specifically I loved them in 1.1,2 and 4.4, but the ones in 3.3,4 seemed out of place.

Thanks for posting, I really enjoyed it!

 Comment Written 31-May-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016

Thanks Henry, For these lovely words, and great review, blessings, Roy

Comment from scd41

Excellent

It is a nice well rhymed spiritual poem with smooth flow. The faithful would enjoy the assertion that God is the architect of time. In order to make man submissive to an invisible supreme power that has created the universe, many religions also suggest that our lives are predetermined.

 Comment Written 30-May-2016

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reply by the author on 30-May-2016

Thanks for these most gracious words and a super review, blessings, Roy

Comment from C.J. 16

Excellent

A beautiful, spiritual poem. Great rhyme, rhythm, and flow. I especially like the third stanza. Just lovely. Thanks for sharing. All the best.

 Comment Written 29-May-2016

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reply by the author on 30-May-2016

Thanks for these most gracious words and a super review, blessings, Roy

reply by C.J. 16 on 30-May-2016

You're very welcome.

reply by Anonymous Member on 03-Jun-2016

You're very welcome.

Comment from DonandVicki

Exceptional

I think that this is one of the most smooth and meaninful poem that I have reviewed this evening, hence the six stars. Very well done.

 Comment Written 29-May-2016

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reply by the author on 30-May-2016

Thanks DonandVicki, for these most generous words and a marvellous review and lovely stars, blessings, Roy

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Very nice image.
-Good poem with rhyme, imagery, and message.
-Good progression of ideas:
"before the seeds of time" to
"Our footprints made will one day fade"
-Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 29-May-2016

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reply by the author on 30-May-2016

Thanks for these most gracious words and a super review, blessings, Roy

reply by Pam (respa) on 30-May-2016

You are very welcome.

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

If "Every moment was laid out
before a single day had passed"
Than free will does not exist
for there is no freedom
in a path already chosen
But I like your poem with its strong
opening lines:
"Before the seeds of time were sown-
before the thoughts of man were shown-"
and continuing:
"you'll gaze upon eternal plains-
and see where God -- triumphant reigns"
A very fine poem in the Owen form

 Comment Written 29-May-2016

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reply by the author on 30-May-2016

Thanks for these most gracious words and a super review, blessings, Roy

Comment from GWHARGIS

Exceptional

What a beautiful poem. I too feel that God has mapped out our lives. He gave us free will to make choices and if we choose to follow his path then all is good. Unfortunately, free will is tough to make the right choice. Lovely imagery and good rhythm. Well done, Roy. Gretchen

 Comment Written 29-May-2016

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reply by the author on 30-May-2016

Thanks Gretchen, for these wise words and a incisive review, and your very generous rating, you're right is is tough, but that's were grace comes in, blessings, Roy

Comment from Misty Dawn

Excellent

This poem moved me. I love how it flows into each of the verses.Was a pleasure to read. I hope to see more of such inspirational work!

 Comment Written 29-May-2016

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reply by the author on 30-May-2016

Thanks for these most gracious words and a super review, blessings, Roy

reply by Misty Dawn on 31-May-2016

Thank you for sharing.

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

I loved each stanza Roy but the following one is my favorite.

When hope meets light, love's purpose dreams,
from words God speaks creation streams;
and one day when you understand-
your hand will reach and grasp God's hand.

A beautiful prayer for our children and everyone else.

Blessings
Janeyt

 Comment Written 29-May-2016

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reply by the author on 30-May-2016

Thanks Janet, it was originally written for my grandson, but my wife thought it too mature, so I wrote another. And thanks, for these most gracious words and a super review, blessings, Roy