Man's Great Folly
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Ocean Drowning"environmental poems
20 total reviews
Comment from lightink
Hi Greg,
This is an outstanding acrostic that's an absolutely perfect addition to the book!
I'm so grateful that you wrote this despite of being less active lately (which is a huge loss for all of us).
Rereading it, I'm still by how smooth the acrostic letters are, and how well you fit that specific line in. The imagery is striking and perfect for the theme. Also, thank you for eliminating the double 'filth'. Since I already wrote a long review, I'll keep this a little shorter. Too-notch poem, my friend!
Six shining stars for sure!
Thank you again! :)
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
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Hi Greg,
This is an outstanding acrostic that's an absolutely perfect addition to the book!
I'm so grateful that you wrote this despite of being less active lately (which is a huge loss for all of us).
Rereading it, I'm still by how smooth the acrostic letters are, and how well you fit that specific line in. The imagery is striking and perfect for the theme. Also, thank you for eliminating the double 'filth'. Since I already wrote a long review, I'll keep this a little shorter. Too-notch poem, my friend!
Six shining stars for sure!
Thank you again! :)
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
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Hi! Thanks for this. I haven't been on much because of my son, etc. but thank you. I loved writing for you and was honored you asked me. Never hesitate to ask again. I hope this was good enough? My email is gregmedicalsales@gmail.com if I ever don't answer here :)
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Hi! Thanks for this. I haven't been on much because of my son, etc. but thank you. I loved writing for you and was honored you asked me. Never hesitate to ask again. I hope this was good enough? My email is gregmedicalsales@gmail.com if I ever don't answer here :)
Comment from l.raven
HI Gregory, you are so right...we will be lost is we don't open our eyes...if it isn't to late now....very well written my friend...late reviewing again...but I well catch up...LOL...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
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HI Gregory, you are so right...we will be lost is we don't open our eyes...if it isn't to late now....very well written my friend...late reviewing again...but I well catch up...LOL...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 28-May-2016
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
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Thank you!
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Thank you!
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HI Gregory, so good to see you my sweet friend...long time no see...you are always so welcome you...love Linda xxoo luff
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A well-written acrostic with a worldwide issue. Our oceans are drowning in filth and soot, due to humans uncaring about the environment.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
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A well-written acrostic with a worldwide issue. Our oceans are drowning in filth and soot, due to humans uncaring about the environment.
Comment Written 28-May-2016
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
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Thank you!
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Thank you!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-This is a well written poem for the project.
-Glad to see you are a part of it.
-Imagery is excellent, as well as the messages about our oceans.
-I like the positive outlook in the first stanza, like "virgin blue, depths untouched."
-It's too bad we are not keeping our oceans that way,
as you very well point out in the second stanza.
-I have seen beautiful Va. Beach laden with the filthy things people discard,
as they remain there early in the morning from the day before.
-It becomes pristine again, as the crews clean it up.
-Many are doing horrible things like that; we can only hope the good
starts outweighing the bad.
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
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-This is a well written poem for the project.
-Glad to see you are a part of it.
-Imagery is excellent, as well as the messages about our oceans.
-I like the positive outlook in the first stanza, like "virgin blue, depths untouched."
-It's too bad we are not keeping our oceans that way,
as you very well point out in the second stanza.
-I have seen beautiful Va. Beach laden with the filthy things people discard,
as they remain there early in the morning from the day before.
-It becomes pristine again, as the crews clean it up.
-Many are doing horrible things like that; we can only hope the good
starts outweighing the bad.
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-May-2016
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
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I'm blown away. Thank you so much for a great review!
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I'm blown away. Thank you so much for a great review!
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You are quite welcome and deserving.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Greg,
An excellent addition to the book of Man's Great Folly
Your poem clearly defines that folly
An excellent acrostic poem to add some variety to the forms
"Answers to eternal awe swim within rolling currents"
is a wonderful line
The sad demise of beauty at the greedy hand of man
the legacy of mankind. or much of mankind
Excellent poem on environmental concerns
Well done
I have no sixes left
but you deserve one for this fine environmental acrostic poem
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
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Hello Greg,
An excellent addition to the book of Man's Great Folly
Your poem clearly defines that folly
An excellent acrostic poem to add some variety to the forms
"Answers to eternal awe swim within rolling currents"
is a wonderful line
The sad demise of beauty at the greedy hand of man
the legacy of mankind. or much of mankind
Excellent poem on environmental concerns
Well done
I have no sixes left
but you deserve one for this fine environmental acrostic poem
Comment Written 27-May-2016
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
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Thank you so much. As always your reviews are thorough and kind. Truly thank you
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Thank you so much. As always your reviews are thorough and kind. Truly thank you
Comment from Treischel
Your use of metaphor and imagery is exceptional, as you poetically describe this magnificent blue earth, and the ravages brought by mankind. All done creatively and skillfully in anbAcrostic format that spells out - Drowning. Love your description of the continents as but a reflection between the waves.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
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Your use of metaphor and imagery is exceptional, as you poetically describe this magnificent blue earth, and the ravages brought by mankind. All done creatively and skillfully in anbAcrostic format that spells out - Drowning. Love your description of the continents as but a reflection between the waves.
Comment Written 27-May-2016
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
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Ahh thank you my friend. I'm honored. Can't wait to get back on here. It's been months! Hope you're good man!
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Ahh thank you my friend. I'm honored. Can't wait to get back on here. It's been months! Hope you're good man!
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Greg. Long long time between diaper changes, my friend. LOL...Good job on this acrostic. I don't even thoink you are aware of my new book yet....are you? LOL...If you are still a fan you should have notices of each chapter I have posted.
anyway good job on this one. I liked these lines in particular:
"While we empty bloated ambitions, and instant regret,
Never noticing her tears against the splashes
Ingesting death, swimming under sewage she sinks past
Nothing but disregard as babes kneel to unsifted sands,
Grasping murky horizon, reflections lost between the waves"
Bravo! Stay in touch.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
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Hi, Greg. Long long time between diaper changes, my friend. LOL...Good job on this acrostic. I don't even thoink you are aware of my new book yet....are you? LOL...If you are still a fan you should have notices of each chapter I have posted.
anyway good job on this one. I liked these lines in particular:
"While we empty bloated ambitions, and instant regret,
Never noticing her tears against the splashes
Ingesting death, swimming under sewage she sinks past
Nothing but disregard as babes kneel to unsifted sands,
Grasping murky horizon, reflections lost between the waves"
Bravo! Stay in touch.
Comment Written 26-May-2016
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
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Hey Bob! Thanks so much man I really appreciate it!
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Hey Bob! Thanks so much man I really appreciate it!
Comment from ciliverde
Hi Greg,
well first of all, it's great to see you back here again, your writing is just as fantastic as I remember.
This poem is really sobering - first section describing the ocean in her natural form, so beautiful and pure, and truly a reflection of how we treat the planet - our only home.
The second stanza spells out the disaster that mankind has wreaked upon the ocean - our dirty toes kicking up poison. We have, indeed, disgraced our fathers, and left our children with little to look forward to.
"Grasping murky horizon, reflections lost between the waves"
yes, it will be lost, WE will be lost, if we keep on the path we've been walking...
Carol
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
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Hi Greg,
well first of all, it's great to see you back here again, your writing is just as fantastic as I remember.
This poem is really sobering - first section describing the ocean in her natural form, so beautiful and pure, and truly a reflection of how we treat the planet - our only home.
The second stanza spells out the disaster that mankind has wreaked upon the ocean - our dirty toes kicking up poison. We have, indeed, disgraced our fathers, and left our children with little to look forward to.
"Grasping murky horizon, reflections lost between the waves"
yes, it will be lost, WE will be lost, if we keep on the path we've been walking...
Carol
Comment Written 26-May-2016
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
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Thank you so much! What a fantastic review! Truly. Thank you
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Thank you so much! What a fantastic review! Truly. Thank you
Comment from MacMhuirich
A wonderful write for the Man's Great Folly project. Nicely written acrostic with good imagery. This is a strong write and it was a treat to read. Thank you for sharing.
Bless you
John
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
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A wonderful write for the Man's Great Folly project. Nicely written acrostic with good imagery. This is a strong write and it was a treat to read. Thank you for sharing.
Bless you
John
Comment Written 26-May-2016
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
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Thanks so much!
Comment from Pantygynt
Hi Grey. Good to see you posting again. I've miss ed your stuff recently. Anyway here you are with your take on Jyoti's climate change theme, this time with an acrostic.
Normally I find these acrostic things somewhat banal lists unless they can be presented in rhyme or meter but your word choice and consequent imagery renders those devices uun necessary. This is one of the finest examples of free verse acrostic poetry I have seen.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
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Hi Grey. Good to see you posting again. I've miss ed your stuff recently. Anyway here you are with your take on Jyoti's climate change theme, this time with an acrostic.
Normally I find these acrostic things somewhat banal lists unless they can be presented in rhyme or meter but your word choice and consequent imagery renders those devices uun necessary. This is one of the finest examples of free verse acrostic poetry I have seen.
Comment Written 26-May-2016
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
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Thank you so much! I'm getting back on here now! Can't wait!
