some of Dawn's Favorite Poems,Vol.3
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "A Life In Midnight Blue"a few of my favorite poems - an eclectic mix
32 total reviews
Comment from Ricky1024
"A Life in Midnight Blue"
This is a Shade of Blue Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly!
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Besides all my usual mumbo-jumbo Dawn.
I do believe this to be one of your best works.
It rhymes beautifully and it had Great repetition.
Also, the artwork was wonderful and the Loss factor was incredibly grieving!
Good luck with this and have a great day.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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"A Life in Midnight Blue"
This is a Shade of Blue Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly!
...
Besides all my usual mumbo-jumbo Dawn.
I do believe this to be one of your best works.
It rhymes beautifully and it had Great repetition.
Also, the artwork was wonderful and the Loss factor was incredibly grieving!
Good luck with this and have a great day.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 13-Feb-2020
Comment from Joan E.
I admired the mood you created with the title, picture and "midnight blue" images. Your detailed storytelling about a whim that lead to the death of one's love and ultimately one's own suicide is touching. Big sighs- Joan
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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I admired the mood you created with the title, picture and "midnight blue" images. Your detailed storytelling about a whim that lead to the death of one's love and ultimately one's own suicide is touching. Big sighs- Joan
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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The contest required "romantic" and a blue background. I guess the story of Romeo and his sweetheart was (and still is) influential when I have to write romance. I find tragedy to be the ultimate in romance.
Thank you, Joan -- I'm overjoyed you liked it so much!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow!! I believe we call that an epic offering, my friend! Checked back on the contest to see the results... none were as 'depth of emotion' as this one! This one pulls the reader into the depths right up until that leap at the end... wonderful offering, my friend! ;) Thanx for re-sharing -- I'm glad I was here this time around! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Wow!! I believe we call that an epic offering, my friend! Checked back on the contest to see the results... none were as 'depth of emotion' as this one! This one pulls the reader into the depths right up until that leap at the end... wonderful offering, my friend! ;) Thanx for re-sharing -- I'm glad I was here this time around! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thanks, Yvette. You, O Lady of the South, are a champion.:)) xx
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Huh? Was I supposed to....?
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Hahaha -- God, no, thank you! I'm going to PM you.
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Hey there... just following up! ;) Hope all's well up there... did you PM and I strobed it or have you not had the opportunity...? Of course, I guess I may have accidentally deleted and the world would never know since there's no 'delete' folder on this app... anyways, I just didn't want you to think I'd forgotten you in the event that there was a snaffoo somewhere between....electronic communications can be so finicky like that! ;) Take care and please don't think I'm bugging you if you haven't gotten around to it! ;) Take care!
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Not at all -- I'm actually glad to hear from you about it. I didn't plan on gossiping, just sharing a story, but when I didn't hear I thought perhaps you thought I was being 'catty'-- LOL. Anyhow, yes, I did PM.
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I was sharing something that happened to me, is all -- no big deal, really. :))
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Well, I've been playing 'catch up' in these early morning hours and with what's left in my message box, theres not a PM there from you.... we, of course, except for the one that must have just come in recently that's a 'New Writing Online' ... ;) ;)
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Well, I'm sorry I missed it, then. ;( ;( Have a wonderful weekend up there!
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Oh, it must have dropped off then because I sent one -- my email address. I simply don't write everything here or even in a PM because not everything is for public consumption, you know? *smile* I will PM you again right now...
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Understood completely! ;) singing off for now to do groceries and such... my bits are coming home for the weekend and I gotta feed 'em -- LOL! Will check in later... you and Miss Priss take care!
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Dawn,
Heartfelt, full of emotion, wonderful phrasing, excellent rhythm and perfect rhyme. Did I miss anything? Oh, yes. The final couplet is a beautiful, though sad ending.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Dear Dawn,
Heartfelt, full of emotion, wonderful phrasing, excellent rhythm and perfect rhyme. Did I miss anything? Oh, yes. The final couplet is a beautiful, though sad ending.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Teri7
Dawn, This is a very beautiful, but very , very sad poem you have penned about a life in Midnight Blue. I hope that this is not true my friend. Great contest entry. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Dawn, This is a very beautiful, but very , very sad poem you have penned about a life in Midnight Blue. I hope that this is not true my friend. Great contest entry. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 11-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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It couldn't be true, Teri, love -- the speaker kills herself (final couplet). Thank you so much though -- you are so caring! xxoo
Comment from Sasha
I haven't slept for two nights and I cannot see the screen and I didn't want to penalize you loyal fans for my flaws,so unable to read your post, I am still providing you a response.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2020
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I haven't slept for two nights and I cannot see the screen and I didn't want to penalize you loyal fans for my flaws,so unable to read your post, I am still providing you a response.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2020
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Sasha, I hope tonight is different, and you sleep well. Sweet dreams, my friend, and thank you so very much!
Comment from Drew Delaney
I have never read anything quite so romantic and filled with emotion. Wow! You really are good at writing sonnets and the crown of sonnets. This is totally impressive Dawn.
Suicide following a lover's drowning. Just beautifully written.
Drew x
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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I have never read anything quite so romantic and filled with emotion. Wow! You really are good at writing sonnets and the crown of sonnets. This is totally impressive Dawn.
Suicide following a lover's drowning. Just beautifully written.
Drew x
Comment Written 11-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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What a review! I'm overjoyed. Thank you, Drew.
Comment from Natalie Goodwin
This is a beautiful poem with haunting imagery. The poem begins sad with the memory of her love leaving her, but a few stanzas in, the memory seems to create a feeling of panic and despair for the speaker before she finally resigns to her demise in an effort to be with her love.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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This is a beautiful poem with haunting imagery. The poem begins sad with the memory of her love leaving her, but a few stanzas in, the memory seems to create a feeling of panic and despair for the speaker before she finally resigns to her demise in an effort to be with her love.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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What a kind, thorough, and generous review -- thank you!
Comment from robyn corum
What a fun (hope you know what I mean by THAT!) and romantic poem! I reviewed another 'blue' poem today and gave the girl a four because it didn't have a single thing to do with blue except it had a blue background - but it turned out that that's all this contest called for! So weird. THIS is more like what I expected!!!!! A poem about -- and making you really IMAGINE the color BLUE - the color, the ocean, the state of being, the emotions, EVERYTHING. Excellent job!
favorite lines:
--> What madness made you try to swim so far?
I hooked my dreams to your own special star
--> as on ship's deck, we watched for your return...
my heart beat full of fear, and still I yearn...
--> I take the plunge, the blue is silken sweet,
and oh, my love, in Heaven pray we meet!
*exceptional, unexpected rhyming:
--> Was your last thought of me as you succumbed?
My breath you stole, and every instinct numbed
Great job. Good luck!
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2016
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What a fun (hope you know what I mean by THAT!) and romantic poem! I reviewed another 'blue' poem today and gave the girl a four because it didn't have a single thing to do with blue except it had a blue background - but it turned out that that's all this contest called for! So weird. THIS is more like what I expected!!!!! A poem about -- and making you really IMAGINE the color BLUE - the color, the ocean, the state of being, the emotions, EVERYTHING. Excellent job!
favorite lines:
--> What madness made you try to swim so far?
I hooked my dreams to your own special star
--> as on ship's deck, we watched for your return...
my heart beat full of fear, and still I yearn...
--> I take the plunge, the blue is silken sweet,
and oh, my love, in Heaven pray we meet!
*exceptional, unexpected rhyming:
--> Was your last thought of me as you succumbed?
My breath you stole, and every instinct numbed
Great job. Good luck!
Comment Written 03-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much, my friend. I am very sorry to be so late replying - recent issues have kept me off site again (health & other) but I am so grateful for your kind review. Thank you!
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I'm hoping everything is okay! Sending hugs!
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Thank you, Robyn. :)
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I'm hoping everything is okay! Sending hugs!
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Thanks - much appreciate the hugs. Back to you.
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Dawn
You certainly have been bitten by the poetry bug. This is outstanding. Ive enjoyed your skill with the rhyme and meter and the sorrowful lament showing the pain, frustration and anger of a women left to mourn her beloved ... not an accident or illness, but on a stupid bet. Something between the brothers, the challenge of one to the other ... oh the childish games of men and their ego. Numerous excellent phrases highlight the midnight blue. This is a fantastic entry for the contest. I wish you the best of luck. I would give a six if I had one left. :)) Hugs - Lovi
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2016
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Hi Dawn
You certainly have been bitten by the poetry bug. This is outstanding. Ive enjoyed your skill with the rhyme and meter and the sorrowful lament showing the pain, frustration and anger of a women left to mourn her beloved ... not an accident or illness, but on a stupid bet. Something between the brothers, the challenge of one to the other ... oh the childish games of men and their ego. Numerous excellent phrases highlight the midnight blue. This is a fantastic entry for the contest. I wish you the best of luck. I would give a six if I had one left. :)) Hugs - Lovi
Comment Written 03-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much, my friend. I am very sorry to be so late replying - recent issues have kept me off site again (health & other) but I am so grateful for your kind review. Thank you!
