Comment from Emily George

Excellent

Great use of like sounding words and alliteration. The poem, story has a lovely rhythm to it. I like that the Dragon was tamed by cakes "Dragon surprise" very creative. Well done

 Comment Written 24-May-2016

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reply by the author on 24-May-2016

Thanks, Emily - glad you enjoyed my little romp.

Steve

Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

This is so good. The picture reminded me of a fvorite movie called Petes Dragon. Very nicely written and most enjoyable. I like how you incorporated metaphoric value that could be used as a spouse and every day things. You do that most often. Great Job.

 Comment Written 23-May-2016

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reply by the author on 24-May-2016

Thanks, Angie.

Steve

Comment from TPAC

Excellent

Lovely story. Creative write, poetic structure of rhyme: well presented in line definition. Clear and precise views well spoken in write. I found pleasing in its read. All in my view of this write.

 Comment Written 23-May-2016

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reply by the author on 24-May-2016

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from nancyjam

Exceptional

This is so entertaining and fun to read.
amazing word choice and rhyme.
Strong meter for a smooth read.
Really fun to read aloud.
Terrific images and comic situation.
Should do very well in the contest.
Nancy

 Comment Written 23-May-2016

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reply by the author on 24-May-2016

Thanks, Nancy. I am glad you enjoyed this latest Gobbledegooks instalment.

Steve

Comment from Toneyear

Excellent

Awww.......this is precious. Have you made this into a Children's book? I loved the story and the rhyme is quite fine. Thank you for sharing. You';; get wonderful reviews. Tina

 Comment Written 23-May-2016

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reply by the author on 24-May-2016

Thanks, Tina.

I do have aspirations to get the whole series published, but I have yet to find a sympathetic publisher!

Steve

Comment from Marykelly

Excellent

This is a fun story in poetic form that maintains a light tongue-in-cheek tone from beginning to end. Some of the invented words add to the lilt of the work. There is an energy in the poem from the flowing words and from the characters actions. The solution to the threat of the dragon is in keeping with the overall light tone, he eats and goes back to sleep.

 Comment Written 23-May-2016

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reply by the author on 24-May-2016

Thanks, Mary.

As I say in my notes, this is the sixth instalment, and I have tried to keep the energy high throughout. I'm glad you thought the dragon didn't run out of puff! Small dragon joke, there! :O)

Steve

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Hello Steve;
-you have a very excellent knack for writing fairytales and making up your own words that are convincingly appropriate for your writing. This particular writing involve a dragon that is common by the likeness of a Prince Rupert who conned the Dragon with cakes and pies and doughnuts for his liking.
- all of your rhyming words seem to be appropriately supportive and continues into the meaning and concept of each and all of your line therefore making your reading to flow smoothly.
- none of your rhymes seem to be forced or labored helpful in making the reading clear.
-all of your writing is written in pentameter but I found one in the first line of the last verse is written with 11 syllables. This rhythm along with the cadence, timing and tempo your reading was clear, fluid and easy.
-I believe there spelling of the word is pokey.
-I specifically and particularly really enjoyed and was entertained by your writing
and felt it was written with much imagination which was wearily inventive and ingeniously creative.
-good luck in the contest Steve and made a good Lord be with you always.
Alex

 Comment Written 23-May-2016

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reply by the author on 24-May-2016

Alex, thanks as always for the detailed review.

Steve

reply by krys123 on 24-May-2016

You are so very welcome Steve.
Alex

Comment from wiserwoman

Exceptional

Love this! As one who loves to write crazy rhyming poem/stories for kids, I appreciate what this does so well. Great pacing. It gallops down the page to a lovely ending. Would love to sit in a writer's circle with you.

 Comment Written 23-May-2016

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reply by the author on 24-May-2016

So, where are all these crazy rhyming poems. I see you have been a member for some time, but have only just started posting!

As I say in my notes, this is the sixth instalment of Gobbledegooks. If you have the time and the inclination, you can go to my portfolio and click on the magnifying glass search icon, and you will find the 'book' near the top of the list.

While you're there, you might want to check out Cheezel the Weasel, whi also has his own 'book.'

Thanks a lot for the great review and the six stars - much appreciated.

Steve

reply by wiserwoman on 24-May-2016

I guess I may have signed up a long time ago, but recall having paid anything or participated at all. So I consider this my first week.

reply by the author on 24-May-2016

Well, good luck! I'm sure you're an older but wiser woman now!

Comment from Spiritual Echo

Excellent

Damn! You're paying me for my entertainment?

This is so clever, and just so much fun. Not being a poet, I sometimes look from the outside in, thinking there are more styles than formats, and quite frankly, more crap than talent. But you have always maintained an aura of elegance in your posts.

The rhymes you've used are playful, and I can EASILY see this as a picture book poem--though you might have to edit the 'meeting] between Hilda and Rupert to get listed in the kid's section.

Great work.

 Comment Written 23-May-2016

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reply by the author on 24-May-2016

An aura of elegance? Really? Moi?

Thanks for the very kind words. I would, of course, love to get the whole series published, but I have yet to find a sympathetic publisher.

Steve

reply by Spiritual Echo on 24-May-2016

You do realize that Avril--Cumbrianlass is self-publishing and she is selling on Amazon, making money every month. She did it entirely herself without any companies and the cost is very reasonable. You might want to chat with her about her experiences.

reply by the author on 24-May-2016

Thanks. Yes, I am following Avril's experiences, and I read her useful essay on self-publishing. Right now, any expense is 'unreasonable' and there is the sticky issue of finding a suitable and cheap illustrator. I will get there eventually.

Comment from Douglas Paul

Exceptional

This is just fantastic, Your rhyme and meter are superb. Your story is witty, creative and fun. This is a great read. You did very well with this.

 Comment Written 23-May-2016

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reply by the author on 24-May-2016

Douglas, thanks so much for the great review and the six shiny stars.

Steve