Where Angels Fear to Tread
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Rude Awakening"A young man is found alone just miles from a dead
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Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for another entertaining and well written chapter of Damon's adventure. If adventure could even begin to cover or describe the mess his parent's got him into. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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Thanks for another entertaining and well written chapter of Damon's adventure. If adventure could even begin to cover or describe the mess his parent's got him into. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 18-May-2016
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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Thanks, Ric, for your wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
Miss Lila M. Savoy is certainly no one to be tangled with as Damon, seconded by Miss Lila and rushed off to a camp to be "adjusted". She is a formidable lady this amazing woman who is God's aid. Amazingly creative and imaginative person as the foundation of your well written and imaginative series Gretchen well done, blessings, Roy
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Miss Lila M. Savoy is certainly no one to be tangled with as Damon, seconded by Miss Lila and rushed off to a camp to be "adjusted". She is a formidable lady this amazing woman who is God's aid. Amazingly creative and imaginative person as the foundation of your well written and imaginative series Gretchen well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 17-May-2016
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. Gretchen
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Most welcome
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Excellent chapter that tells us the story of how Damon being legally give to Lila Savoy. The young man is so full of hatred now and doesn't know where he is headed or what his future will contain. As always, you dialogue is impeccable along with the drama that makes this a great read. Well done.
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Excellent chapter that tells us the story of how Damon being legally give to Lila Savoy. The young man is so full of hatred now and doesn't know where he is headed or what his future will contain. As always, you dialogue is impeccable along with the drama that makes this a great read. Well done.
Comment Written 17-May-2016
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Poor kid. I'm sure he was absolutely terrified.
His attitude changed abruptly, but it wouldn't have
lasted long. What gets into teens who act out like this?
I think Miss Lila has the wrong approach. She's just
another saddest who hide's behind religion to satisfy her evil urges. Good chapter Gretchen. Nancy
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Poor kid. I'm sure he was absolutely terrified.
His attitude changed abruptly, but it wouldn't have
lasted long. What gets into teens who act out like this?
I think Miss Lila has the wrong approach. She's just
another saddest who hide's behind religion to satisfy her evil urges. Good chapter Gretchen. Nancy
Comment Written 17-May-2016
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I understand why his parents did this but I'm not sure I could. I really like this story and you are doing a great job with it.
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I understand why his parents did this but I'm not sure I could. I really like this story and you are doing a great job with it.
Comment Written 17-May-2016
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
Wow! Getting hot, now. Was not sure where we were for a while there. But I am on track now. I still think this woman is some sort of alien or super nerd or something.
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Wow! Getting hot, now. Was not sure where we were for a while there. But I am on track now. I still think this woman is some sort of alien or super nerd or something.
Comment Written 17-May-2016
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from sage17611
Your story is well written and interesting. The flow is good, and the dialog between characters is narrated clearly without any confusion. The characters appear realistic and believable. I like the way you ended the story with Damon being taken to a camp without prior notice, sparking interest and curiosity to keep the reader coming back to read the following chapters. Good job, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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Your story is well written and interesting. The flow is good, and the dialog between characters is narrated clearly without any confusion. The characters appear realistic and believable. I like the way you ended the story with Damon being taken to a camp without prior notice, sparking interest and curiosity to keep the reader coming back to read the following chapters. Good job, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-May-2016
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
I'm afraid this chapter confuses me, Gretchen. Is it flashback? It was my understanding that Lila took Damon from the parents and to her house where she forced him to drink vinegar and then whipped him until he broke and became submissive. Could it be I missed a chapter? Problem is, it seems this should be BEFORE the one I read.
. He could feel his Fuck the world facade starting to crumble. [No reason to cap "fuck" but the phrase "fuck the world" should be italicized or even hyphenated to set it apart as a phrase.]
Every one had lost their damned minds. [EVERYONE should be combined.]
"Save his life?" Hamby said, his voice full of doubt. [... Hamby ASKED, his voice full of doubt.]
As usual, though, this is a good, entertaining read.
reply by the author on 17-May-2016
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I'm afraid this chapter confuses me, Gretchen. Is it flashback? It was my understanding that Lila took Damon from the parents and to her house where she forced him to drink vinegar and then whipped him until he broke and became submissive. Could it be I missed a chapter? Problem is, it seems this should be BEFORE the one I read.
. He could feel his Fuck the world facade starting to crumble. [No reason to cap "fuck" but the phrase "fuck the world" should be italicized or even hyphenated to set it apart as a phrase.]
Every one had lost their damned minds. [EVERYONE should be combined.]
"Save his life?" Hamby said, his voice full of doubt. [... Hamby ASKED, his voice full of doubt.]
As usual, though, this is a good, entertaining read.
Comment Written 17-May-2016
reply by the author on 17-May-2016
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It is a flashback. I have tried using the advanced editor but it never works for me. One day I will master it. Until then I will confuse the hell out of my readers, lol. Thanks for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from DonandVicki
Your story is very exciting and you have held my attention and like all good writers you know when to end the chapter leading the reader on into the next. Well done.
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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Your story is very exciting and you have held my attention and like all good writers you know when to end the chapter leading the reader on into the next. Well done.
Comment Written 16-May-2016
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from candyfink
I don't see anything that needs to be changed or improved........ I think it's fine how it is written now............ thank you for sharing.......
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I don't see anything that needs to be changed or improved........ I think it's fine how it is written now............ thank you for sharing.......
Comment Written 16-May-2016
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. Gretchen
