Comment from flylikeaneagle

Excellent

His Grayness: a beautiful poem about love and gratitude. I like your photo.
One must always maintain and stimulate love with action. We can share
time together with a hot meal, walk or watching tv together. Enjoy
the new year. flylikeaneagle - nancy

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018

Thank you so much; flylikeaneagle, for your kind and generous review. It is sincerely appreciated! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance

Comment from Cycler

Excellent

I understand the analogy - that's good. Your words all work well together to paint your refreshing description of love - as well as to point out the need for constant attention to prevent the effects of neglect. A very nice read and read-again.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018

Thank you very much Cycler, for your kind review and stars...which are greatly appreciated! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance

Comment from mountainwriter49

Excellent

Good Morning, Vance,

I enjoyed reading your love poem this morning. I think the metaphor of the fresh fountain of gratitude is an apt one. I admire your use of excellent words to give the poem a touch of the Old English. For example, ere, sloth, and the last line.

May I offer some suggestions for you to consider?

fountain of Gratitude = foundation of gratitude
ere' = ne'er
ere is an archaic word meaning before. I'm thinking you're trying to say, "...springs never (ne'er) be tainted...

An excellent poem, Vance, and best of luck to you in the contest.

Ray

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2016

Thanks Ray and sorry for the delayed reply as I've been offline for some time. I appreciate you kind thoughts and professional commentary as I have the highest regard for your writing skills. I do admit to be kind of a mind-dumper sometimes and miss the precisions that are so important. Kindest regards and sincere thanks, Vance

Comment from Kingsrookviii

Exceptional

This is great, Vance. I read it a few times and looked closely at the picture until I really got this clearly. Which is interesting too, because I love the distortion of the picture of what I see as a fire hydrant shooting a "fountain" straight up.
I looked very closely. Each word has specific import and, so impact to me as a reader. It's one of your hallmarks, sir to lift spirits and this does that in spades.
The wise "Senior Kid' is like an Ole Owl if you ask me! LOL Great stuff, my friend. Bruce.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016

Hi Bruce; it is very honestly a sincere, touching, great, honor to have your reviews and ones such as this give me so much lift and encouragement, that can only be called a gift of GRATITUDE!! I Consider you to have an extraordinary mind and imagination with such unique and brilliant perspectives on all things worldly and scientific, so a review like this is knowing I've reflected some of your joy back to you! Blessings and sincere thanks! Vance......you made my day...and those stars lit up my life too!

reply by Kingsrookviii on 02-Jun-2016

Thanks, so very much, Vance. Some people just connect well and for me, you are a rare source of inspiration that I can always visit be get my head back on straight. What I mean is, that your writing reflect a mindset that I value, trust and seldom run across in my daily activities. You, bring a certain attitude of gracious, articulate joy. We all need that, myself very much, so thanks for writing
from the heart. It show, my friend. Take care and keep up the great work. Bruce.

reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016

Joy and Gratitude is my gift from you Bruce, and, "Inspiration" proceeds therefrom! How precious is that?? Wow

reply by Kingsrookviii on 03-Jun-2016

It's called having a big heart, my friend. You are a blessing to humanity, rare and sadly cursed (inherently) with dealing with intense passion and that can be extremely painful. I promise this is so. I think the key is to write, at least it is for me. What I have bottled up is colossal in force. It's raw and eternal too much for mortal reality or at least it seems this way. I know that's a bit thick, but it explains so much of the inexplicable conditions of life in some little degree. Who knows/

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

Your analogy of the fountain of love that engenders gratitude needs maintenance and care is quite poignant. Well crafted. It puts forth positive thoughts in an uplifting manner with metaphor (fountain), elision (ere'), a touch of alliteration (fresh fountain, will well), and even in-line rhyme (well shall). Caesura in line 1, and 5. Rhyme scheme: abcdeda. I would say this is a free style format, effectively used.

 Comment Written 20-May-2016

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reply by the author on 25-May-2016

Please accept my apology for being so tardy in responding to your kind review. It is truly appreciated and I regret having to be away from FS for so long...but life does indeed have it's surprises that demand our attention. Blessings, Vance

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Very nice way of saying that true love shows gratitude which to me you are saying is always fresh and give one's thoughts and heart
sparkling refreshment

Gert

 Comment Written 16-May-2016

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reply by the author on 16-May-2016

Thank you so much Gert, for your lovely reflections. I'm compelled to "PROMOTE" GRATITUDE and in the process, strengthen my own grip on this so very powerful, restful, and fulfilling state of mind that can only reflect the ultimate essence of LOVE. I'm posting another on the subject and hope to share it with you. blessings and hugs, Vance

reply by Gert sherwood on 17-May-2016

You are welcome Vane.

Gert

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

Love is the best of all the fruits of the spirit . Too often our own self concession prevents us from nurturing it. Nice poem to remind us.

 Comment Written 16-May-2016

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reply by the author on 16-May-2016

How true your words of wisdom here! Thanks so much for you kind review and always the joy in hearing from you! Vance

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Vance,
"Love is a fountain" is an excellent poem. It has good figurative language that conveys emotion and is unusual. Its rhymes are simple. Its rhythm is good. Good luck in the contest.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston

 Comment Written 16-May-2016

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reply by the author on 16-May-2016

Thank you so much Preston for you kind reflections on this work. Always a delight to hear from you! Vance

Comment from royowen

Excellent

The trouble is that our culture shoves love in many categories, I much prefer the Greek category, that's why a "love poem" , has many variations, and I'm glad to say people are venturing outside the hackneyed romantic kind they talk about! Well done Brother Vance, your talking about the more expansive form of love which accepts all, well done, excellent entry in this contest, good luck, blessings,

 Comment Written 16-May-2016

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reply by the author on 16-May-2016

Thanks Roy for this encouraging review. It is always my pleasure to hear from you dear friend! Vance

reply by royowen on 16-May-2016

Most welcome

Comment from jusylee72

Excellent

Love is gratitude. What a great message!!!!. I truly like that. Gratitude makes all of us glow with love, the one we feel it about and us, the ones getting the pleasure of it. Thank you for a great insgight.

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 Comment Written 16-May-2016

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reply by the author on 16-May-2016

Dear jusylee: such a pleasure to receive such a nice review and always a delight to meet someone new! Please don't be a stranger and I shall also come round to visit you as well! Blessings! Vance