Comment from Alchera

Excellent

The content structure is well done and the format,too. Real LOVE does need respect and faithfulness all throughout daily life. Gentleness e caresses are required and needed constantly accross our tiny daily actions. Real love suddenly comes along but most of us let it go without realizing it. I do like best the first verse of your poem. I wouldn't have started all the lines with capital letters

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018

Thanks so much Alchera, for your kind review and stars and it is a pleasure to meet you, and hope to see you often! HIS GRAYNESS: vANCE

reply by Alchera on 15-Jan-2018

You arte welcome!

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

*smile*

I like your attitude -- pretty much saying - I've found a good thing - now don't mess it up!!! And isn't that the truth for all of us?? Here we have this beautiful planet...it only requires a teensy bit of care. We can do that, right?? Quite nice. Thanks!

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018

Thank you robyn, for such a lovely review and stars! It is sincerely a delight to hear from you and also to read your works as well! Keep up the great stuff......blessings always, HIS GRAYNESS; Vance

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi there;
How wonderful to see a lovely poem from you! It is entirely true that only with gratitude will love be allowed to grow. A love that is taken for granted is stunted. Thank you for sharing,

~patty~

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018

wonderful to hear from you Patty, and thanks so much for the great review and stars! please stay close as you are always a gift of joy! Blessings always: HIS GRAYNESS; Vance

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Your opening line draws the reader into your poem. I like the relationship between love and gratitude, it shows love in a positive light. Excellent poem with a smooth flow of words that makes the reader feel good.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018

Thank you sincerely, mermaids for your lovely review and stars. I truly appreciate your thoughts and hope to see you again soon! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the 'Love Poetry' writing prompt.
Well written, well done. A good analogy.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018

Thank you sincerely Sharon, for your lovely review and tip about the contest. I think I will indeed enter it although a bit of timeyet, but I will be able to think about any possible revisions. bless you for the kind thought HIS GRAYNESS: Vance

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

Good to hear from you, Vance. We should never take things for granted in relationships. As you say, it takes constant care to keep them alive and well. We have much to be grateful for when they sparkle.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2018

Thank you Tony, it's always my delight to hear from you, dear friend! Much appreciated! Vance

Comment from Carolyn Shelton

Excellent

Great job!
I love the "Let not its springs ere be tainted" line.
So true what you say about how a dark and painful attitude can cause "rust" to grow.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2018

Thanks so much Carolyn for your lovely review and generous start. It is wonderful to hear from you and I hope to see you again often! Blessings always. HIS GRAYNESS; Vance

reply by Carolyn Shelton on 11-Jan-2018

You are most welcome! Blessings to you! Have a great day! :)

Comment from CSChollie

Excellent

Beautifully said, His Grayness. Made me tear up a bit. The love of my life died many years ago. Your poem says so much with so few words. Well done. I, myself, am not a poet. But appreciate the words and sentiments said in this poem of love. Keep the feelings coming. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2018

dear CS Chollie, your review has touched me deeply and my prayers and love go out to you and please know that my works are intended as a message of love, and also know that we are no longer strangers and my love and prayers are sincerely sent out to you! PLEASE STAY TUNED! Blessings always! HIS GRAYNESS ..Vance

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem. True love is like a fountain that never runs dry, and the water is always sweet. We can trust that we will never be received and we are overwhelmed with gratitude.

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018

Thanks so much Sandra, for your lovely review and stars! Always a pleasure to hear from you! Vance

Comment from Cal Amborn

Good

I'm definitely not a poem person, so I'm not sure I understand. I sounds beautiful and makes me want to read more but I just don't quite get it. I do like the overall message of not letting love fade, truly wonderful.

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 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018

Thanks for your review Cal, and I'm sorry the analogy of the fountain of water and the fountain of love did not connect with you, but I appreciate your time to offer a review. HIS GRAYNESS Vance