This Love of Mine
free verse27 total reviews
Comment from MissMerri
I really liked this love poem. It feels so sincere and heartfelt... as a love poem should of course. I loved every line and every sentiment expressed. It reminded me at first of Shakespeare, who loved to compare his lady loves to sun and moon but this says so much more. (I will admit, I was slightly bothered by the sudden jumping-off-the-page-at-me words like TRUE, YES, KNOW and NOW, but perhaps it is just a personal bias... not liking to be yelled at you know. ;"] )Obviously, it didn't bother me enough to deduct any stars, because I try to judge the words apart from the presentation. I hope this does super-well in the contest. It is well-written and artful and truly loving.
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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I really liked this love poem. It feels so sincere and heartfelt... as a love poem should of course. I loved every line and every sentiment expressed. It reminded me at first of Shakespeare, who loved to compare his lady loves to sun and moon but this says so much more. (I will admit, I was slightly bothered by the sudden jumping-off-the-page-at-me words like TRUE, YES, KNOW and NOW, but perhaps it is just a personal bias... not liking to be yelled at you know. ;"] )Obviously, it didn't bother me enough to deduct any stars, because I try to judge the words apart from the presentation. I hope this does super-well in the contest. It is well-written and artful and truly loving.
Comment Written 16-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Thanks for over looking my BIG words, kind of a poem within a poem idea. I'm just delighted you liked it so much though. Wonderful to hear from one of my very favorites. Thanks so very much. mikey
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Mikey(*_*)
= Super love story entry for the prompt.
= You showed the gamut of their love.
= She is his everything. Nice.
= Good luck in the contest.
=::= A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down! =::=
Jacqueline M Franklin (*_*)
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reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Hi, Mikey(*_*)
= Super love story entry for the prompt.
= You showed the gamut of their love.
= She is his everything. Nice.
= Good luck in the contest.
=::= A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down! =::=
Jacqueline M Franklin (*_*)
=::= Feel free to visit my profile on Amazon.com =::=
amazon.com/author/jacquelinefranklin
Comment Written 16-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Thanks so much, Jax.
Yep, I fall rather hard. HAHAHA! mikey
Comment from dragonpoet
A long poem of love at first sight, passion and lasting love. It tells how a glance can become so much more.
I like how you use bold and bigger type to show the import emotions of the poem.
Good luck in the contest and keep writing.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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A long poem of love at first sight, passion and lasting love. It tells how a glance can become so much more.
I like how you use bold and bigger type to show the import emotions of the poem.
Good luck in the contest and keep writing.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 16-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Awesome. I'm pleased you liked the way I formatted it.
Thanks a bunch. mikey
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No problem, Mikey.
Joan
Comment from boxergirl
Hi Romeo...I mean Mikey ;-).
Great job with your love poem. The artwork sets the sensuous tone and then your descriptive details continue to provide strong imagery.
Well done!
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Hi Romeo...I mean Mikey ;-).
Great job with your love poem. The artwork sets the sensuous tone and then your descriptive details continue to provide strong imagery.
Well done!
Comment Written 16-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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How cool. I'm so totally pleased you enjoyed this. YAY!!
Thanks a million and six!!! mikey
Comment from krys123
Hello Mikey;
-I truly enjoyed your romantic love poem and thought it was written very well.
- the intensity of the love is through metaphorical imagery that was distinctly clear and definitively expressive and vividly descriptive throughout the writing.
-This line: "as I loved you then and I do right now too", sounds more simplistic to me I would've wrote something like: "and I love you and as I love you now". Something about the too sound different because everybody knows you love her.
- I love the pictures which are very appropriate, relative and supported to the conceptual theme of the writing.
-good luck in the contest in May the Lord be with you always Mikey.
Alex
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Hello Mikey;
-I truly enjoyed your romantic love poem and thought it was written very well.
- the intensity of the love is through metaphorical imagery that was distinctly clear and definitively expressive and vividly descriptive throughout the writing.
-This line: "as I loved you then and I do right now too", sounds more simplistic to me I would've wrote something like: "and I love you and as I love you now". Something about the too sound different because everybody knows you love her.
- I love the pictures which are very appropriate, relative and supported to the conceptual theme of the writing.
-good luck in the contest in May the Lord be with you always Mikey.
Alex
Comment Written 16-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Hey, thanks a million Alex. Yeah, I agree on that line. I'll keep looking at it. It seems a little out of place to me too. Good suggestion, maybe I'll try that. Pleased you liked it otherwise though. Blessings, mikey
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You are very welcome Mikey.
Alex
Comment from strandregs
I like the picture of the angel.
I love the blue hued color.
the picture at the top looks like a beard with two people hiding within.
the poem you ask . The poem.
you don't give a fig about the beautiful pictures it took you an hour to find.
what about the poem?
I like the setting. Big letters. Little letters.
true yes know now.
yes now know true
that's a tricky one
trancending age in my view.
I thought of a rear or rare view mirror.
then of the song. I'm riding in my car.
see I cracked the code
or was she a co ed?
You could put
your soul repaired my spirit
or maybe that's too alcoholic.
Wow my wife would turn to mush if I gave her such a poem for our wedding aniversary.
might even cure her cancer:-)) Z.
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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I like the picture of the angel.
I love the blue hued color.
the picture at the top looks like a beard with two people hiding within.
the poem you ask . The poem.
you don't give a fig about the beautiful pictures it took you an hour to find.
what about the poem?
I like the setting. Big letters. Little letters.
true yes know now.
yes now know true
that's a tricky one
trancending age in my view.
I thought of a rear or rare view mirror.
then of the song. I'm riding in my car.
see I cracked the code
or was she a co ed?
You could put
your soul repaired my spirit
or maybe that's too alcoholic.
Wow my wife would turn to mush if I gave her such a poem for our wedding aniversary.
might even cure her cancer:-)) Z.
Comment Written 16-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Go ahead and give it to her. I won't say a word. Sorry she's sick. That's a rough thing. Good vibes and prayers or whatever might help. Awesome review, my friend. Really appreciate. Thanks, mikey
Comment from TAB_that's me
The best kind of love - when your knees are weak:)
ahhh - makes me melt - 'like daisies in a book'
Your wife is one lucky lady:)
Good luck in the contest.
teresa
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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The best kind of love - when your knees are weak:)
ahhh - makes me melt - 'like daisies in a book'
Your wife is one lucky lady:)
Good luck in the contest.
teresa
Comment Written 16-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Ahhh. Thanks so much. A lot of competition. Just happy you enjoyed. mikey
Comment from nordicgirl
Dear me. Truth or dsre? Hmmm. Sure seems like a 2016 matter. Well, sure is beautiful. I know this about you once you get past ... well the rest of YOU. Not a bad thing. Excellent, Michael. NG
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Dear me. Truth or dsre? Hmmm. Sure seems like a 2016 matter. Well, sure is beautiful. I know this about you once you get past ... well the rest of YOU. Not a bad thing. Excellent, Michael. NG
Comment Written 16-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Truth! For what good it does me. HAHAHA! Makes for some cool poems though. Yeah, well it doesn't get me ... well, you know. LOL
Glad you liked and appreciate all the glitter. More stars to wish upon. Thanks so much. mikey
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Very nice, my friend. So passionate. I'm sure your Lady will be pleased, you Romeo, you.
Great entry for the contest. I wish you well, Mike.
May the Mistress of love and fortune shine upon your heart and knees. May, your Fair Lady be satisfied and loyal for the rest of your lives. L May the Lord Grant you 12 children or more, and you being Irish and all, your chances are good. My gypsy blessings never fail, well mostly.
*gypsy hugs*
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Very nice, my friend. So passionate. I'm sure your Lady will be pleased, you Romeo, you.
Great entry for the contest. I wish you well, Mike.
May the Mistress of love and fortune shine upon your heart and knees. May, your Fair Lady be satisfied and loyal for the rest of your lives. L May the Lord Grant you 12 children or more, and you being Irish and all, your chances are good. My gypsy blessings never fail, well mostly.
*gypsy hugs*
Comment Written 16-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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I don't even think she knows she's my lady. HAAAAAAHAHAHA!! Great blessing. I'll send the 12 kids over to you. I think I'll enjoy making them though. I'll go ahead with that part of the deal. :))
Irish Hugs. ooopps ... sorry, a little excited there. mikey
Comment from Joy Graham
Wow! Winner, winner, chicken dinner!! I predict you have charmed the girl and won the contest :) Hot, hot, hot --- stuff. You sure know how to melt a girl's heart. I can't praise this poem enough.
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Wow! Winner, winner, chicken dinner!! I predict you have charmed the girl and won the contest :) Hot, hot, hot --- stuff. You sure know how to melt a girl's heart. I can't praise this poem enough.
Comment Written 16-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Gee, you think this has a chance? That would be so cool. But soooooo much competition for this. I'm delighted that you like it thought. I'll take that as my prize. Thanks a million, mikey
