Old time movies
14 May Potlach - Films36 total reviews
Comment from johnwilson
Truly exceptional work! haha, yes "dreams in swirls upon the floor as the lights go out"...More work please and could you read them?
reply by the author on 20-May-2016
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Truly exceptional work! haha, yes "dreams in swirls upon the floor as the lights go out"...More work please and could you read them?
Comment Written 20-May-2016
reply by the author on 20-May-2016
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This was written against the clock in one of the weekly Potlach challenges to be found in the Poetry Writing forum. It turned out better than I had expected, with only a few minor tweaks the following morning!
Comment from Mary Wakeford
Terrific!! I think of especially the old time theaters where the marquees along with the aroma of popcorn and little wax juice filled candies lured us as children and without doubt the tape would break right during a critical time. Really could sense the nostalgia in this piece. Excellent!
reply by the author on 17-May-2016
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Terrific!! I think of especially the old time theaters where the marquees along with the aroma of popcorn and little wax juice filled candies lured us as children and without doubt the tape would break right during a critical time. Really could sense the nostalgia in this piece. Excellent!
Comment Written 17-May-2016
reply by the author on 17-May-2016
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Thank you, Mary. It is a piece that seems to have struck a chord with many! Happy day!
Comment from Treischel
That is a really excellent and cleverly written suite of 5-7-5 formatted poems about film, and so much more. You use of metaphor is enlightening. I was caught, hook, line and sinker.
reply by the author on 17-May-2016
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That is a really excellent and cleverly written suite of 5-7-5 formatted poems about film, and so much more. You use of metaphor is enlightening. I was caught, hook, line and sinker.
Comment Written 17-May-2016
reply by the author on 17-May-2016
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Thanks, Tom. I don't think that many caught the metaphoric interpretation! Delighted that you enjoyed this and thanks very much indeed for the six stars. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from gene roush
I really like this.
It says a lot about memories, time, and maybe even death.
Good imagery -- visual and auditory.
What does gormless mean? It leaves an impression with me of a gelatinous form unable to fully congeal.
Thanks for sharing
Gene
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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I really like this.
It says a lot about memories, time, and maybe even death.
Good imagery -- visual and auditory.
What does gormless mean? It leaves an impression with me of a gelatinous form unable to fully congeal.
Thanks for sharing
Gene
Comment Written 16-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Thanks both for your review and the six stars, Gene. I rather like your first impression of the word, 'gormless'. Apply it to the amorphous face of one who is a vacuous onlooker, and you have the essence of it.
Comment from BeasPeas
Oh good one for the Potlatch. (What does potlatch mean, anyway?) Oh well!
Your suite brought a smile, especially the first tercet. Poem told a little story--the anticipation, slipping the reel, what happened to the movie. Good job. Marilyn
reply by the author on 15-May-2016
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Oh good one for the Potlatch. (What does potlatch mean, anyway?) Oh well!
Your suite brought a smile, especially the first tercet. Poem told a little story--the anticipation, slipping the reel, what happened to the movie. Good job. Marilyn
Comment Written 15-May-2016
reply by the author on 15-May-2016
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I used to love those old movie sessions with the whir of the reel-to-reel projector in the background! A potlach, if Wkipedia is to be believed, is "a gift-giving feast practiced by indigenous peoples of the Pacific Northwest Coast of Canada and the United States". A metaphor for the gift of poems we give to each other, I suppose!
Comment from Just2Write
I had forgotten how masterful you are with word-play. This entry was awesome. Well done, Tony. I reel-y loved your suit - especially the 3rd 5-7-5. Life is like coiled spaghetti. Every noodle on the platter inter-laced and smothered in the same sauce.
A wonderful submission, my friend. It was fun playing.
Rose.
reply by the author on 15-May-2016
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I had forgotten how masterful you are with word-play. This entry was awesome. Well done, Tony. I reel-y loved your suit - especially the 3rd 5-7-5. Life is like coiled spaghetti. Every noodle on the platter inter-laced and smothered in the same sauce.
A wonderful submission, my friend. It was fun playing.
Rose.
Comment Written 15-May-2016
reply by the author on 15-May-2016
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Many thanks, Rose. There are a few things I shall probably change a bit in this, which by its nature is little more than a rough draft - but this kind of speed-writing does sometimes produce some interesting subconscious connections! Glad you enjoyed it anyway!
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Pressure always defaults to letting the mind have its way. You're right about the subconscious having a way of coming into plain view during these moments! Rose.
Comment from Joy Graham
I'm enjoying the personality that's coming out in this week's challenge. You write about a fun movie experience. Well, it's not fun at the time lol! The old movie reels that got messed up like spaghetti. Well done :) Perfect syllable count in each line.
reply by the author on 15-May-2016
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I'm enjoying the personality that's coming out in this week's challenge. You write about a fun movie experience. Well, it's not fun at the time lol! The old movie reels that got messed up like spaghetti. Well done :) Perfect syllable count in each line.
Comment Written 15-May-2016
reply by the author on 15-May-2016
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Many thanks, Joy. There are a few things I shall probably change a bit in this, which by its nature is little more than a rough draft - but this kind of speed-writing does sometimes produce some interesting subconscious connections! Glad you enjoyed it anyway!
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
For those of us old enough to remember the film reels and projectors at the movie theatres, you have brought his memory back to us. Your last stanza is clever ... "All now unravels
Our dreams a coiled spaghetti
As the lights go out ... love the double entendre with
"All now unravels" as both the
celluloid itself and the story
unravel.
Excellent imagery is created for your reader.
Connie
reply by the author on 15-May-2016
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For those of us old enough to remember the film reels and projectors at the movie theatres, you have brought his memory back to us. Your last stanza is clever ... "All now unravels
Our dreams a coiled spaghetti
As the lights go out ... love the double entendre with
"All now unravels" as both the
celluloid itself and the story
unravel.
Excellent imagery is created for your reader.
Connie
Comment Written 15-May-2016
reply by the author on 15-May-2016
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Many thanks, Connie. There are a few things I shall probably change a bit in this, which by its nature is little more than a rough draft - but this kind of speed-writing does sometimes produce some interesting subconscious connections! Glad you enjoyed it anyway!
Comment from Taffspride
What an excellent description of a visit to movies years ago.
I loved the line:-
We sit there gormless.
Now that is a word I have not heard used in a while. It was in common parlance as I was growing up.
But I think you sum it up so well.
'Our dreams a coiled spaghetti'
Back in the day, the movies brought a touch of pure happiness to so many who had suffered the horrors of world wars, and who had so little to look forward to in the immediate future.
Thanks for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 15-May-2016
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What an excellent description of a visit to movies years ago.
I loved the line:-
We sit there gormless.
Now that is a word I have not heard used in a while. It was in common parlance as I was growing up.
But I think you sum it up so well.
'Our dreams a coiled spaghetti'
Back in the day, the movies brought a touch of pure happiness to so many who had suffered the horrors of world wars, and who had so little to look forward to in the immediate future.
Thanks for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 15-May-2016
reply by the author on 15-May-2016
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Many thanks, Ann. There are a few things I shall probably change a bit in this, which by its nature is little more than a rough draft - but this kind of speed-writing does sometimes produce some interesting subconscious connections! Glad you enjoyed it anyway! You are right about many people needing a temporary form of escape from reality in the immediate post-war years.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
It happen many times when the film climbs of the reel and takes a while to get it roll again. A quick break to go get some more popcorn.
reply by the author on 15-May-2016
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It happen many times when the film climbs of the reel and takes a while to get it roll again. A quick break to go get some more popcorn.
Comment Written 15-May-2016
reply by the author on 15-May-2016
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Many thanks, Sandra. There are a few things I shall probably change a bit in this, which by its nature is little more than a rough draft - but this kind of speed-writing does sometimes produce some interesting subconscious connections! Glad you enjoyed it anyway! Popcorn memories!
