Mother of the Worms
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Comment from winnona
Very well done. The words convey fear and terror. The words are well written your choice of the photos add to the terror. Good choice of slugs and worms. Most people are afraid of them. The visuals make people more scared and terrorized than a thousand words
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
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Very well done. The words convey fear and terror. The words are well written your choice of the photos add to the terror. Good choice of slugs and worms. Most people are afraid of them. The visuals make people more scared and terrorized than a thousand words
Comment Written 24-May-2016
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
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Thanks so much, they are pretty squiggly and creepy. Glad you liked the presentation and all. Not my usual faire so I'm pretty delighted it was a success for you. :))
Comment from Ginger Banks
Wow! Gory and creepy certainly nightmare-ish in many forms. A SpaG or two, but to the than that, you accomplished making my skin crawl!
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reply by the author on 23-May-2016
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Wow! Gory and creepy certainly nightmare-ish in many forms. A SpaG or two, but to the than that, you accomplished making my skin crawl!
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Comment Written 23-May-2016
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
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Well, I'm both sorry and pleased. LOL
Thanks so much. :))
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Don't be sorry, and you're welcome. A little creepy crawly under the skin every now and then doesn't necessarily hurt anyone. Lol.
Comment from Dean Kuch
U-m-m-mmmmmm ... masticated organs, huh? Tasty ... I once knew an emaciated organ grinder. However, that's a story for another time probably ...
parts meant to be inside a body
fused together by
an unknown adhesive ... If they are "meant" to be inside a body, that implies that they are somewhere else. If they are somewhere else, what then are they fused to, and why would an adhesive be necessary? If they're anywhere other than inside the body itself, they are in a place they normally wouldn't or shouldn't be. ...
Good alliteration in, conscious, carnivorous castigator, and, mindless minion minding ... me.
Hell hath no fury like love turned to hatred ... or a mommy who feels as if her kids are threatened.
A mother will watch over her children and sacrifice her very life while protecting them. Moral of this story is: Don't mess with a pissed off mom. They can be a Muther Hucker!
Nicely done, Anonymous Author.
Best of luck!
~Dean :}
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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U-m-m-mmmmmm ... masticated organs, huh? Tasty ... I once knew an emaciated organ grinder. However, that's a story for another time probably ...
parts meant to be inside a body
fused together by
an unknown adhesive ... If they are "meant" to be inside a body, that implies that they are somewhere else. If they are somewhere else, what then are they fused to, and why would an adhesive be necessary? If they're anywhere other than inside the body itself, they are in a place they normally wouldn't or shouldn't be. ...
Good alliteration in, conscious, carnivorous castigator, and, mindless minion minding ... me.
Hell hath no fury like love turned to hatred ... or a mommy who feels as if her kids are threatened.
A mother will watch over her children and sacrifice her very life while protecting them. Moral of this story is: Don't mess with a pissed off mom. They can be a Muther Hucker!
Nicely done, Anonymous Author.
Best of luck!
~Dean :}
Comment Written 16-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Thanks, Mr. Dean. LOL
Glad you found things to your liking. It's shaping up into a fun competition. It's been a while for me. Having a great time. I guess with the new system I should get at lest eighty cents or so and a ribbon. I like it. LOL
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It's better than gettin' nothin', I agree.
My pleasure :)
Comment from BOO ghost
Mother Of the Worms, that is a creepy picture. She looks like an alien. A shell of encrusted gore
of unknown origin or substance. That is a good opener bro. texture and tissue, i like that lethal word combination. Yuck! Picture reminds me of scenes of ALIEN. CREEPY! Pill was blue. haha, I like that. Obviously it made some wicked delusional dreams. give me a blue -- give me a blue! his hair was too? Most amusing, love the blue hair! No nair? "WOOO-HOOOH!" I'm nature boy Rick Flair! Stand aside Linda Blair! Mikey boy writes with a peacock flare. THE DOCTOR AND HIS ASSISTANTS ARE CONSUMED Yeah, i really dig this, it really stands out and punctuates a message. this is a creepy poem, down right disgusting images. Shell shockers! i need a word blocker or a blue morphine popper? Hum.. wonder what that darn blue pill was? I'm do loco, hand it over! this is sick gruesome stuff, words are sticky and icky! yep, This is definitely horror, a blood batch of guts intestines and morhed mind warping dreams that are insane. That is one heluva dream that i would like to escape. The pictures make me want to vomit up my guts. I say... you hot this one out of the ball park! I got six purple haze morhine poppers that should make you have some sweet dreams... BOO
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Mother Of the Worms, that is a creepy picture. She looks like an alien. A shell of encrusted gore
of unknown origin or substance. That is a good opener bro. texture and tissue, i like that lethal word combination. Yuck! Picture reminds me of scenes of ALIEN. CREEPY! Pill was blue. haha, I like that. Obviously it made some wicked delusional dreams. give me a blue -- give me a blue! his hair was too? Most amusing, love the blue hair! No nair? "WOOO-HOOOH!" I'm nature boy Rick Flair! Stand aside Linda Blair! Mikey boy writes with a peacock flare. THE DOCTOR AND HIS ASSISTANTS ARE CONSUMED Yeah, i really dig this, it really stands out and punctuates a message. this is a creepy poem, down right disgusting images. Shell shockers! i need a word blocker or a blue morphine popper? Hum.. wonder what that darn blue pill was? I'm do loco, hand it over! this is sick gruesome stuff, words are sticky and icky! yep, This is definitely horror, a blood batch of guts intestines and morhed mind warping dreams that are insane. That is one heluva dream that i would like to escape. The pictures make me want to vomit up my guts. I say... you hot this one out of the ball park! I got six purple haze morhine poppers that should make you have some sweet dreams... BOO
Comment Written 16-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Thanks a million. Hey, where'd ya go .... oh there ya are. Keep that sheet on ya trickster. Glad you liked this. Great. Pretty creepy like the doctor ordered. We'll see. Lots of creepiness showing up in this neck of the woods. A brawls about to break out. LOL :))
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yep, I can hear teeth chattering right now. i know that dean and gypsy are sweating. I talked with dean about 6 hours yesterday. he gave me some tips on paint and photobucket, how to load fonts into paint and a creepy place to find gtf images that move. yep, my computer is working better after I delted lots of pictures. I got only 2 GB of RAM, think that is why my profile acts weirds sometimes, low on virtual memory. yep, hope gloria does good!
Comment from royowen
Wow! This was long, and written and presented with such passion for the scarier things of of the "nether" world. Brilliant presentation, the wording is so smoothly elegant and descriptive, a rather outstanding entry in this contest, most imaginative, more than I possess, well done, well written, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Wow! This was long, and written and presented with such passion for the scarier things of of the "nether" world. Brilliant presentation, the wording is so smoothly elegant and descriptive, a rather outstanding entry in this contest, most imaginative, more than I possess, well done, well written, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Wow. I'm thrilled you found this to your liking, Roy.
Thanks a million. :))
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Most welcome
Comment from Joyce Long
Best wishes for the Sweet Dreams...Spook-Fest contest. Your story is really way out there. I really think I was lost along the way. A dream come true for the world is really different.
Joyce 05-16-16
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Best wishes for the Sweet Dreams...Spook-Fest contest. Your story is really way out there. I really think I was lost along the way. A dream come true for the world is really different.
Joyce 05-16-16
Comment Written 16-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Thanks for following along as best you could. Yep, a bit weird. LOL
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. I don't know whether to say this is horrible but good or good but horrible. Either way, it is truly a gross story. Best of luck in the contest. EWWW.
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Excellent. I don't know whether to say this is horrible but good or good but horrible. Either way, it is truly a gross story. Best of luck in the contest. EWWW.
Comment Written 16-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Oh, horrible good, good horrible ... just glad to see "good" in the mix!! Thanks a bunch. I have the feeling this will be pretty competitive. Lots of fun though!!! ;))
Comment from DonandVicki
Good God Gertie, what a gash. I enjoy all of your poetry D--n but this one will give me the willies. I hope that I dont get the nightmares.
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Good God Gertie, what a gash. I enjoy all of your poetry D--n but this one will give me the willies. I hope that I dont get the nightmares.
Comment Written 15-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Wow. Now there is the best compliment I think I've ever had when writing a horror piece. You believe that I'm Dean. Well, I have arrived. Nope. But, perhaps this is a sign I'll be eating HIS liver for a change. HAHAHA!! Thanks so much. :))
Comment from Gloria ....
Author I gotta tell you this is one fine poem that I can totally see recited around the world.
And you bet a mother watches over her children.
Super job with this, I wish you best of luck at the booth. This is a good one!
Gloria
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Author I gotta tell you this is one fine poem that I can totally see recited around the world.
And you bet a mother watches over her children.
Super job with this, I wish you best of luck at the booth. This is a good one!
Gloria
Comment Written 15-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Wow. What a beautiful compliment, Gloria. That would be pretty cool to hear. I'm envisioning a Jamaican barber reciting this to a Turkish tourist while giving him a buzz cut. It's a good image. Close your eyes. See it?
Yes, the sweet tenderness of motherhood. Glad you picked up on the vibe I was going for. I tried to keep it subtle. Very perceptive and insightful on your part. Thanks so much. I shall cross my fingers. Do it with me?
Comment from foxangie123
Well you won this by leaps and bounds indeed when it comes to evilness. No offense but do you hate women? I have picked up that vive. The pictures of the women and the words etc. Keep up the great work. Wow-ah. The world is better place with you in it with these great lines.
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reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Well you won this by leaps and bounds indeed when it comes to evilness. No offense but do you hate women? I have picked up that vive. The pictures of the women and the words etc. Keep up the great work. Wow-ah. The world is better place with you in it with these great lines.
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Comment Written 15-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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I love women. They are delicious. I recommend a Zinfandel or of course a bottle of Annie Green Springs is a sure thing I've found. Well, Vodka and apple Pucker if it's going to be one of those evenings....
