When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 90 "The Redemption of Jeff"A family's love is tested.
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Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
so glad that Jeff has found his niche in voice overs. I wasn't aware of the well paid aspect either. You tell the story well Shari. And in fact, kudos to Nicole for remembering and reminding you that it did not matter to you, if on occasion you made more money than Frank. She saw in you a degree of unselfishness that she is willing to emulate...
Well done,
:-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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so glad that Jeff has found his niche in voice overs. I wasn't aware of the well paid aspect either. You tell the story well Shari. And in fact, kudos to Nicole for remembering and reminding you that it did not matter to you, if on occasion you made more money than Frank. She saw in you a degree of unselfishness that she is willing to emulate...
Well done,
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 13-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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That's a wonderful way to put it, Carolyn.
Comment from Gloria ....
Oh, Jeff's redemption. Well then.
Lots of interesting things in this part of the bio, Shari. It sounds like Jeff did some interesting things, but it certainly isn't the industry for job security.
Good advice to Nichole to brag about her husband a little and especially when the extended family relationship is a little touchy.
Your honesty is refreshing, Shari. This is a terrific story.
Gloria
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Oh, Jeff's redemption. Well then.
Lots of interesting things in this part of the bio, Shari. It sounds like Jeff did some interesting things, but it certainly isn't the industry for job security.
Good advice to Nichole to brag about her husband a little and especially when the extended family relationship is a little touchy.
Your honesty is refreshing, Shari. This is a terrific story.
Gloria
Comment Written 13-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Thanks, Gloria, for the remark about honesty. I can see it through Nichole's eyes--she's honest about her perceptions.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very interesting chapter. So Nichole made six figures? What did she do? It's cool that Jeff got that voice over work. So he does have talents, and isn't totally worthless. :)
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Very interesting chapter. So Nichole made six figures? What did she do? It's cool that Jeff got that voice over work. So he does have talents, and isn't totally worthless. :)
Comment Written 13-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Nichole is vice president of human relations at Caruso Affilated. Her high profile boss develops malls all over the country. She gets to travel all over for seminars. Jeff tags along to hold her hand when she has to fly.
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Wow, VP is pretty darn good. And she married Jeff... what a waste, huh? Sad.
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She loved to be back on stage, but couldn't handle rejection. But as VP she gets plenty of opportunities to write speeches and give out awards. So her degree in theater did pay off.
Comment from Jay Squires
Frank and I felt as if we had lost our daughter to Jeff's bizarre values. Lucky man. He married a woman who now made a six figure salary, giving him the luxury to pursue his interests in acting, her original ambition. [What an effective first paragraph, bulging the seams with irony!]
Some things to consider. Sorry you've probably corrected them. I downloaded it in the morning, after 3 hours sleep the night before, planning to read it after I did my daily writing stint. I ended up crashing at 10 PM with it still unread.]
After that, he pocketedoney by drawing cartoons for friends, [I'm going to assume you meant "pocketed money" ]
An insect. That fit. So small, others could step on him. Maybe Karma was working here.
[OUCH!]
spent two to three hours one day a week meeting [... hours ONE-DAY-A-WEEK meeting ... .>> it helps with the meaning, as well.]
So our daughter went on to inform he that casting agents [... that HIS ? casting agents ...]
It was a job, even is a sporadic one. [ ... even AS ? a sporadic one...]
I wondered if his love and companionship wereenough compensation [Spacing problem]
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Frank and I felt as if we had lost our daughter to Jeff's bizarre values. Lucky man. He married a woman who now made a six figure salary, giving him the luxury to pursue his interests in acting, her original ambition. [What an effective first paragraph, bulging the seams with irony!]
Some things to consider. Sorry you've probably corrected them. I downloaded it in the morning, after 3 hours sleep the night before, planning to read it after I did my daily writing stint. I ended up crashing at 10 PM with it still unread.]
After that, he pocketedoney by drawing cartoons for friends, [I'm going to assume you meant "pocketed money" ]
An insect. That fit. So small, others could step on him. Maybe Karma was working here.
[OUCH!]
spent two to three hours one day a week meeting [... hours ONE-DAY-A-WEEK meeting ... .>> it helps with the meaning, as well.]
So our daughter went on to inform he that casting agents [... that HIS ? casting agents ...]
It was a job, even is a sporadic one. [ ... even AS ? a sporadic one...]
I wondered if his love and companionship wereenough compensation [Spacing problem]
Comment Written 13-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Yeap, I had made some changes, but not all. I always welcome your reviews to catch my careless errors. Thanks for the kudos too. :-)
Shari
Comment from michaelcahill
Every time I pop by I'm instantly engaged and entertained. It occurs to me that you must be writing some awfully great stuff her in that case. LOL This must deserve a six somewhere, yes?
Wow. Fascinating. You've got a great handle on the business and portray it in a really exciting and compelling way. You are in such a zone with this it almost makes me laugh. Whew! You are on this!! Can't wait to buy it. mikey
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Every time I pop by I'm instantly engaged and entertained. It occurs to me that you must be writing some awfully great stuff her in that case. LOL This must deserve a six somewhere, yes?
Wow. Fascinating. You've got a great handle on the business and portray it in a really exciting and compelling way. You are in such a zone with this it almost makes me laugh. Whew! You are on this!! Can't wait to buy it. mikey
Comment Written 13-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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It's a tough way to earn a living until you make it big. And then you still have to learn about a making a movie that flops.
Thanks so much for the six. Hard to come by on weekends.
Comment from Realist101
Wow, neat! I'll try to watch this clip later Shari. Trying to sell house and am working to clean. Showing tonight. But yes, follow Jax's review for commas and stuff, she's great help. You know me, I'm awful with details like that. You're very lucky to have a happy marriage Shari! HUGS and best! x
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Wow, neat! I'll try to watch this clip later Shari. Trying to sell house and am working to clean. Showing tonight. But yes, follow Jax's review for commas and stuff, she's great help. You know me, I'm awful with details like that. You're very lucky to have a happy marriage Shari! HUGS and best! x
Comment Written 13-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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The clip is 28 seconds, Sue.
Thanks oodles for the six.
I hope the showing goes well. Think positive.
Comment from mermaids
I love Kung Fu Panda and how awesome your son-in-law was the mantis on the children's series. At least Jeff didn't give up and something in show biz did finally come along. I also enjoyed reading how Nicole compared herself to you when earning more money. This is quite an interesting chapter.
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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I love Kung Fu Panda and how awesome your son-in-law was the mantis on the children's series. At least Jeff didn't give up and something in show biz did finally come along. I also enjoyed reading how Nicole compared herself to you when earning more money. This is quite an interesting chapter.
Comment Written 13-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Appreciate the detailed comments, Elaine. Yes, I was impressed too. I never realized her rationalization for marrying Jeff until she told me what she saw in my marriage.
Comment from boxergirl
Shari, I wish I had a six for this one...so interesting and entertaining with your asides scattered throughout! Also good connection between your marriage and hers, although you were the luckier one, I'm sure. ;-)
I'm glad Jeff found some redemption. He is really good in the video! :-)
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Shari, I wish I had a six for this one...so interesting and entertaining with your asides scattered throughout! Also good connection between your marriage and hers, although you were the luckier one, I'm sure. ;-)
I'm glad Jeff found some redemption. He is really good in the video! :-)
Comment Written 13-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Yes, Jeff is more acceptable now. He realizes how lucky he is to have the freedom to do his own thing. What worries me is no retirement pension or social security from him when the day comes.
Comment from patcelaw
I enjoyed this read and your sense of humor in many spots.
I did find a couple of trouble spots
It was a job, even (is) a sporadic one. (if)
I wondered if his love and companionship were/enough compensation space needed. Patricia
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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I enjoyed this read and your sense of humor in many spots.
I did find a couple of trouble spots
It was a job, even (is) a sporadic one. (if)
I wondered if his love and companionship were/enough compensation space needed. Patricia
Comment Written 13-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Thanks, Patricia. I fixed the spags. Glad you saw the humor.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi (*<*)
= Interesting read about Jeff's jobs.
= Since I have not read previous chapters, please for give me, but I'm guessing Jeff is who your daughter is with?
= Always nice to see our children following there dreams in whatever way it makes them happy, and with the person they care about.
<> Comma needed.
= Granted(,) he had some credits
= casting call for voice overs(,) because the original actors
<> Need spacing.
= and companionship were( )enough compensation
<> Change period to comma.
= YOURS=
Once I mentioned the situation. She retaliated,
=SUGGEST=
Once I mentioned the situation, she retaliated,
=::= A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down! =::=
Jacqueline M Franklin (*_*)
=::= Feel free to visit my profile on Amazon.com =::=
amazon.com/author/jacquelinefranklin
reply by the author on 14-May-2016
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Hi (*<*)
= Interesting read about Jeff's jobs.
= Since I have not read previous chapters, please for give me, but I'm guessing Jeff is who your daughter is with?
= Always nice to see our children following there dreams in whatever way it makes them happy, and with the person they care about.
<> Comma needed.
= Granted(,) he had some credits
= casting call for voice overs(,) because the original actors
<> Need spacing.
= and companionship were( )enough compensation
<> Change period to comma.
= YOURS=
Once I mentioned the situation. She retaliated,
=SUGGEST=
Once I mentioned the situation, she retaliated,
=::= A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down! =::=
Jacqueline M Franklin (*_*)
=::= Feel free to visit my profile on Amazon.com =::=
amazon.com/author/jacquelinefranklin
Comment Written 13-May-2016
reply by the author on 14-May-2016
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Thanks, Jax. I'm honored that you dropped by. I accidentally posted this as a story instead of a chapter to a novel! I made said changes and found a couple spacing problems too. I see you're writing your bio now. I'll get to a chapter ASAP. :-)
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Thanks so much.
Have a super day. (*_*)
