Comment from mountainwriter49

Excellent

Good Afternoon, Ulla,

I enjoyed your short prose using the old game of pulling flower petals and saying the loves me yes / loves me not. The poem is tightly written and flows well.

I did run it through spell check and came up with 104 words. The problem isn't the words, it's the blank spaces in some of the punctuation. I'm alerting you to this in case the contest committee runs it through MSWord counter. Here's the fix:

L1: he loves me..." [currently there's a space between me and the first period. Eliminate the space.]
L9: same problem as above. remove the space between me and the first period.

Ls 7 & 8: There's a blank space between the first quotation mark in each of the lines and the first words of each line: Can and Oh. Eliminate the spaces.

When I did this in word, the count was back down to 100.

Good luck to you in the contest.
-Ray

 Comment Written 11-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Hello Ray, thanks very much for drawing my attention to this and I have corrected. Never saw it. I hope they will accept it. I'm glad you liked it. Just a wee romantic thing that came to me when I saw the contest. I'm very pleased that you liked it. All the best. Ulla:)

Comment from Kooky Clown

Excellent

I loved this however I have one question does he or doesn't he? I suppose I will never know, but how many girls or ladies have done such a thing, or maybe some men. Clever little story with a big question at the end to keep us guessing. Is there to be a follow up to give us the answer or are we to be left in suspense of not knowing?

 Comment Written 11-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Hi there, thanks a lot for this great review. Whether there will be a continuatin to the 100 words contest I don't know. It may be a thought. All the best.

Comment from Spiritual Echo

Excellent

|Oh, if love could be so simple as tearing petals off a daisy!

You created a strong mood and sense of both characters, a tough task in 100 words.

Good luck.

 Comment Written 11-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks so much for this great review. All best.

Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

This is really a great piece for the hundred word contest as well. It is funny how those questions fill our mind all to often. Way to go. This is superb.

 Comment Written 11-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks very much for a great review.

Comment from giraffmang

Good

Hi there,

A neat little tale told in few words. You might want to add a line break after your final line to stop it running directly into the competition name.

Your word count for the piece comes in shy of the 100 word mark. I think it is about 92 words long. As such it doesn't meet the criteria for the contest. It should be an easy fix though.

All the best
GMG

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 Comment Written 11-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Hi G , thanks, I have added to it so it is now exactly 100 words. Is that's why you gave it a four?? I simply don't know what you mean when you write about the line brake and running into the competition line?????? What competition line? Sorry don't get it. Please enlighten me. All best. Ulla

reply by giraffmang on 11-May-2016

Yep the four was for not adhering to thee competition rules. I always give a four for that.

At the end of the piece it is always a good idea to hit the enter / return button a couple of times otherwise there is no gap between the final line of the story and the competition title line at the bottom of the page. It just looks awkward.

reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Ok fine. I have added words and it now complies with the requirement. I don't know if I see a differint page as the rest of the world, but there are aleast five empty lines between my written last line and where it says that it is a contest entry. Well never mind, I don't get it at all. Ulla

Comment from Annette Gulliver

Excellent

A young girl with stars in her eyes, swept off her feet by the handsome stranger at her first dance. One can only dream. Good choice of artwork.
good luck in the contest,
Annette

 Comment Written 11-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thank you so much Annette for this great review.All best.

Comment from Word Junkie

Excellent

Hello Author,

This is a good entry for the contest. You managed to tell a complete story with only a few words. I like the way the ending left me wanting to know how this turns out, but it's complete enough as it is.

Try age-old and lovesick.

Dark-haired.

Making those corrections will change your word count, but inserting three more words will be easy enough.

Good luck in the contest!
Lana

 Comment Written 11-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks a lot Lana and I have made the changes. Thanks for your good wishes.

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

It's not just love sick girls that do this flower ritual, there are a few love sick young men who have done this as well. Thank you for bringing back a memory.

 Comment Written 10-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thank so much for a great review. All the best.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

Nice little romance story. Good flash fiction that tells a whole story. Good luck to you in the contest.

~~teresa~~

 Comment Written 10-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks so much for this Teresa, All best.

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

The beauty of this 100-word flash(actually I never counted the words) is it's universal occurrence. Female attracted by male plumage. Excellent.

 Comment Written 10-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thank you so very much.