Comment from hodgetiger

Excellent

Some very strong imagery, and interesting word choices. I especially liked 'a wraith washed up on shore'. The mixture of capital letters for each 'Oh love...' line, and the lower case letters to start the others worked very well, and I liked the look it gave to the poem. Excellent piece :)

 Comment Written 10-May-2016

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Hodgetiger, thank you for such kind words in your thoughtful review. I appreciate it so much.

Senyai

reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Hodgetiger, thank you for such kind words in your thoughtful review. I appreciate it so much.

Senyai

Comment from sage17611

Excellent

This is a beautiful poem, pouring out emotions about a lover that has strayed. The poem has a nice flow, with the a rhyme according to Triolet rules. Your poem is very well written with tender heartfelt words. Good luck with the contest.

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks, Sage, for your kind words and thoughts. Also for the well wishes :)

Senyai

reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks, Sage, for your kind words and thoughts. Also for the well wishes :)

Senyai

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Faithfulness is a must to make a relationship prove possible. This is difficult for some to succeed. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks, C_Lucas, for your thoughts on my work. I appreciate your time to review.

Senyai

reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks, C_Lucas, for your thoughts on my work. I appreciate your time to review.

Senyai

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

That is a lovely Triolet poem, Senyai. It's sad, a poem of someone who has been betrayed and whose heart is breaking. It's a lovely contest entry, and I wish you the best of luck! xsx Sandra

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks Sandra, for your lovely comments. Means so much to hear encouraging word on my work.

Senyai

reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks Sandra, for your lovely comments. Means so much to hear encouraging word on my work.

Senyai

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A well-written Triolet poem. A love that breaks the heart three times, and still have hope that the relationship will work out at the end.

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks Sandra, for your generous review and kind thoughts. I appreciate both very much.

Senyai :)

reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks Sandra, for your generous review and kind thoughts. I appreciate both very much.

Senyai :)

Comment from honeytree

Excellent

Love the art work for these words
The words for this poem have been beautifully
written in every way one would certainly
be concerned about the whereabouts of their loved one.

Honey tree

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks, Honeytree. I appreciate your review and kind thoughts on my work. You have made my day :)

Senyai

reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks, Honeytree. I appreciate your review and kind thoughts on my work. You have made my day :)

Senyai

Comment from Margaret Ford

Excellent

This is a lovely triolet, with all of your lines in all the right places. You write well in this particular form. The art selection you chose is perfect for the poem. Good luck with the contest. Margaret

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reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks for your encouraging words and kind thoughts, Margaret. Also for wishing me well in the contest but I still have much to learn about writing triolets :)

Senyai

reply by the author on 11-May-2016

Thanks for your encouraging words and kind thoughts, Margaret. Also for wishing me well in the contest but I still have much to learn about writing triolets :)

Senyai

Comment from infinityyingyang

Excellent

This poem flowed very smoothly and naturally and I really like the way it was worded. You did a fantastic job writing this and I enjoyed reading it.

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reply by the author on 10-May-2016

Hi Infinity, thank you for your encouraging words and generous rating :)

Senyai

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

Very good a nicely done triolet on thrice betrayed. it is heart breaking to be betrayed, Nice job on this and have a great day.

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reply by the author on 10-May-2016

Thank you William, for the generous rating and encouraging words:)

Senyai

Comment from Annette Gulliver

Excellent

A good triolet entry, sharing the feelings of one who has been betrayed by their lover. Rhymes well and easy to read.A beautiful choice of artwork as well.
Annette

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reply by the author on 10-May-2016

Thanks, Annette, for your generous review and rating. I appreciate your kind words on my work:)

Senyai