Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

If I remember correctly, and I did look it up once, this fits all the requirements of a triolet. Rather a heartsick one but excellent, I think.

 Comment Written 10-May-2016

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reply by the author on 10-May-2016

Hi LIJ Red. Yes, my first attempted triolet feels quite lacking, :) Too sing-songy and very repetitious. I've got a lot to learn about this poetry form.

Thanks for your time to read my work and give such a great review.
Senyai

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

You captured my attention and my heart from the start.
Your words are a perfect match for the artwork you chose.
Your words were filled with deep emotion
I thought love was not suppose to hurt.
Cookie

 Comment Written 10-May-2016

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reply by the author on 10-May-2016

Love always hurts, Miss Cookie :) That's a given but the pain is highlighted with such love and joy... But there is always pain...

Thanks for such a lovely review that I truly appreciate.

Senyai

reply by misscookie on 11-May-2016

You're very welcome.
Have a nice day.
Cookie

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed your triolet. It is in good form--the right number of lines, the rhyme, and a smooth flow of lines.

The artwork is awesome. Your message is well expressed in your poem.

Good job and best wishes in the contest.

Thanks for sharing. Jan

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reply by the author on 10-May-2016

Hey Jannypan, your review and kind thoughts made my day. Thanks for reading my work and offering such encouraging words.

Senyai :)

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

This is a beautifully well-crafted Triolet, Senyai, and most assuredly a very strong contender in this contest.
Your required repetitive line, "Oh love, my love who'll stray twice more" has such a sad, melancholy (almost haunting) feeling about it.

Fantastic poem.
I wish you the very best of luck in the contest with this.
~Dean

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reply by the author on 10-May-2016

Dean, again you are so kind with your encouraging words. My first attempted triolet has holes in it big enough for the wind to blow through. It's repetitious and sing-songy but don't know how to remedy that. Maybe the subject matter is the problem, so generic and rather shallow....

I hate this one but can't think up another one before the deadline I don't think.

Can I delete this one and enter another or is that a no-no?

Senyai

reply by Dean Kuch on 10-May-2016

No, you're allowed to do that, Senyai, just as long as you do so before the contest deadline. If you wait until after, it will be too late.
I didn't feel it was poorly written. No more so than my own, Mourning, Comes the Dawn. That was my first-ever triolet too.

Don't sweat it, Senyai. You'll do just fine, I'm sure. :)

Comment from tony bronk

Excellent

I am beginning slowly but surely, to enjoy more, this genre of poetry all of the time. I'm starting to wake up and see the true beauty in it, just as I see it in your poem. Excellent write. Tony Bronk Wisconsin

 Comment Written 10-May-2016

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reply by the author on 10-May-2016

Hi, Tony. Your words are well taken and I really appreciate your time and thoughts. Thanks for the fine review.

Senyai

Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

This is very lovely and is a uplifting piece of poetry. The flow and meter is perfectly written and the reader has a viable smooth experience. Kudos to you.

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reply by the author on 10-May-2016

Hi Foxangie. Your interesting thoughts are truly appreciated. Your time to review means so much.

Take care,
Senyai

Comment from Lisa Deverick

Excellent

this is such an elegant treasure of a poem! I love the way it takes the reader back to another time... seems like straying lovers were common then too.. beautiful words well done

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reply by the author on 10-May-2016

Well, Lisa I'm glad you liked this one. My first attempted triolet. Not loving it and can see I have a long way to go on this form

Thanks for your kind words.

Senyai

Comment from zanya

Excellent

A beautiful Triolet filled with dignity of expression and an abundance of Love -how wonderful to read about love in such an appropriate setting - and a superb picture of Yorkshire Moors

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reply by the author on 10-May-2016

Zanya, you are so kind with your thoughts on my work. Your fine review is truly appreciated.

Take care,
Senyai

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

I have to say that I am not a great lover of the triolet form but if they were all like this I might be persuaded to change my mind. With only two lines between the repeated lines their proximity works against them and they seldom flow well except in the hands of a master. I have never written one with which i have been satisfie, but you should be well satisfied with this as it is a little gem.

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reply by the author on 10-May-2016

Pantygynt, you are very kind with your words on this very middle of the road, repetitious poem. It is my first attempted triolet and must say I don't think I really have the hang of it yet. So sing-songy and shallow but thought I'd try my hand.

Yes, the triolet has given me fits for years but I have read some from the old masters that are really good.

I have a lot to learn. Thanks again for such a generous and helpful review.

Senyai

Comment from Taffspride

Excellent

Such a well written triolet and and a strong contender in the contest.

The rhyme and meter were spot on, and the words flowed effortlessly as I read them aloud. A poignant poem of love.

You have a nice pairing with the art work.

Good luck in the contest.

Iechyd da

Ann

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reply by the author on 10-May-2016

Hi Taffspride. You are really kind on this rather sing-songy repetitious poem. My first attempted triolet and somehow am not liking it at all but can't think of another one. Draws a big blank.

I have always shied away from the triolet and now I know why :)

Thanks for such and encouraging review.
Senyai