Sankofa
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Comment from infinityyingyang
This was very VERY well written and I enjoyed reading every word of it. In fact, I had to read it twice. You captured the meaning and emotion perfectly.
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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This was very VERY well written and I enjoyed reading every word of it. In fact, I had to read it twice. You captured the meaning and emotion perfectly.
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Oh, thank you, infinityyingyang, for your review. I am glad you enjoyed my poem.
Comment from jusylee72
this is wonderful and so alive with movement and words. I think you did an excellent job of portraying this wonderful story. I think you have a chance in that contest. Please let us know how you do.
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this is wonderful and so alive with movement and words. I think you did an excellent job of portraying this wonderful story. I think you have a chance in that contest. Please let us know how you do.
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Oh, thank you for your generous, six star review. This is my first time tailoring a poem for the Dancing Poetry contest. If it wins, I will let you know. Thanks again.
Comment from tony bronk
I enjoyed your dancing poem very much. it is mixed with a lot of interesting characters and events that make the poem very interesting to read. Tony Bronk
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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I enjoyed your dancing poem very much. it is mixed with a lot of interesting characters and events that make the poem very interesting to read. Tony Bronk
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Thank you, Tony, for your review of my dancing poem. I am glad you found this to be an interesting read.
Comment from Caressa_08
I think this is an exceptional poem, and so sorry about your mother's passing, which your poem seems so very appropriate for today being Mom's day . And hope too, that when you do submit your poem, that you are allowed to also use author notes ( or let them know about her like we were able to, so their knowledge about her life, and about this bird is also given to them.
God Bless, and Best wishes for your entry...Caressa_08
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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I think this is an exceptional poem, and so sorry about your mother's passing, which your poem seems so very appropriate for today being Mom's day . And hope too, that when you do submit your poem, that you are allowed to also use author notes ( or let them know about her like we were able to, so their knowledge about her life, and about this bird is also given to them.
God Bless, and Best wishes for your entry...Caressa_08
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Yes, I did not realize that I was posting this poem on Mother's Day until I saw other poets' tribute to their mothers. Thank you for your generous, six star review and for wishing me best wishes for the contest. God Bless.
Comment from Scarbrems
A wonderful story told in poetic form. The likening of your mother to a mythical bird is very well done:
'Like the egg on the back
and then in the beak of Sankofa,
my mother carried me first in her womb
and then on her back
until she could carry me no more'
That sums up motherhood, doesn't it?
I'm sorry your mother is no longer with you, she sounds like a great woman, a positive force in your life.
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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A wonderful story told in poetic form. The likening of your mother to a mythical bird is very well done:
'Like the egg on the back
and then in the beak of Sankofa,
my mother carried me first in her womb
and then on her back
until she could carry me no more'
That sums up motherhood, doesn't it?
I'm sorry your mother is no longer with you, she sounds like a great woman, a positive force in your life.
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Yes, Sarkems, I am a storyteller more than I am a poet. I am glad I told her story in poetic form and likened her to the Sankofa bird. She was a great woman and a positive force in my life. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Ulla
This is a beautiful poem telling a story within. It's also a lovely tribute not only to mother's day but also in remembrance of your mother. Good luck with in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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This is a beautiful poem telling a story within. It's also a lovely tribute not only to mother's day but also in remembrance of your mother. Good luck with in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Thank you, Ulla, for your review. It just occurred to me as I was posting it that today was Mother's Day. I am glad that I finally wrote a great poem for my mother. Thank you for wishing me all the best.
Comment from LisaD123
This reads like a 'dance poem' and it is easy to see where the movement will come from. The imagery is very strong and the reader can make links with the different parts of the poem and with their own lives. The use of alliteration is highly effective. Good luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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This reads like a 'dance poem' and it is easy to see where the movement will come from. The imagery is very strong and the reader can make links with the different parts of the poem and with their own lives. The use of alliteration is highly effective. Good luck for the contest.
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Thank you, Lisa, for your generous, six star review. I am glad you found the imagery of my 'dance poem' to be strong and that you can make links not only to different parts of the poem but to your own life. Thanks again.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is a great story in a poem, Cis Cat, and I can imagine you reciting it.As I read noting that the dance is involved, I could also see the dancers in the background. Without any personal experience, admittedly, I still felt the poem lent itself strongly to dance. I couldn't find anything to adjust - seems perfect. My very best wishes for the competition, Giddy
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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This is a great story in a poem, Cis Cat, and I can imagine you reciting it.As I read noting that the dance is involved, I could also see the dancers in the background. Without any personal experience, admittedly, I still felt the poem lent itself strongly to dance. I couldn't find anything to adjust - seems perfect. My very best wishes for the competition, Giddy
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Thank you, Giddy, for your generous, six star review. I had to push myself to write a poem that women could danced. I saw the photographs of the jellyfish costumes dancers wore when a poet wrote an ode to jellyfish. I can only imagine what they would do for my poem about the Sankofa bird. Thank you for your review.
Comment from William Ross
very good and very nicely done, sankofa is a written in a good free verse style has a great rhythm when reda, Great job on this and have a wonderful day
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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very good and very nicely done, sankofa is a written in a good free verse style has a great rhythm when reda, Great job on this and have a wonderful day
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Thank you, William, for your generous review of my free verse poem. Your review cheered me. Have a wonderful day, too.
Comment from John Parkin
I enjoyed the verses as they made your journey from womb to tomb as they say. She was true to her culture and nurtured the best she could and as much as we try to ignore, deep down we listen. It may have been to late to appreciate the living but she made her point and her culture carries on. Great job and I look forward to reading more of your work.
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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I enjoyed the verses as they made your journey from womb to tomb as they say. She was true to her culture and nurtured the best she could and as much as we try to ignore, deep down we listen. It may have been to late to appreciate the living but she made her point and her culture carries on. Great job and I look forward to reading more of your work.
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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Thank you, John, for your generous, six star review of my womb to tomb poem. My mother "was true to her culture and nurtured the best she could>" I am humble and grateful that I finally learned the lessons she was trying to teach me. Thanks again.
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Your are most welcome.
