Souls Flying!
Palindrome-Poetry Potlatch Challenge32 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Michael,
Your artwork and well-written words pair perfectly. You did an amazing job with the palindrome format. Your arrangement of words on each line is awesome. You did more than just reverse the lines. You used the same words but in a different meaning as you placed them on each line. That shows a skillful approach to this difficult format.
Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Michael,
Your artwork and well-written words pair perfectly. You did an amazing job with the palindrome format. Your arrangement of words on each line is awesome. You did more than just reverse the lines. You used the same words but in a different meaning as you placed them on each line. That shows a skillful approach to this difficult format.
Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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So delighted you liked this, Janny. This was the best fun considering how scary it was. LOL
Well, we all did it. That will show everyone who the baddest poets on the site are. HA! Thanks so much. mikey
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Mikey!
This is tremendous! (Ok, I'm cheating, I just had to look before I started dinner lol) You did a completely awesome job with this in such a short amount of time.
I actually had to read it twice to catch your spot of reversal, what a smooth transition!
Excellent work!!
Kim
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Hi Mikey!
This is tremendous! (Ok, I'm cheating, I just had to look before I started dinner lol) You did a completely awesome job with this in such a short amount of time.
I actually had to read it twice to catch your spot of reversal, what a smooth transition!
Excellent work!!
Kim
Comment Written 07-May-2016
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I was actually terrified of this. HAHAHA! Nothing scares me either. Whew! I'm so pleased you enjoyed and thrilled that all of us did so well. What a crew! Yep, I wrote this the same way you wrote yours. I think it's the hard way, but I also think it's the best. :)) mikey
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So, what is the verdict? Are we doing it again next week? lol I do try not to burst my brain more than once in a month... and this is my second, as I did one in April, too lol Oh, and so did you!
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Hey... I think this article on word unit palindromes will interest you!
http://digitalcommons.butler.edu/cgi/viewcontent.cgi?article=3305&context=wordways
I also found another cool alternative - Line Unit Palindromes
The following Line Unit Palindrome Poem reads from the first line to the last as it does from the last line to the first. It was written by James A. Lindon and was first published in Dmitri Borgmann's Beyond Language (1967).
Entering the lonely house with my wife
I saw him for the first time
Peering furtively from behind a bush ?
Blackness that moved,
A shape amid the shadows,
A momentary glimpse of gleaming eyes
Revealed in the ragged moon.
A closer look (he seemed to turn) might have
Put him to flight forever ?
I dared not
For reasons that I failed to understand,
Though I knew I should act at once.
I puzzled over it, hiding alone,
Watching the woman as she neared the gate.
He came, and I saw him crouching
Night after night.
Night after night
He came, and I saw him crouching,
Watching the woman as she neared the gate.
I puzzled over it, hiding alone ?
Though I knew I should act at once,
For reasons that I failed to understand
I dared not
Put him to flight forever.
A closer look (he seemed to turn) might have
Revealed in the ragged moon
A momentary glimpse of gleaming eyes
A shape amid the shadows,
Blackness that moved.
Peering furtively from behind a bush,
I saw him, for the first time
Entering the lonely house with my wife.
Just thought I'd share! :)
Kim
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A great article. It seems like such an unpoetic form, but editing is unpoetic really. And there were some really nice pieces written, so maybe it's just the difficulty and the feeling of it being a task. It does produce some nice work. But I'd rather just let the words FLY!
Comment from LIJ Red
Some send souls flying, some aircraft, some predators, but all make it read both ways. And so far, each has his/her own flavor of excellence.
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Some send souls flying, some aircraft, some predators, but all make it read both ways. And so far, each has his/her own flavor of excellence.
Comment Written 07-May-2016
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A surprisingly successful collection of pieces yours included. I'm happy to say we're doing something ELSE next week. But we somehow all managed to knock one of these out. Not bad. :))
mikey
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, I don't know much about this type of poetry, as a matter of fact, nothing at all. I guess the idea is different, and a challenge to some degree, but you can't prove it by me. Thanks for another interesting poem form. :-)
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Well, I don't know much about this type of poetry, as a matter of fact, nothing at all. I guess the idea is different, and a challenge to some degree, but you can't prove it by me. Thanks for another interesting poem form. :-)
Comment Written 07-May-2016
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For all the talk and fear and all that, it looks like we all just knocked it off like nothing. HAHAHA! Glad you liked it. Something more sane next week. Hope to see you there. mikey
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is a good write, mikey. It seems we scared everyone (almost) off with this. It wasn't quite as hard as I thought, or I was just lucky to pick something that worked. Thank again for all your work on these challenges. They are a lot of fun, my friend. Have a terrific night~Debbie
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This is a good write, mikey. It seems we scared everyone (almost) off with this. It wasn't quite as hard as I thought, or I was just lucky to pick something that worked. Thank again for all your work on these challenges. They are a lot of fun, my friend. Have a terrific night~Debbie
Comment Written 07-May-2016
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You know, Debbie, I'll be darned if most of the people took the challenge and beat it. I'm just so thrilled and impressed by everyone's effort. WOW! This is no easy task and we all did it.
I think we're all discovering that we are way better than we think we are. And that's a great thing to know. Thanks so much. Glad you could join us again. We're just so cool. mikey
Comment from ciliverde
Oh wow, you've done it again! What makes this really spectacular is changing the line breaks and while the words are in exactly reverse order, they kind of don't appear to be. It gives in a strange mysticism as the same words say something that's quite different.
Honestly, this is beautiful, telling of the soul's solitary nature, as we're each locked inside our own reality - but some of us search, endlessly, for that kindred soul.
"There is only soul,
one searching onward,
ever flying."
And so...a contrived form becomes something meaningful, ethereal, and amazing - just like that!
Hmmm...we might just have to dub you Mikey, King of the Palindrome (lol - kidding).
I'm feeling compelled to try more of them just because I struggled so hard to write mine. I could tell my brain was working in a new way it wasn't used to! That's good :)
Carol
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Oh wow, you've done it again! What makes this really spectacular is changing the line breaks and while the words are in exactly reverse order, they kind of don't appear to be. It gives in a strange mysticism as the same words say something that's quite different.
Honestly, this is beautiful, telling of the soul's solitary nature, as we're each locked inside our own reality - but some of us search, endlessly, for that kindred soul.
"There is only soul,
one searching onward,
ever flying."
And so...a contrived form becomes something meaningful, ethereal, and amazing - just like that!
Hmmm...we might just have to dub you Mikey, King of the Palindrome (lol - kidding).
I'm feeling compelled to try more of them just because I struggled so hard to write mine. I could tell my brain was working in a new way it wasn't used to! That's good :)
Carol
Comment Written 07-May-2016
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It is a compulsion to get one just right. LOL
I hope I have it out of my system, these things are soooo hard.
Wow. These are words I think I'll start every morning with. WOW! I'm thrilled you enjoyed this so much. I'm surprised it came out so good since we were under the time thing. Thanks so much. mikey
Comment from catch22
Hi Mikey, what a clever palindrome poem due to the clever use of punctuation to guide the reader to a new view of the two halves of the poem. Very clever and I do believe the whole poem is a palindrome, rather than just selected lines. Great work!
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Hi Mikey, what a clever palindrome poem due to the clever use of punctuation to guide the reader to a new view of the two halves of the poem. Very clever and I do believe the whole poem is a palindrome, rather than just selected lines. Great work!
Comment Written 07-May-2016
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Yes, that was our challenge today. It is an entire palindrome. Gloria beat me by seconds for time. We both finished in about 17 minutes. She wrote an excellent one too, well, if you think mine is good. :))
I'm so pleased you liked this. It's a challenging form and I've struggled with it. It's just so unpoetic to work with. Thanks so much. I think my headache has gone away. mikey
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You're very welcome and I did enjoy the poem. It met the contest requirements perfectly.
Comment from patcelaw
Michael it looks like you have a little better handle on the palindrome poetry.. With me fighting a lot of pain, I just cannot concentrate on trying this format. You can call me a quitter, but my mind will just not work around this format right now. Boo. Patricia
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Michael it looks like you have a little better handle on the palindrome poetry.. With me fighting a lot of pain, I just cannot concentrate on trying this format. You can call me a quitter, but my mind will just not work around this format right now. Boo. Patricia
Comment Written 07-May-2016
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I got lucky I think. No worries, Patricia. I know for a fact you're no quitter, my friend. That pain is no joke. Nothing worse. I used to get tooth aches and I could tell you my name sometimes they were so bad. Thanks for the kind words. You're always welcome, so whenever you feel up to it, toss your hat right in. Hugs, mikey
Comment from foxangie123
You rock it above and beyond every single time. I voted one of yours as first place recently because they are all exceptional just like this...l
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You rock it above and beyond every single time. I voted one of yours as first place recently because they are all exceptional just like this...l
Comment Written 07-May-2016
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I didn't enter anything that you could vote for. You must mean that other mikey, the one that eats the cereal....
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mikey
A difficult form which you made look easy, :)) Excellent presentation and outside the box on the theme. Great commentary! Short but sweet and certainly shows great wit. I have no idea if mine is correct ... just about to post, I didn't think I'd have internet connection, so I'm stoked!! :))) I had fun, though the practice one I wrote while waiting for Phyllis to drop the net was better, I hope to post tonight. Mothers Day today, so off on the long distance trek to my mother's.
Really an excellent job for the challenge. Huge hugs - Lovi xoxoxox
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Hi Mikey
A difficult form which you made look easy, :)) Excellent presentation and outside the box on the theme. Great commentary! Short but sweet and certainly shows great wit. I have no idea if mine is correct ... just about to post, I didn't think I'd have internet connection, so I'm stoked!! :))) I had fun, though the practice one I wrote while waiting for Phyllis to drop the net was better, I hope to post tonight. Mothers Day today, so off on the long distance trek to my mother's.
Really an excellent job for the challenge. Huge hugs - Lovi xoxoxox
Comment Written 07-May-2016
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Hi, Love
Happy Mother's Day!
Glad you enjoyed. This was terrifying but fun. I loved yours. I'm going to try one like that. Very innovative and looks like it could be a blast to do. I think it's harder than this though.
Thanks a million. Tell Mom, Mikey says hi! Show her my picture and say we're married. LOL Then for her mother's day present you can say, "Just kidding." HAHAHAHA!! mikey
