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Comment from heyjude
Judy, It is interesting to see how a story build... layer upon layer..
chapter upon chapter. I hope to read more and figure things
out. Looking forward to the next read.
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Judy, It is interesting to see how a story build... layer upon layer..
chapter upon chapter. I hope to read more and figure things
out. Looking forward to the next read.
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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thank you. so often we have a hard time stopping to read a chapter in a book. It confuses us. I want to hear their next chapter but how do I know the rest of the story. I so appreciate that you are reading this. It takes Patience.
Comment from royowen
I'm not sure who Mac Murphy is or was, but I gather something happened to Him/her. The description and the apparent omniscient delivery of the plot was good, each character's thoughts and interaction was reminiscent of a class reunion although this sounds like an investigation. Yes it was most enjoyable to read, as it is a series a synopsis would be good. The characters were strongly presented, and smoothly written, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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I'm not sure who Mac Murphy is or was, but I gather something happened to Him/her. The description and the apparent omniscient delivery of the plot was good, each character's thoughts and interaction was reminiscent of a class reunion although this sounds like an investigation. Yes it was most enjoyable to read, as it is a series a synopsis would be good. The characters were strongly presented, and smoothly written, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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You are so right, since you don't know the story I need to write a synopsis to help those of you who are jumping into the story. I will do that now. Thank you for the strong reviews.
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Most welcome
Comment from Ulla
Hi Jusely, So the story continues and the characters develop more and more. That Joe is so sleek and what is it with Mary? Well, I'll have to wait and see.
The sentence: 'Just as she started to reach for the door' . I would omit 'Just' and ;started to'. They are filler words. 'As she reached the door' or you could say 'Just before she reached the door'. It's just a suggestion, but I think it reads better. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Hi Jusely, So the story continues and the characters develop more and more. That Joe is so sleek and what is it with Mary? Well, I'll have to wait and see.
The sentence: 'Just as she started to reach for the door' . I would omit 'Just' and ;started to'. They are filler words. 'As she reached the door' or you could say 'Just before she reached the door'. It's just a suggestion, but I think it reads better. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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I think you are right. I will go back and change that. please all let me know when something fills wrong. Learning more every day.
Comment from Helen Bach
Oh wow, I hadn't relished this little gem was waiting to be read. I am so enjoying your story. I love he the characters are developing further.
Joey's behaviour is so consistent of a psychopath, growing now in confidence to the point of grandiosity (thinking he is irresistible to women)and enjoying the attention he is getting. Getting careless in his overconfidence by sending notes. I suspect one set back or rejection would send him crashing back to the weak man he is.
A most gripping read. Yay x
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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Oh wow, I hadn't relished this little gem was waiting to be read. I am so enjoying your story. I love he the characters are developing further.
Joey's behaviour is so consistent of a psychopath, growing now in confidence to the point of grandiosity (thinking he is irresistible to women)and enjoying the attention he is getting. Getting careless in his overconfidence by sending notes. I suspect one set back or rejection would send him crashing back to the weak man he is.
A most gripping read. Yay x
Comment Written 06-May-2016
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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Yes, I think you might be right, on the way to work this morning I thought of something that would throw the detectives off. This story just builds itself.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Ten minutes later Mary set at the desk in the main office[r].
You have a typo in that line Judy. She should have listened to Delaney's advice about not going off with anyone. That was a foolish thing to do and if she continues ignoring his advice it might come back and bite her. Well done! Nancy
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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Ten minutes later Mary set at the desk in the main office[r].
You have a typo in that line Judy. She should have listened to Delaney's advice about not going off with anyone. That was a foolish thing to do and if she continues ignoring his advice it might come back and bite her. Well done! Nancy
Comment Written 06-May-2016
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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thank you so much for that spag. I love when people show he the ones I don't see. Yep, Mary is on a bad path. we will see.
Comment from winnona
Your story is becoming like a weekly program that you can not wait for te next one. I am enjoying reading it as it progresses. your choice of words and detail make the story very realistic
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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Your story is becoming like a weekly program that you can not wait for te next one. I am enjoying reading it as it progresses. your choice of words and detail make the story very realistic
Comment Written 06-May-2016
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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What a great compliment you just gave me. Thank you so much.
Comment from Douglas Paul
I like the way this story is unfolding. Joe is becoming more real and you developed Mary nicely in this chapter. I also like the way your broadened out the characters with the introduction of the class and some info on each of them. Good job, Judy
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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I like the way this story is unfolding. Joe is becoming more real and you developed Mary nicely in this chapter. I also like the way your broadened out the characters with the introduction of the class and some info on each of them. Good job, Judy
Comment Written 06-May-2016
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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Thank you, Having never written this kind of thing before, I am having a blast. So much fun discovering who all these people are..
Comment from Jonadab Ezerie
You write wonderfully, well thought out and clearly articulated story .Your work is so expressive with well-chosen words.Keep up the good work
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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You write wonderfully, well thought out and clearly articulated story .Your work is so expressive with well-chosen words.Keep up the good work
Comment Written 05-May-2016
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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thank you for continuing to read this. I have never done this before and it is such a challenge.
Comment from foxangie123
I may have the button but it is out of order for now. I so enjoy reading your great works of art as I have read a couple today. This is your forte. Keep em coming doll.
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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I may have the button but it is out of order for now. I so enjoy reading your great works of art as I have read a couple today. This is your forte. Keep em coming doll.
Comment Written 05-May-2016
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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thank you , I have never done this before and it is such a challenge.
