Tales Of A Leaf
True nature of a leaf in relation to mankind21 total reviews
Comment from WalkerMan
This is a thought-provoking story. On the technical side, you might want to space your punctuation in a more standard way (xxx, xxx). Also, the word "too" in "They too asked" does not belong, as they asked a different question. Anyway, even though I'm not fond of free verse, I like this one.
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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This is a thought-provoking story. On the technical side, you might want to space your punctuation in a more standard way (xxx, xxx). Also, the word "too" in "They too asked" does not belong, as they asked a different question. Anyway, even though I'm not fond of free verse, I like this one.
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Thank you I really appreciate your review
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You are welcome. -- Mike
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Can you please suggest what I may use to replace"too"
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Just take it out. Put a period after "there" in the line above it. Also, please put a space between "on," and "asked" in line 9, and remove spaces before commas and periods elsewhere (xxx, xxx is the correct pattern). You write well, so don't let little things detract from that. -- Mike
Comment from MizKat
Hi SH,
This poem has really been written well. I enjoyed it from beginning to end. It's nice that you've been writing poetry since you were 16. I think I was about that age when I started writing them too.
MizKat
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Hi SH,
This poem has really been written well. I enjoyed it from beginning to end. It's nice that you've been writing poetry since you were 16. I think I was about that age when I started writing them too.
MizKat
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Thank you I really appreciate your review
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I'm glad that you appreciate my reviews. I really look forward to reading your work. MizKat
Comment from Marykelly
I may be reading more into this poem than intended, but to me the leaf that started its life at the top of the tree and traveled down to the ground is a metaphor for the cycle of life. Once it reaches the ground it will help enrich the soil for new life. Not mentioning the name of the tree to me, speaks of the universality of beginning, middle, end, renewal.
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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I may be reading more into this poem than intended, but to me the leaf that started its life at the top of the tree and traveled down to the ground is a metaphor for the cycle of life. Once it reaches the ground it will help enrich the soil for new life. Not mentioning the name of the tree to me, speaks of the universality of beginning, middle, end, renewal.
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Excellent Mary :) thank you for your unique review
Comment from chcbeck
I like the flow and repetition through out your poem. I think leaves are under rated. Thank you for sharing your lovely words.
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I like the flow and repetition through out your poem. I think leaves are under rated. Thank you for sharing your lovely words.
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Thank you once again
Comment from Senyai
Sealord Hunter, this reminds me of a child's poem. Repetitious just enough to be like a little song. I enjoyed it to the fullest. Presented nicely with a lovely photo to accompany.
Perhaps a little tweak is needed on one line...not sure if you meant leaf or not...
And every leave it landed on,asked "where are you going ?"
Have a great Sunday,
Senyai
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Sealord Hunter, this reminds me of a child's poem. Repetitious just enough to be like a little song. I enjoyed it to the fullest. Presented nicely with a lovely photo to accompany.
Perhaps a little tweak is needed on one line...not sure if you meant leaf or not...
And every leave it landed on,asked "where are you going ?"
Have a great Sunday,
Senyai
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Thank you I appreciate it
Comment from dmt1967
This is a well-written poem. I love the lines, 'And high up in the canopy of the forest New leaves grow on great trees.' Are you saying good kids come from great parents? Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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This is a well-written poem. I love the lines, 'And high up in the canopy of the forest New leaves grow on great trees.' Are you saying good kids come from great parents? Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Thanks for the review I love it .This poem has a great metaphor behind it wish makes its meaning very diverse. Thanks for the review I love it .
Yes it could mean that
Comment from amada
I love leaves, they hold a profound impact on me...long story. So I started reading your work here and I find it delightful, a new and fresh intake in the life of a leaf, with a great metaphor as well.
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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I love leaves, they hold a profound impact on me...long story. So I started reading your work here and I find it delightful, a new and fresh intake in the life of a leaf, with a great metaphor as well.
Comment Written 06-May-2016
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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Thank you for the heartfelt review
Comment from heyjude
Sealord, nicely done. I like that about where are
you going? Where all good leaves go. I'm come
from a place where all good leaves come from.
Your green fond and background highlights your poem
wonderfully.
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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Sealord, nicely done. I like that about where are
you going? Where all good leaves go. I'm come
from a place where all good leaves come from.
Your green fond and background highlights your poem
wonderfully.
Comment Written 06-May-2016
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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Thank you for the heartfelt review
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A great poem. We should stop see the difference in each human being. We are all human made of flesh and blood coming from the same place and going the same path to the end.
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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A great poem. We should stop see the difference in each human being. We are all human made of flesh and blood coming from the same place and going the same path to the end.
Comment Written 06-May-2016
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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Thank you for your heartfelt comment
Comment from jonathan1
An interesting and captivating journey. Great use of imagery. I think it flows well and is easy to read. A very clever piece that is a delight to read
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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An interesting and captivating journey. Great use of imagery. I think it flows well and is easy to read. A very clever piece that is a delight to read
Comment Written 06-May-2016
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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Thank you I appreciate
