To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 43 "Pocket Change"Poems by Michael
17 total reviews
Comment from oliver818
This is a really nice poem. I really enjoyed the flow of this piece, and the way you played around with the 'penny for your thoughts' line. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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This is a really nice poem. I really enjoyed the flow of this piece, and the way you played around with the 'penny for your thoughts' line. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 24-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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Hi...-smile-
well thank you....I'm very fond of this...for no particular reason I can pinpoint but the way it makes me feel reading it.... thanks. love Michael.
Comment from Sis Cat
Wow. I enjoyed your jumble of cascade words and imagery pushing forward to your poem's conclusion. Poem feels modern, fresh. Your scattered rhymes are delicate and do not overwhelm. I enjoyed this couplet:
"magic twirls precious made from pearls
pure as music's heartbeats plural"
Your musical poem makes my heart beat.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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Wow. I enjoyed your jumble of cascade words and imagery pushing forward to your poem's conclusion. Poem feels modern, fresh. Your scattered rhymes are delicate and do not overwhelm. I enjoyed this couplet:
"magic twirls precious made from pearls
pure as music's heartbeats plural"
Your musical poem makes my heart beat.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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-smile-...well alright...thank you man. very pleased to hear that. I really like the feel of this...ah well thanks. love Michael
Comment from SheliaStarr
I enjoyed your themes and your ideas. There's a lot of visually striking images that you've painted in my mind. I think perhaps you could have an authors note to describe precisely how this was inspired, or what it all means to you, the author. But that's just a selfish wish. Great job.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016
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I enjoyed your themes and your ideas. There's a lot of visually striking images that you've painted in my mind. I think perhaps you could have an authors note to describe precisely how this was inspired, or what it all means to you, the author. But that's just a selfish wish. Great job.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016
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Hiya Shelia...-smile-
well thank you....I dont usually have a set "theme"...just where the moment takes me...but we creatures habit....I'd probably end up where I started anyway....homesick or something...-wink-...what it meant to me...-smile-...truthfully it was a longing to know what spun around in the head of a certain woman....-smile-...but..also ...this place...us.....thank you. love michael
Comment from Irish Rain
Love the feather. Made me think of Forest Gump. I scrolled down...Forest Gump, ha ha. You have a lovely style. I simply adore the line, 'magic twirls precious made from pearls'...it just glimmers. This is beautiful...Blessings....
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2016
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Love the feather. Made me think of Forest Gump. I scrolled down...Forest Gump, ha ha. You have a lovely style. I simply adore the line, 'magic twirls precious made from pearls'...it just glimmers. This is beautiful...Blessings....
Comment Written 23-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2016
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haha...thats the one I just changed....yes it reads much better now. love Forrext...or the human like him....we need way more like him...-smile-...thank you Irish....glad you enjoyed this with me. love Michael
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Have a great weekend Mr. Michael!!!!
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-smile-...okay....-headwag-...thank you...you too...-smile-
Comment from royowen
I think if one has just one friend then one has riches in friendship. In my case I have a wonderful friend, lover and a wife all rolled into one. Beautiful language Michael, the thought of a fairy tale, presumptions that they can't happen, well...maybe, beautifully written my friend, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2016
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I think if one has just one friend then one has riches in friendship. In my case I have a wonderful friend, lover and a wife all rolled into one. Beautiful language Michael, the thought of a fairy tale, presumptions that they can't happen, well...maybe, beautifully written my friend, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 23-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2016
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obviously they do happen according to your world....-smile-.....I know they do Roy....I've been there before...trying to find my way back home now....love to you my friend...michael
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Well done Michael,
Comment from Moon baby
I really like the flow of the words you used. It was catchy and clever. The flow was very good. You are creative and talented both. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016
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I really like the flow of the words you used. It was catchy and clever. The flow was very good. You are creative and talented both. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016
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Hey Baby...-smile-
well mucho gratius...catchy and clever were my cousins...i grew up with them...-smile-...woo...both...?...you sure look pretty...-smile-....love michael
Comment from Jumbo J
Hey Michael(((((((((... why stop at a penny... I'm willing to pay more for that wonderful view and combination of words that dazzle even the most moonstruck and spellbound... cast me off... voyage me as though time has no meaning for monetary after thoughts.
Really love reading your style of original Brother... always sit looking--waiting like at the end of a movie you don't want to stop... like, is there any outtakes showing?
Mesmerising-polarizing!
With our thoughts we create,
fading-feathered-fragmentation,
James.
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
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Hey Michael(((((((((... why stop at a penny... I'm willing to pay more for that wonderful view and combination of words that dazzle even the most moonstruck and spellbound... cast me off... voyage me as though time has no meaning for monetary after thoughts.
Really love reading your style of original Brother... always sit looking--waiting like at the end of a movie you don't want to stop... like, is there any outtakes showing?
Mesmerising-polarizing!
With our thoughts we create,
fading-feathered-fragmentation,
James.
Comment Written 04-May-2016
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
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ha...-smile-...thank you Bro.
yea it took me a while to get this perfect....but its one of my favorites. Its what this place did for me. I'm sure I'm not the only one...still does sometimes...penny for your thought about...? -smile- love ya Bro. Michael
Comment from MizKat
Hi Michael,
Your poem is really nice and I really enjoyed reading it. I've always love Tom Hanks too who is a wonderful actor. I remember watching this movie years ago.
Thanks for sharing the song too. I have it on full blast but it's still not really loud. I wonder what's up with that?
MizKat
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
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Hi Michael,
Your poem is really nice and I really enjoyed reading it. I've always love Tom Hanks too who is a wonderful actor. I remember watching this movie years ago.
Thanks for sharing the song too. I have it on full blast but it's still not really loud. I wonder what's up with that?
MizKat
Comment Written 04-May-2016
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
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lol...oh Momma I love you....-smile-
well I'm not sure but you make sure you turn that down before listening to another. depending on the strength of the speakers you could blow your head off...haha. yes Maam...its one of my all time favorite movies...its beautiful...he's beautiful. were getting old Mom...-smile-...love Michael
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Oh Sweet Michael,
You are still a youngster compared to this old mom. I just turned 79 on April 29th. My oldest daughter will soon be 60 in July, if I'm remembering right. My brain has a mind of its own and has decided to do what it wants. LOL
Love you, Mom
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ahhaha...love you-
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Thanks!!! Mom
Comment from Joan E.
Continuing the money theme and adding the feather... I particularly enjoyed your alliteration of "p's" and "c's" and your "Cinderella slipper-ed" image. Smiles and waltz on- Joan
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
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Continuing the money theme and adding the feather... I particularly enjoyed your alliteration of "p's" and "c's" and your "Cinderella slipper-ed" image. Smiles and waltz on- Joan
Comment Written 03-May-2016
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
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okay J...listen up. you got a long long flight ahead of you. to avoid stir crazy and what am I doing confusion...make sure you tip the stewardess with the booze cart...so she'll keep them lil' bottles coming. that should get you there in one piece...haha. Tell Mow I said hi...love ya Michael
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Thanks for the tip. I can't think of the current president's name, but I will say hi for you. Sweet dreams- Joan
Comment from Jonadab Ezerie
Great job.Nice writing style."twirls a magic made from pearls
pure as music's heartbeats plural
treasure dances a hopeful tomorrow "
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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Great job.Nice writing style."twirls a magic made from pearls
pure as music's heartbeats plural
treasure dances a hopeful tomorrow "
Comment Written 03-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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-smile-...thank you man.
always a pleasure to hear you words have resonated with others.
appreciate you saying so. big love Michael
